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Beautiful Blue Jay

He was a beautiful bird with feathers bright white and cobalt blue
He happily chirped his songs while perched at the feeders every day
Often spotted high in the oak tree, squawking until his new day debut

When he appeared all the other birds became quiet and often flew
He wanted to be king of the feeders, aggressively pushed birds away
He was a beautiful bird with feathers bright white and cobalt blue

One day his mate landed beside him, with light feathers a muted hue 
She was jumping and squawking, like a fancy mating dance of play
Often spotted high in the oak tree, squawking until his new day debut

He danced along beside her their feather’s entangled in a mating ado
Her muted feathers spotted feeding until she flew to their nest to stay
He was a beautiful bird with feathers bright white and cobalt blue

Feeders were abandoned one day as a cold storm passed through
The birds were nestled away in nests as winds made the trees tops sway
Often spotted high in the oak tree, squawking until his new day debut

His mate fed her tiny fledglings, feathers brightening as they grew
He came to visit the feeders for years until one day he’d gone astray
He was a beautiful bird with feathers bright white and cobalt blue
Often spotted high in the oak tree, squawking until his new day debut

Did not place in contest: Third Person Villanelle, judged 11/23/22

Contest: Writing Challenge- X'd Poems Second Chance Poetry Contest
Sponsor: Constance La France

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Date: 12/10/2022 5:37:00 PM
Tania, a delightful poem. Congratulations on your win in my Writing Challenge- x'd poem - Second Chance, well done, blessings
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Tania Kitchin
Date: 12/11/2022 3:37:00 AM
Constance, thank you!
Date: 12/6/2022 8:44:00 AM
A beautiful poem, Tania. I love birds. We don't have jays, but they make plenty of noise in the mountains we go to. Your poem describes them perfectly!
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Tania Kitchin
Date: 12/6/2022 2:36:00 PM
Ann, thank you!
Date: 12/3/2022 10:40:00 AM
Great Villanelle, well done, love Jays, they are a beautiful bird. // Barry
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Tania Kitchin
Date: 12/5/2022 6:24:00 PM
Barry, thank you!
Date: 11/30/2022 11:39:00 AM
wow, your first villanelle. Now you must do more!
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Tania Kitchin
Date: 12/5/2022 6:24:00 PM
Thank you
Date: 11/27/2022 8:34:00 AM
I love to see the birds. This is so nice. Well done :)
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Tania Kitchin
Date: 11/27/2022 3:04:00 PM
Heidi, thank you!
Date: 11/24/2022 9:43:00 AM
This is so cute, Tania. A love story about blue jays! Excellent theme for nature and villanelle! I did my last villanelle on a rose. Nature is amazing.
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Tania Kitchin
Date: 11/24/2022 10:12:00 AM
Andrea, thank you, it was my first villanelle poem!
Date: 11/21/2022 12:09:00 AM
Cute and highly descriptive of the blue jay. A wonderful villanelle. Best for a win.
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Tania Kitchin
Date: 11/21/2022 3:17:00 AM
Victor, thank you!
Date: 11/20/2022 10:54:00 PM
Such a sweet poem, it drew me in and I could just see the entire poem come alive in my mind's eye, the beautiful blue jays, a sweet nest of babies, and the passing of time. What a wonderful poem you've written Tanya <3
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Tania Kitchin
Date: 11/21/2022 3:17:00 AM
BJ, thank you!
Date: 11/20/2022 1:01:00 PM
You captured the characteristics of a blue jay, physically and temperamentally in your Villanelle, Tania. Well written.
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Jenna Logan
Date: 11/20/2022 3:50:00 PM
I never would’ve guessed it was your first.
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Tania Kitchin
Date: 11/20/2022 1:27:00 PM
Jenna, thank you, a new form for me, it was a challenge but I enjoyed it!

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