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Bride and Doom - Qarinage

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I was elated at being your wife; we walked down the aisle both with a huge smile we’d promised we’d be together for life. ‘Twas at her request your ex was our guest. Her eyes pierced us like daggers - if looks could kill! She beckoned you over, it made me feel ill ... There would be hell to pay It had twisted her mind your rejection. We got in the car it was not too far and arrived at the wedding reception. She stood stony faced, said you’d got poor taste! You said ’look we’re through. I’ve just married Hannah, please don’t create trouble at Darkwood Manor’ There would be hell to pay She sat seething at the wedding table then in a foul rage leapt onto the stage I screamed ‘Darling, run if you are able’ ... I was so afraid She plunged in a blade Bright scarlet blood began gushing from your heart Our marriage vows said until death do us part No one thought I’d be widowed right from the start There would be hell to pay... Killed on your wedding day Sponsored by Gregory R Barden Qarinage – Any Topic poetry Contest 5/24/18

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Susan Gentry

Date: 6/15/2018 12:06:00 PM

Congratulations on your win with this suspenseful clever poem... I love it!

Anisha Dutta

Date: 6/12/2018 8:33:00 AM

CONGRATS JAN and LOVE.

Elaine George

Date: 6/12/2018 2:00:00 AM

Incredible, Jan. Many congrats on your top notch win. Elaine

Mick Talbot

Date: 6/11/2018 9:58:00 PM

Not often on the dark side but when you do its good, congratulations Jan. hugs Mick

John Hamilton

Date: 6/11/2018 2:09:00 PM

To be honest Jan...this one truly sets you apart. You are a top talent here and this poem proves it. Greg loves the dark side and your winning placement is a testament to your talent. You should do serious writes more often, humour has it's place, but don't sell yourself short by fixating on them!

Tom Cunningham

Date: 6/10/2018 9:33:00 PM

Back with congratulations Jan, well done. Tom.

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 5/26/2018 12:30:00 AM

I loved the way you built up the suspense. I wanted it to go on and on and on and on and then well, he's dead, now, isn't he? Pretty funny stuff, and so well written, Jan. Nicely done!

Jan Allison
Date: 5/26/2018 2:37:00 AM

Thanks Caren, its not often I go over to the dark side lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Judy Konos

Date: 5/25/2018 10:04:00 AM

This is fantastic!

Jan Allison
Date: 5/25/2018 10:59:00 AM

aww thanks my friend, I have come a long way since i first picked up my pen when hubby had his cancer surgery. i hope people can see there is more to me than a humourist:-) Miss you on soup my friend:-(:-(hugs Jan xx

Geoffrey Brewer

Date: 5/25/2018 6:37:00 AM

My goodness Jan! you have a dark side. Yes,I understand it’s fiction (I think). Have you considered a job with Hammer Films, though I doubt they are still around. Seriously though (what else?) congratulations on an imaginative cleverly written piece.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/25/2018 10:58:00 AM

Thanks Geoffrey I do worry about my muse lol - I wrote the first stanza and hit a brick wall as to how to continue, it took about 10 days to complete and it wasn't until i saw the Royal Wedding and Prince harry's ex was there that the ending came to me:-):-) hugs jan xx

Dale Gregory Cozart

Date: 5/24/2018 10:35:00 AM

Very melodramatic! Great story and writing.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/24/2018 10:36:00 AM

Thanks Dale, I'm not sure what Greg will make of my sad tale:-) hugs Jan xx

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 5/24/2018 9:35:00 AM

OK, the title alone is priceless - the rest is captivating, like a gothic soap opera - guilty pleasure for me!

Jan Allison
Date: 5/24/2018 9:54:00 AM

Thanks Michelle, I much prefer humour but I am gradually passing over to the dark side!:-) hugs Jan xx

Mike Gentile

Date: 5/24/2018 8:30:00 AM

WOW, what a tale, Jan!!! This is just over the top fabulous, loved it !!!

Jan Allison
Date: 5/24/2018 9:08:00 AM

I hope Greg Likes it Mike, It took me ages to get round to finishing the poem after the initial stanza was written and then I hit a brick wall with the ending :-) hugs jan xx

Agnes Krampe

Date: 5/24/2018 7:19:00 AM

Great storytelling, Jan. I love how you work with the repeated line.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/24/2018 7:23:00 AM

Thanks Agnes :-) Greg invented the form and as the poem evolved the repeated line changed from my original idea. I wrote the first stanza a few weeks ago and then hit a blank wall with the theme, it was only at the Royal Wedding where one of Prince Harry's ex's attended that I thought of the rest of the poem!:-) hugs jan xx

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 5/24/2018 5:48:00 AM

Wow! What a write, dear Jan! A breathless write of “hell to pay”

Jan Allison
Date: 5/24/2018 7:21:00 AM

Thanks Kim:-) hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 5/24/2018 4:13:00 AM

-"Life is long, happiness is short" a song by Kim Larsen -https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pHGHDCuJnhk - Excellent written, Jan - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 5/24/2018 4:37:00 AM

Thanks so much Anne Lise:-) hugs jan xx

Arthur Vaso

Date: 5/24/2018 12:48:00 AM

Now you have to know this is my kinda poetry!!!!! LOL this is a fav loved it!!!!

Jan Allison
Date: 5/24/2018 2:54:00 AM

Oh wow thanks so much Arthur I think you really must have loved seeing me go over to the dark side lol:-) hugs jan xx

Tom Cunningham

Date: 5/23/2018 9:48:00 PM

A tragic tale Jan, certainly not the happy ending like H And M. Well written and good luck. Tom. PS, love the title.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/24/2018 2:53:00 AM

I saw one of Harry's ex's in the congregation so I found the perfect ending to the poem I started about 10 days ago and struggled to finish!:-) hugs jan xx

Arturo Michael

Date: 5/23/2018 7:28:00 PM

Very theatrical...a mini show...with a power line...I like it...All the best Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 5/24/2018 2:52:00 AM

Thanks Arturo:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 5/23/2018 6:31:00 PM

A marvelous write, Jan, love the theme.. and good luck in the contest :)

Jan Allison
Date: 5/23/2018 6:33:00 PM

It's taken me ages to getting round to finishing the poem I started it nearly 2 weeks ago and hit a brick wall then got inspired when I saw Prince Harry's ex was at his wedding and my mind went into overdrive lol:-)hugs Jan xx