Bereaved

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I wonder why bereaved people even bother with mourning clothes when the grief itself provides such an unmistakable wardrobe. Jandy Nelson
What I scribe assists and soothes the pain. Conceal my thoughts and jam in my silence. A sense of agony overwhelms you to complain.  Hardships from upshots or few guidance. And the sorrow of collapse wager plain. I cannot let wend my frozen dreams. It filled my ego with scars from the past. steadily nagging me, or so it seems. It filled the vacuum with a mournful cast. Delight fades away as smoke streams. Spirits forth from might speak as a rancor. Yet, nothing helped ease my sadness. I suck in poison and crush out the clanger. sick with grief, bearing with his madness. Allow for the capture of whacks in anger. The pause is broken, and the repeat is endless. bleeding wounds, bringing eternal death. Leave juicy tears of joy alone and friendless. If you breathe in thickly, gasp your last breath. My glimpse, soiled by each blink, was restless. I retain moving forward and looking back. Smile and laugh through the loneliness. Lay my spirit on the soil, on a one-way track. Write the facts again, hope for the wilderness. Colors explode in a somber, limitless crack. Return me to the realm betwixt eternal life. Deny the facts that bind me afar of sight. At this point, my lifeless face is blind to strife. Thumps cry; all is gone; admit it; adopt flight. Life's seed was lost at sea as a clasping knife.
Written: January 28, 2023 Writing Challenge - B Word Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Constance La France

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Date: 2/4/2023 7:54:00 AM
Sotto, amazing poem, quote, music and image, and congratulations on your win in my Writing Challenge B Words, well done, Constance
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Date: 2/2/2023 1:28:00 PM
A captivating moving write Sotto, congratulations on your win in Constance’s contest - “Grief is a souvenir of love lost, forever on one’s heart embossed.” Quote my own… Belle
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Date: 2/2/2023 10:02:00 AM
Congratulations on your win, Lasaad!
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Date: 2/1/2023 8:15:00 PM
Back to your poem with Congratulations on your well deserved first place win dear friend !
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Date: 2/1/2023 1:57:00 PM
Way to go with this winner. Great Congratulations for you. Sara
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Date: 2/1/2023 8:14:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. WOW!!! What a write/story. I really enjoyed this one. Have a blessed day..........
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Date: 2/1/2023 6:33:00 AM
Grief overwhelms us, Congrats on your win Sotto, Very nicely done
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Date: 2/1/2023 2:35:00 AM
A superbly written emotional poem, a huge congratulations
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Date: 1/29/2023 12:21:00 AM
Bereavement brings "bleeding wounds, bringing eternal death." The poignancy of your poem deeply touches. But we cannot forever be steeped in gloom . We have' to smile and laugh through the loneliness'. We have to find some alternatives to plod on in life. A great entry for the contest. All the best dear friend....!
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Date: 1/28/2023 10:53:00 PM
Bereavement brings sorrow. It may take years before one can recuperate. Best for a win.
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Date: 1/28/2023 2:11:00 PM
Wow! What an emotional poem. I hope it wasn't about your life, Lasaad. If it was, I'm so sorry--we're kindred spirits. But you survived to write beautiful poetry! I believe surviving makes us strong!
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Date: 1/28/2023 2:56:00 PM
Much appreciate your kindness, Ann. Your comment was so uplifting to me and the story was fictitious.
Date: 1/28/2023 10:59:00 AM
Wonderful wonderful work, sotto!
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Date: 1/28/2023 12:14:00 PM
Thanks, Maria, Much appreciated.
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