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The ice-cold sun was hid Behind a bank of clouds that came unbid, Ugly freezing winds blew Birds felt it all and flew No place to rest, they knew. The black cypress did their shelter forbid. Beneath, lanes clearly showed All tombs and snow covered the dead's abode. Alas, their days were timed, Their heavy hurdles climbed, Their dirges were long chimed, In heaven's eternity, they now rode. Despite all I hunted, The one tomb where peace and my love were granted. I knew the number and lane, Cold wind numbed not the pain, Bereaved from my love was not a pleasant feeling Especially when I heard the dirge bells pealing. Saw her lovely photo, Her sweet pale smile, and eyes were soft like a doe. On the old tomb, I saw A plaque, I stared in awe, Her writing, without flaw: That she loved me always, she had to show. Placed 1 27 January 2023 Writing Challenge - B Word Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Constance La France

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Date: 2/4/2023 8:02:00 AM
Victor, grief and love beautifully penned, and congratulations on your win in my Writing Challenge B Words, well done, Constance
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Date: 2/3/2023 5:31:00 AM
Once more back to your poem to congratulate you on your first place win, dear Victor !
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Date: 2/2/2023 7:57:00 PM
Back to say congratulations on your win in Constance’s contest… Belle
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Date: 2/1/2023 2:00:00 PM
Back with congratulations on this great winning work. Way to go. Sara
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Date: 2/1/2023 8:28:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. A wonderful Rhyme/write. So sad with a great ending. Have a blessed day..................
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Date: 2/1/2023 6:13:00 AM
Dropping back with Congrats on your win Victor..
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Date: 1/31/2023 11:59:00 AM
Very nice romantic entry Victor. Best wishes for the contest. :)
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Date: 1/31/2023 11:35:00 AM
Beautiful, makes me feel so sad, yet, a strange awe of sweetness, You know she would do just that, and she probably smiles sweetly and says "Yes, Victor, you saw it in your heart, and spilled it forth through your pen to all the world" that would give her peace I'm sure. My husband of 45 years must know, that if I was gone, I'd still send messages of love if I could, and if I saw something like this, it would make me happy to know he still felt my undying love for him. This is a fave.
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Date: 1/31/2023 9:00:00 AM
Beautiful, emotional sentiments throughout your lovely memorial poem Victor. If poems are read in heaven this is sure to be gratefully received… Belle
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Date: 1/30/2023 6:48:00 AM
- So beautifully written with emotion, Victor :) - hugs
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Date: 1/30/2023 1:21:00 AM
A beautiful romantic, sensitive Rhyme, Victor, Your love for each other is evident and everlasting. Thank you for sharing, Take care, Shirley
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Date: 1/29/2023 9:31:00 PM
A touching poem, Victor:) hope you are doing better:)
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Date: 1/29/2023 9:16:00 AM
sad but beautiful, Victor. I love seeing you try these challenges
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Date: 1/28/2023 6:12:00 AM
Aww Victor such a sad yet beautiful write! Cuddles Victor….Debx
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Date: 1/28/2023 5:00:00 AM
A poignant write Victor, best wishes in the Contest
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Date: 1/28/2023 12:54:00 AM
Even in desolation and adverse weather, love can thrive. The plaque in the snow tells in a thousand tongues that true love will never die. Be comforted ! In your lone journey, may her love follow you ....
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Date: 1/27/2023 3:54:00 PM
A beautiful poem, fraught with sadness, but rich in love. Best of wishes for the contest, my friend. :)
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Date: 1/27/2023 12:28:00 PM
Walk in contentment dear man, with the comforting awareness that she will always love you. Let her love help take all pain away as in your heart she will always stay.
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Date: 1/27/2023 11:31:00 AM
Wonderful write, dear Victor! Heartfelt! “I knew the number and lane”
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Date: 1/27/2023 9:43:00 AM
great write my friend. cold imagery
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Date: 1/27/2023 8:29:00 AM
Beautiful poem, Victor! I love your last two lines especially.
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Date: 1/27/2023 6:34:00 AM
Quite an emotional write Victor, something we'll all experience at some point in our lives. Tom
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Date: 1/27/2023 6:26:00 AM
Victor, your poetry is stunning and expertly composed. There's a palpable feeling of sadness throughout, which is both comforting and sad. Genuinely moving representation.
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Date: 1/27/2023 6:07:00 AM
Sense of grief emanates throughout, Victor. A heartfelt depiction. Best to you.
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Date: 1/27/2023 3:36:00 AM
Sounds like she wore her heart on her sleeve Victor, bet you made her happy a lifteime. May the bells not chime too soon, we need more poetry from you dear friend :)
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