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Bird Cleaning

Birds scrubbing the winter's time, Traded in the cold for so long, As the first rhythm of spring makes the rain— They sing in as they drop ostracizing muck. Traded in the cold for so long, By the dark synthesis of my soul They sing in as they drop ostracizing muck— Their wings feverish as flower bulbs. By the dark synthesis of my soul, As the first rhythm of spring makes the rain, Their wings feverish as flower bulbs— Birds scrubbing the winter's time.

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Date: 3/20/2024 4:49:00 PM
I don't see how the birds make it, but they do. It is so good to see them back in the spring, preparing the nests and singing their glorious tunes. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Sara K
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Date: 3/14/2024 10:29:00 AM
Nice pantoum Paige. :)
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Date: 2/20/2024 3:59:00 PM
This pantoum has some cool lines in it. I bet you are s bird lover. I didn't find you on 4 by 4. I guess you didn't enter that contest. Sorry where my comment appeared twice. When I am on cell phone , I can't always delete things
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Date: 2/20/2024 12:53:00 PM
Dear Paige, Your poem exudes a profound sense of introspection, infused with a delicate anticipation and an earnest longing - beautifully crafted.
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Date: 2/20/2024 12:53:00 PM
So much vivid imagery in this one and you did this pantoum very well...
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Date: 2/20/2024 11:51:00 AM
"Feverish as flower bulb!" What a great image of the energy in bulbs ready to bloom, Paige! Your imagination is so creative as you picture "ostracizing muck" and feverish wings. Nicely written pantoum. Time to clean out the bird feeder! Blessings!
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Date: 2/20/2024 11:17:00 AM
You composed your pantoum very well. not easy but you did well.
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Date: 2/15/2024 11:58:00 AM
meditative, imbued with expectancy and yearning - nicely written
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Date: 2/14/2024 8:46:00 PM
They sing in as they drop ostracizing muck…yuck…lol. Fun read!
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Paige Hind
Date: 2/14/2024 10:11:00 PM
Hey, I meant 'muck' as dirt, lol. They are rinsing winter's muck in the spring's rain, the muck that ostracized them to the cold .Thanks for your comment. :)
Date: 2/14/2024 7:51:00 PM
Such a great poem with a nice subject matter and wonderful imagery, Paige
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