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looking through the huge black iron gates,
across the ferns and overgrown weeds,
our old family house looked at us lovingly,
like we were children coming back to old granny,
withering white paint on porch window,
like a patched up dress that lost its glow,
the door creaked as the wind rustled past,
wrecked and hanging like a flag in half mast,
our old childhood memory beckoned us in,
mum’s old kitchen with rusting biscuit tin!
gaps in slated roof for Sun to shine through,
home like a drifting ship without a crew,
is father standing at the top of the staircase?
or just an old fond wish, that we could see his face?
a wide crack ran across the rosette ceiling,
like it was showing its scar asking for healing!
the garden looked blank like it had forgotten us,
still held some broken bulbs from our Christmas!
ebbing tears made the hearth look fuzzy,
sobbing whispers as we all huddled as family!
this was the place we all grew up to be loved,
stood an orphan with no love bestowed!

 

looking through the huge black iron gates, across the ferns and overgrown weeds, our old family house looked at us lovingly, like we were children coming back to old granny, withering white paint on porch window, like a patched up dress that lost its glow, the door creaked as the wind rustled past, wrecked and hanging like a flag in half mast, our old childhood memory beckoned us in, mum’s old kitchen with rusting biscuit tin! gaps in slated roof for Sun to shine through, home like a drifting ship without a crew, is father standing at the top of the staircase? or just an old fond wish, that we could see his face? a wide crack ran across the rosette ceiling, like it was showing its scar asking for healing! the garden looked blank like it had forgotten us, still held some broken bulbs from our Christmas! ebbing tears made the hearth look fuzzy, sobbing whispers as we all huddled as family! this was the place we all grew up to be loved, stood an orphan with no love bestowed! 2nd placement Decaying House poetry contest Sponsor Constance LaFrance Date written 18/07/2020

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Date: 8/13/2021 6:23:00 AM
Really touching, Krish. I participated in this contest too - our experiences are very similar! Thanks for sharing. BW ~ Mala
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Date: 7/27/2020 4:47:00 AM
Wow Krish! I love how you've used metaphors to describe the loneliness of the house that once flourished with the love and cheerfulness of the family. Congratulations on your win! :)
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Krish Radhakrishna
Date: 7/27/2020 10:53:00 AM
Thanks Aditi! This is an image of our home from many years ago! Very happy you like it.
Date: 7/25/2020 9:31:00 AM
Kris, congratulations on your win in my decaying house contest with this wonderful write _Constance
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Date: 7/25/2020 10:20:00 AM
Thanks Constance! Your theme was most inspiring! It took me back to my house where me and my sisters and brother spent our childhood!
Date: 7/23/2020 12:10:00 PM
Hello Krish sir, Last line evokes sadness.Beautiful imageries overloaded:-)liked the title too..!! Congratulations on your win:-)Keep inspiring. Take care.Warmest regards~Deepa.:-)
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Date: 7/23/2020 12:13:00 PM
Dear Deepa Thank you very much. I am glad you liked it. I always like your lovely feedback. Thanks once again.
Date: 7/19/2020 3:31:00 PM
Brilliant imagery Krish. i especially like "withering white paint on porch window, like a patched up dress that lost its glow" Many congratulations on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 7/21/2020 10:54:00 PM
Dear Jan Thanks very much! A decaying house is always a hurtful sight! Hugs from me!
Date: 7/18/2020 3:35:00 PM
The brushes of your pen have created a canvas of stunning beauty my friend, Krish. Blessings
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Date: 7/18/2020 3:57:00 PM
Demetrios, Thanks! Much obliged. Value your wisdom and comments! God bless!:)

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