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plausible patience petered out awareness inverted beyond the setting sun alongside mirror images of it's rise taking talking into trance like states situated wildly off centre for viability beneath a reflection is nothing but longing an untouched ache of a dimension that is prismatic and primordial inescapably unreal a level that echoes with heroic endeavour substance scented as the familiar to hold you in chains for the fretful feature strongly as the soil beneath your feet tension builds until taut or snaps don't tell me there's a spider under the table carry on regardless just like so many other creatures trembling hands serve no purpose tentative minds linger too long chaos creeps into the crevices and spaces speaking of the art of safe seclusion unknowing whispers whirlpool lives away I too am guilty of gazing into the middle distance placated by promises that I don't own paid for with chances I didn't take

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Date: 1/6/2024 4:46:00 AM
Quite a brilliant poem DD...one that ushers you in and keeps you entranced and lost in almost every line.
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Di11y Da11y
Date: 1/7/2024 3:05:00 AM
You know I'll leap on the 'almost' haha you're right of course there's a few lines that stick a little. It's not a style I used to do, but it's quite a mindful pursuit to write letting words flow from some other place (more so than usual). Glad you liked it x
Date: 1/1/2024 12:55:00 AM
Love it.
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Di11y Da11y
Date: 1/1/2024 1:16:00 AM
It's a bit of a free style dance this one, probably with scarves, to a Kate Bush song haha. The bare footed leaping around type of a poem :)
Date: 12/28/2023 7:19:00 PM
substance scented as the familiar/ to hold you in chains - you can build other worlds off some of these lines - beautiful
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Di11y Da11y
Date: 12/29/2023 9:13:00 AM
Poetic commentary - always a delight :) thank you
Date: 12/28/2023 3:34:00 PM
an outstanding poem with some many lines I liked. This one resonated with me "placated by promises that I don't own." Wow...how true that is! Such depth to this poem that I want to re-read it to absorb all the nuances you've touched upon. Have a great evening, Sara
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Di11y Da11y
Date: 12/29/2023 9:14:00 AM
Thank you for a lovely comment Sara, I appreciate the time you spend with my poetry. Much appreciated x
Date: 12/28/2023 12:29:00 PM
WOW!!! A creative write/story/great ending. Yes, many chances we pay for but we never take. More to life. "Happy New Year 2024".................
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Di11y Da11y
Date: 12/28/2023 12:34:00 PM
Thank you Paula, appreciated x
Date: 12/28/2023 7:59:00 AM
This deep poem has so much meaning for our busy lives. I liked "beyond the setting sun alongside mirror images of its rise taking talking into trance like states". Once again, you've written a superb poem
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 12/28/2023 3:33:00 PM
the Power of Myth, Di11y? That book was a game changer for me....enjoy it
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Di11y Da11y
Date: 12/28/2023 11:54:00 AM
Thank you Hilda, I'd just been watching a bit of The Power of Myth and got carried away :)

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