Malabika Ray Choudhury Poet Ghazal

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          September 1, 2020
                                    For "Ghazal" Poetry Contest
                                         Sponsor: Silent One
         Syllables checked by howmanysyllables.com (18 syllables in each line)

                           For Brian Strand Structured Poetry Contest
                                               FIRST PLACE

Believe Me

My joyful world had abruptly stopped, Beloved, to exist, believe me, 
          When you unknowingly faded away gently in the mist, believe me. 

      Like a heartbroken beggar, with intense longing, I wept to see your face,
        Craved ardently and mournfully to be passionately kissed, believe me! 

        A broken-winged bird, pitilessly parted, I crooned a sorrowful song, 
         All loving memories, every day, fondly I reminisced, believe me! 

      Like a commanding Queen, demanded, what I believed to be only mine, 
         Wished our love to be all pervasive, eternally subsist, believe me! 

         Everything that happened in our life was an unforeseen catastrophe, 
        Leave dismal sorrowful days totally behind us, dismissed, believe me! 

  Fate has brought us back to where we truthfully belong, for all days and nights,
             You remain perpetually with me, no one can resist, believe me! 

          Let enchanting flowers in xxxx's garden blossom in full bloom again, 
           In each other's eager arms, we unwaveringly persist, believe me!

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Krish Radhakrishna March 17, 2024 at 7:03 AM Congrats on a fab gazhal and a placement in the contest. A urdu gazhal is perhaps the best form of poetry!!

Sam Kauffman February 7, 2024 at 11:44 AM Dearest Mala, your images are wonderful and so vivid - a bird with a broken wing, a commanding Queen, heartbroken beggar. You so skillfully take me through your emotional pain to find a "blossom in full bloom again" rejoicing and finding happiness once more. Congratulations on your win, dear friend. So happy for you. Congratulations. Much love and blessings! Malabika Ray Choudhury March 17, 2024 at 7:48 AM Dear Sam, I am sorry to be so late in replying to your comment. For last two months, I went back to India, and stayed there focusing on other activities. I am back, and plan to start writing poetry again. To let you know, I was thrilled to present a book-talk on poetry in one of the prestigious institutes in my hometown. Love, Dear Sam, you never forget me, although I was not visible at PoetrySoup.

Sara Kendrick February 7, 2024 at 5:11 AM Congratulations on your winning work. Way to go. Sara K Malabika Ray Choudhury March 17, 2024 at 7:42 AM Thank you, Sara.

Paghunda Zahid October 3, 2020 at 11:59 AM Congratulations on your placement Malabika Ray Choudhury February 6, 2024 at 5:49 AM Thank you, Dear Paghunda, for your kind visit congratulating me. Look forward to reading your poems.

Linda Alice Fowler October 3, 2020 at 6:06 AM Congratulations on the win Mala! Linda Malabika Ray Choudhury October 3, 2020 at 6:30 AM Hi Linda, Thanks for reading my poem. It's very kind of you. Will look forward to reading yours.

Silent One October 3, 2020 at 4:57 AM I loved the last two lines, lovely poetry.. Great ghazal you have done.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest.. Malabika Ray Choudhury October 3, 2020 at 6:29 AM Thank you very much. It's a poetic form I am very interested about, and followed the traditional format.

JC Brul September 1, 2020 at 10:29 PM Believe me dear Mala, this poem is so endearing and heart-warming. Of course, a Fave! Congratulations on your first fantastic ghazal dear friend. Malabika Ray Choudhury September 2, 2020 at 1:00 PM Dear JCB, Thanks so much. Although I was somewhat familiar with the traditional themes of Ghazal in Urdu and Hindi, learned many technical aspects of this poetic form while writing this poem. A Fave?! Wow! That's fantastic! Love and hugs, Mala

Besma Riabi Dziri September 1, 2020 at 12:10 PM A well crafted Ghazal of longing! So beautiful and heartfelt sentiments rendered in your poetry! My pleasure to read! Best regards and blessings. Malabika Ray Choudhury September 1, 2020 at 2:24 PM Thank you so much, Besma. Ghazal is a new venture for me - I have to say - it’s not easy!!! I didn’t know it has so many technical aspects. Appreciate So much your lovely, encouraging comments. Best wishes, Mala

Darlene De Beaulieu September 1, 2020 at 12:01 PM Hello Mala, This is a lovely poem. To me it is romantic. I enjoyed the last two lines. Have a nice day my friend. Hugs darlene Darlene De Beaulieu September 2, 2020 at 11:14 AM Hello Mala, i have not tried the Ghazal style. I will one day. It is raining here today.Enjoy your day my friend. Love Darlene Malabika Ray Choudhury September 1, 2020 at 2:26 PM Hi Darlene, thank you so much, my friend! So glad you enjoyed the poem - Ghazal is a new Poetic form for me. Learning is endless! Love, Mala