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Broken Bleeding Heart

"When everything that ticked—has stopped— And Space stares—all around— Or Grisly frosts—first Autumn morns, Repeal the Beating Ground—" Emily Dickinson I can't hear the beat of my own heart, it was silenced between the gasps of your last breaths and the touch of time as they stripped you of life. I remember standing there holding your hands as they fell from grip, resting atop your chest. I still see you there, like a shadow on a moonlit wall, distorted darkness that bends in the wind's call. The trees dance in its gossamer breath, much like my mind in its recollection, as their leaves twirl around and then spiral down towards the ground. They are more grounded than I am these days, I seem to get lost in the frame of memories that Autumn always brings forth. I hear you whisper my name in fragmented frames of mind as I bleed August across the folds of life and death. drops of crimson fall like autumn leaves upon ground my heart bleeds the same July 20, 2019 Writing Challenge 2, July 2019- Melancholy- Poetry Contest Sponsored by Dear Heart

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Date: 8/2/2019 5:55:00 AM
Congrats! What a fantastic, beautiful and wondrous poem. Thanks for sharing! -JWE
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Sandra Adams
Date: 8/2/2019 6:47:00 AM
Thank you JW :) hugs
Date: 7/30/2019 1:08:00 PM
Your consistency makes your already wonderful craft majestic. Yet another lovely piece. This is really great..
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Date: 7/30/2019 7:25:00 PM
Thank you so much for the visit and your kind comment :) hugs
Date: 7/27/2019 2:41:00 PM
Hi Sandra, Congrats. on a truly excellent write - majestic, sad but beautiful! Hugs, Jennifer.
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Date: 7/27/2019 5:12:00 PM
Thank you Jennifer...sometimes my muse does well with challenges, other times not, but i have two other poems that i fed off a famous poets quote, or part of their poem that took top spots as well... hugs :)
Date: 7/25/2019 9:15:00 AM
Another majestic write Sandy, I am in awe of this masterpiece of melancholy, definitely a worthy winner!
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Date: 7/26/2019 10:08:00 AM
Thank you so much John :) hugs
Date: 7/25/2019 6:47:00 AM
Congratulations Sandra, beautiful poem. fav too.
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Date: 7/26/2019 9:24:00 AM
Thank you Georgia for your kind comment and making my poem a fave :) hugs
Date: 7/24/2019 12:13:00 PM
Sandra, congratulations on your win in my writing challenge with this emotional and so beautifully sad Haibun, this was exceptional writing - well done !
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Date: 7/25/2019 8:18:00 AM
Thank you so much for hosting the contest and my win along with your kind words. Hugs :)
Date: 7/24/2019 9:07:00 AM
Congrats Sandra on your top win with your poignant poem.
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Date: 7/26/2019 10:09:00 AM
Thank you Jeanne :) hugs
Date: 7/23/2019 9:29:00 PM
Congrats, Sandra, on your win in the contest with this unique approach to 'beautiful sandness.' Richly deserved. Best wishes, Gershon
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Date: 7/23/2019 7:21:00 PM
Sandra, your potent pen held my heart captive in the melancholy mood of your dramatic and breathtaking poem. The sad beauty of your haiku is a poignant finale to an exquisite piece. Congratulations on your excellent win in Dear Heart’s contest. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
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Sandra Adams
Date: 7/26/2019 10:12:00 AM
Thank you Susan. Sometimes picking a quote from someone can feed the muse nicely. I have done a few like this! Hugs
Date: 7/22/2019 5:39:00 AM
" The trees dance in its gossamer breath, much like my mind in its recollection, as their leaves twirl around and then spiral down towards the ground." - Lovely writing!
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Sandra Adams
Date: 7/26/2019 10:13:00 AM
Thank you so much my friend :) hugs
Date: 7/21/2019 4:10:00 PM
Great storytelling Sandra..
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Sandra Adams
Date: 7/21/2019 6:08:00 PM
Thank you my friend :) hugs
Date: 7/21/2019 8:18:00 AM
A portrait poignancy done so beautifully, Sandra!
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Sandra Adams
Date: 7/21/2019 11:30:00 AM
Thank you Ralph....hugs :)
Date: 7/20/2019 8:23:00 PM
A sad write written beautifully!
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Sandra Adams
Date: 7/21/2019 11:29:00 AM
Thank you so much Kim :) hugs
Date: 7/20/2019 6:31:00 PM
Absolutely beautiful writing, a stunning haibun that reveals the talent pushing your pen. I am impressed, love this. Poetry hugs ... CayCay
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Date: 7/20/2019 6:56:00 PM
Thank you Cay Cay, not sure if you saw it before or after i changed the haiku slightly.... hugs :)

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