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Brokenhearted sunsets

It's never anything big, just a nagging defeat Of wanting to be exclusive in your ambit, For in your eyes, I see an opportune disguise Living as a friend of genuine vibes gone awry. It was the zealous-moon you adored with glee When romantic vibes you scripted about me, Fussing about moon-spot of slight imperfection Looking at my face, hinting coy comparison. When I lauded our pond's white lotus flowers You admired silence of the ripples in water Singing praises of existence so ephemeral, Never denying you compared it to our love. Being impulsive, you stole a rose from garden Handing it to me like borrowed ardent charm. As I held it in gratitude for its delicate beauty It pierced my heart with its anguished thorns. You take me places, pleasantly well-meaning But when I get there, I'm left feeling alone For you traverse a lone-orbit on your own Leaving me to tangle by your rotational force. When you ask me, if love still burns our flame, I simply want to say, love has changed its name For time has falsified what we once meant, No more can I bear brokenhearted sunsets. January 29, 2018 First place: One in five contest by Joseph May Placed 2nd: Strand select 11 by Brian Strand

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Date: 1/11/2019 7:28:00 AM
Hi Vijay, My friend, you do know how to play the heartstrings of your readers. There is such beauty within your words and images. This one comes straight from the heart. It is always such a pleasure to drop by and read your words my friend. There is always such creative pieces to read. I am glad that this was my first read this morning. A much belated congratulations on your win. Excellent work Vijay. Have a wonderful Friday. Your friend always....Mike.
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Date: 3/31/2018 4:19:00 PM
NOw this one is FIRST on your best poems list!! and I see it took first place. That was so well deserved. A belated Congratulations to you.
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Date: 3/22/2018 11:05:00 PM
"Take places..feel left alone" . Sound like ...someone wants to have their cake and eat it . Sensitive poem very well written! bbn
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Date: 3/17/2018 4:33:00 PM
Revisiting this one and I was right to love it. It's Second on your Best poems list.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/17/2018 5:24:00 PM
Thanks Andrea.
Date: 2/28/2018 6:02:00 PM
Hello Vijay, I do not like the way he treated you. I would say that his love died for you, not yours. Have a nice evening my friend.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/28/2018 6:18:00 PM
Hello Darlene.. the poem is not about me. Vijay is a male not a female. Many thanks for your thoughts. Names can be confusing.
Date: 2/28/2018 7:32:00 AM
Congratulations Vijay, on your top poem, You continue to express your themes of love in such a beautiful way. I love the title!!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/28/2018 10:52:00 AM
Thank you Mike..appreciate your comments.
Date: 2/25/2018 7:53:00 PM
Great write Vijay, unique and very expressive;-)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/25/2018 7:55:00 PM
Thank you Keith.
Date: 2/21/2018 5:04:00 AM
Creative and expressive work. Sara
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/22/2018 7:05:00 AM
Thank you Sara.
Date: 2/20/2018 9:39:00 AM
This magnificent piece is such a wonderful manifestation of your amazing talent! No wonder it was selected for the Best Poem List! BIG congratulations my friend for receiving a well-deserved honour! Hugs. Pandita
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/20/2018 9:57:00 AM
Thank you Pandita.
Date: 2/20/2018 5:53:00 AM
Oh do I relate to this poem! Beautiful imagery relays all the levels of emotion this personality pairing creates. You did an admirable job, truly brought it home along with its stinger. All the best ... CayCay
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/20/2018 6:37:00 AM
Thank you CayCay.
Date: 2/19/2018 11:43:00 AM
Wonderful poem Vijay! Congrates for your win!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/20/2018 6:36:00 AM
Thank you Shefali.
Date: 2/18/2018 3:54:00 PM
No wonder placed at the top of the best.You are so intense and so descriptive Makes me want to invite myself into your brilliant mind. If you read my "saddened you'll see me simple compared to your depth. Really enjoyed! bbn
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/18/2018 8:10:00 PM
Thank you Barbara for your visit..appreciate your comments.
Date: 2/17/2018 6:52:00 PM
Hello Vijay, we all go through pain when we lose a love one. One of you fell out of love. have a nice evening my friend.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/18/2018 8:11:00 PM
Thank you Darlene.
Date: 2/17/2018 4:41:00 PM
deeply touching beautiful penned piece vijay wishing you a blessed weekend
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/18/2018 8:10:00 PM
Thank you liam.
Date: 2/17/2018 1:56:00 AM
"You take me places...but when I get there I'm left alone." Your writing is soul-felt.
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Date: 2/17/2018 6:28:00 AM
Thank you Caren.
Date: 2/17/2018 12:15:00 AM
So sad, can feel the pain. Well written!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/25/2018 7:55:00 PM
Thank you Susan.
Date: 2/15/2018 10:53:00 PM
All the best and big congrats on your wonderful win in Joseph's contest, Vijay - blessings as always, my friend! :-)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/17/2018 6:28:00 AM
Thank you Greg.
Date: 2/14/2018 1:28:00 PM
Hi Vijay, Congratulations on your winning write and for being #2 on the new Best Poems list:-) Alexis
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/14/2018 3:29:00 PM
Thank you Alexis.
Date: 2/14/2018 10:28:00 AM
Congrats Vijay on your win, and top 5 in the best new poems, this is well done, enjoyed!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/14/2018 3:29:00 PM
Thank you John.
Date: 2/12/2018 3:04:00 PM
Back with most deserved congrats, Vijay.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/14/2018 3:28:00 PM
Thank you Line.
Date: 2/12/2018 1:47:00 PM
Wow - superb poem, Vijay. Calling this a FAVE. It hits a chord.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/14/2018 3:28:00 PM
Thank you Line.
Date: 2/7/2018 2:27:00 PM
Well-done, Vijay. Love the theme and its fits beautifully as the title of your piece. Congrats on your first place award. Well-deserved.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/9/2018 11:03:00 AM
Thank you RP.
Date: 2/7/2018 10:01:00 AM
AND congrats for your making #5 on Best new poem list :)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/9/2018 11:02:00 AM
Thank you Heidi.
Date: 2/7/2018 9:14:00 AM
Congratulations for your win Vijay!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/9/2018 11:02:00 AM
Thank you Heidi.
Date: 2/6/2018 4:35:00 PM
Such an outstanding and very emotional poem, Vijay. Congratulations on your placement! Sandra
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/9/2018 11:01:00 AM
Thank you Sandra.
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