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Because I Loved You

overwhelming passion so convincing was your game frail heart spun like a yo-yo until at last the toy, like you, didn’t return broken I lay huddled in sheets of despair empty bed, my new home anguish seemed to last an eternity sadness made way for anger anger led to acceptance acceptance to complacency hidden I remain heart within an impenetrable fortress only night, not a knight, seeks passage darkness everywhere memories expelled because I loved you I shall never love again *by Carolyn Devonshire for Dana’lynn’s “Secondhand Emotion” contest

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Deborah Burch

Date: 5/29/2012 1:56:00 PM

*tear* …indeed, love ya, deb

Kim Merryman

Date: 3/10/2012 11:47:00 AM

A beautiful write, Carolyn. Congrats on your win! Love, Kim

Sashi Prabhu

Date: 3/8/2012 7:34:00 AM

congrats on the placement...loved the opening verse.........~sashi

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 3/7/2012 9:00:00 PM

congrats Carolyn on another splendid win for quaint words of luv .. elegant and eloquent lines..

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 3/7/2012 5:54:00 PM

Very very strong evocative write! Congrad's On Your win! Light & Love

Olusegun Arowolo

Date: 3/7/2012 3:46:00 PM

This is lovely and awesome,Carolyn.Congratulations on your superb win.....

Gwendolen Song

Date: 3/7/2012 2:15:00 PM

Dang, Carolyn....this poem is loaded with a thousand images of being let down by love...oh wow...I love the sheets of despair line and the last stanza that shows a new shield around your bruised heart....I feel like u needed a hug after writing this one!...I will send a late one right now! Gwendolen

Jonas L. Rozario

Date: 3/7/2012 12:01:00 PM

Congrats Carolyn...awesome win

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 3/7/2012 10:47:00 AM

Good afternoon and congratulations on your win in P.D.'s "3rd place wins Only" contest Carolyn. Love, Carol

Jack Horne

Date: 1/21/2012 3:00:00 PM

Powerful write indeed, my friend - so glad this was a winner

Daver Austin

Date: 1/17/2012 9:41:00 AM

Complete despondency. May better days come your way. Love, daver

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 1/17/2012 6:04:00 AM

Congratulations Carolyn on your win in Dana'lynn's "The Secondhand Emotion" contest. Love, Carol

Lizzie Treetop

Date: 1/17/2012 3:24:00 AM

Your poetry is so lovely, dear Carolyn do stop and love again! Lizzie T

Ralph Taylor

Date: 1/16/2012 8:59:00 PM

Congrats, Carolyn. Excellent write. Nice going. luv Ralph

Robert Pettit

Date: 1/16/2012 5:05:00 PM

Only the best from you, Carolyn. Another win. Congratulations.

Robert A. Dufresne

Date: 1/16/2012 4:51:00 PM

very powerful Carolyn...I hope it's not for real but then again.... how can we go through life without terrible heartache if we love with our all. congrats to you on your emotional write.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 1/16/2012 2:58:00 PM

A gut wretching ending Caroline! I know the feeling. I loved the write and the page layout was very effective! Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

Dana Smith

Date: 1/16/2012 2:38:00 PM

I have felt this way so many times.. really hit home, Carolyn. Wonderfully written, though. Take care. I'm here for you.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/15/2012 2:51:00 PM

Interesting work..Reads like winning material..Good one about love gone wrong..Most are not that well written..Sara

Joe Maverick

Date: 1/15/2012 12:25:00 PM

well Carolyn..i think this is a first rate, "second hand" entry..) if you follow me..? as a matter of fact..! (take it first hand from me ) i'm wishing you a top spot winner to be..!

Elizabeth Wesley

Date: 1/15/2012 8:33:00 AM

Hi Carolyn, great emotional feelings in this and best wishes for the contest. Wondering how you are and hope you are feeling better. Luv, LIzzie.

Audrey Haick

Date: 1/14/2012 10:13:00 PM

These sad emotions have been expressed so eloquently, Carolyn. Excellent work...no surprise here as you always "Rock"! Beautiful, though sad..love every line and just know it's one for the winners' list. Much love, Annalise

Black Eyed Susan

Date: 1/14/2012 5:34:00 PM

a great write! sad, but moving. I love "empty bed, my new home" - very powerful line. I'm sure this will do great in the contest :)

Russell Sivey

Date: 1/14/2012 1:33:00 PM

Ah yes! I sooo very have been there in that place! And my fortress of night was sooo strong hardly anything could penetrate it...then she did! In stories of miracles...this would be one of them!! I sure do hope you had one come and break your fortress and you were able to love again! Smile, if for any reason, just to smile! Awesome Work!!

John Rhinem

Date: 1/14/2012 1:14:00 PM

Smile ˜ You Are Far Too Beautiful To Never Love Again ˜ I Could Say Much Unto You Aside From This Being A Beautiful Bittersweet Poem ˜ Yet, Heart In Pocket I Shall Say That You Are Beautiful Carolyn ˜ You Shall Always Be Unto Me ˜ Love, John!:) ˜