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Breathtaking

Beautiful inclinations came as cascading waterfalls Rushing through my mind as wind through stalks of wheat Even as this pleasure consumed its prey, I knew At that very moment, this had to be a dream. This improbable euphoria cannot be. No one Has this much wealth. No one can be propelled at This pace and not have surrendered ones senses. As I tried, with my last ounce of reason, to Know the dubious consequences of my fate, I surrendered to the plaintive wind song of this tenderness. Now I knew its meaning. To Love. Gone were my inhibitions in true triumph. Breathtaking Contest 03/10/2016

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/19/2016 1:51:00 AM

wow,what an experience that would be. Glad to have found this treasure of yours. also a belated congrats.

Charlie Smith
Date: 8/19/2016 2:15:00 AM

You had to do a little dumpster diving for that one Anfrea, thanks for taking the time,,,

Charlie Smith

Date: 3/15/2016 7:37:00 PM

Thank you so much Linda your recognition is very much appreciated

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/15/2016 6:02:00 PM

Hi Charlie, Congratulations on your "Breathtaking win." LINDA

Charlie Smith
Date: 3/15/2016 7:39:00 PM

Thank you so much Linda, your recognition is very much appreciated

John Hamilton

Date: 3/14/2016 10:23:00 AM

Just a great write Charlie, loved every line. As you said there were many outstanding entries this contest, hard to judge, but anyone can see your talent in this poem. Thanks for your contribution to a great contest! John

Charlie Smith
Date: 3/14/2016 10:50:00 AM

John, thank you for the kind words, I'm so glad to have shared them with you...

Lu Loo

Date: 3/13/2016 12:50:00 PM

Charlie, congrats on your placement in the contest :)-luloo

Charlie Smith
Date: 3/13/2016 1:55:00 PM

Thank you, Luloo

Funom Makama

Date: 3/13/2016 11:11:00 AM

Epic, wonderful and outstanding. What a great share!

Charlie Smith
Date: 3/13/2016 12:03:00 PM

How very kind of you to share your time with me. Thank you Funom, for the kindness in your note...

Dana Young

Date: 3/12/2016 2:42:00 PM

I love your poem Charlie. You have a beautiful way with words! And thank you for the kind remarks you have made on mine.

Charlie Smith
Date: 3/12/2016 2:46:00 PM

Keep writing Dana, you have a gift. Thank you for your encouraging reply.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 3/11/2016 9:46:00 PM

This poem is a stunner because of your brilliant ending Charlie. I hope to see this win big. Blessings, Connie #7

Charlie Smith
Date: 3/12/2016 6:00:00 AM

We say "we write for ourselves" but when someone remarks on your work as you have it 's special. Thank you so much, Connie, this mnans so much to me...

Jan Allison

Date: 3/11/2016 11:20:00 AM

beautifully flowing acrostic Charlie i love the way you build the poem up to the final lines:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Charlie Smith
Date: 3/11/2016 11:31:00 AM

It was a work of joy, I hope it's received that way. Thanks for the luck and the hugs...Charlie

Robert Lindley

Date: 3/11/2016 6:39:00 AM

Exceptionally gifted verses by an exceptional poet. The ten verses in between first and last verse, built this creative and thought provoking write.

Charlie Smith
Date: 3/11/2016 6:52:00 AM

My most appreciative thanks for your words. Kind thoughts to you Robert for the encouragement, Charlie