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Broken-Hearted Watching Helplessly

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His arms wrapped around her frail body, cradling her gently as he feels the warm sickness. Her hair clings about her sweat-soaked face as a fever burns with raging anger. A need of wet snow, to cool her brow to break the fever, he refuses to let her die. A fear within him sets, knowing she will soon die. She is his heart; he wants and needs her to survive. He holds on to her for dear life against his chest watching helplessly as the woman he has loved is dying. In his arms she lays still and quiet, her breath leaving her body to leave the world behind. 10/13/2017 Contest Name: Broken-Hearted Poems Sponsored By: Broken Wings

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Date: 10/18/2017 9:12:00 PM
Congrats!
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Date: 10/18/2017 8:43:00 AM
Eve, congratulations on your podium win for this beautiful, but so heartbreaking, poem. Well done! Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 10/18/2017 5:47:00 AM
Eve, I am so pleased to see your winning poem in first place. How very deserving for one so talented.
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Date: 10/17/2017 10:17:00 PM
Best wishes and big congrats on your well-earned win, Eve - keep up the great poetry, my friend! :-)
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Date: 10/17/2017 1:17:00 PM
Eve, congratulations on your first place win in my contest with this sad, sad write !
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Date: 10/17/2017 9:03:00 AM
Beautiful sadness, Eve...very touching! Congratulations on placing first. Regards // paul
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Date: 10/16/2017 5:25:00 PM
Congrats Eve--well deserved top win!
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Date: 10/16/2017 5:24:00 PM
Congratulations on your well deserved win Eve, this certainly pulled at the heart strings, so well written.
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Date: 10/16/2017 5:09:00 PM
Congratulations on your top win with this heart wrenching write. The reader can feel his pain.
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Date: 10/16/2017 4:42:00 PM
Hi Eve, I'm just coming back to say congratulations on your 1st place win in the "Broken Hearted Poem "contest :-) Alexis
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Date: 10/14/2017 4:36:00 PM
Wow! Eve, You have penned pure heartache. I could feel the pain in this write. You nailed it. It looks like a winner to me. I wish you the best of luck in the contest- Alexis
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Date: 10/14/2017 2:48:00 PM
ohh, painfully beautiful, eve... this was masterfully done... huggs
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Date: 10/14/2017 2:38:00 PM
Wow, that is powerful. A beautiful piece of writing.
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Date: 10/14/2017 5:46:00 AM
Full of sorrow--well written--best for a win, Eve!
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Date: 10/14/2017 2:39:00 AM
Oh this one is truly heart breaking my friend! Oh I feel this one deep into my heart, as I have felt like this before! Not quite the same exactly, but when I lost my grandmother, whom I was very close to, I felt the loss completely...and I watched her pass away before my eyes, I was with her until the end, she didn't die alone! I really enjoyed reading your illustrious poem here this morning! What a fabulous piece, truly spectacular, Great Work!!
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Date: 10/13/2017 9:58:00 PM
A very heart-breaking and helpless situation indeed Eve to watch your love's life slip away before your eyes... Great sad story-telling, beautifully done! Good luck in the contest!
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