Darren White Poet Free verse

Notes About The Poem

This poem is about a dream, a dream used to conquer a nightmare.

I am in a wheelchair, although that is not really important, it is for this poem though, now you know it you may perhaps recognize.

Beach

BEACH

These two lines behind me are not exactly straight
 Nor am I, exactly straight. Curving, circling near
 The land wash, softly humming, sun on my curls.
 Trailing a whole new meaning into tracks.
 This dream land gives me free hand designing
 To my liking. Shells, mother of pearls, shore
 Littered with creatures distracting positively
 into curiosity. Is that how to fight fake reality?

With magic that defies? Created by me?
 These wheels do not sink into soft sand, strongly
 Carrying slight weight, turning, trying dancing,
 Not straight, exactly how it should be. 
 Exactly how I kill the dream with a slight
 Wave of my hand, a curt nod of dismissal.
 Nothing to spoil this castle on this beach,
 And the comforting murmur of the sea.

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4th place in Contest: Your First Entry on the Soup
Sponsor: White Wolf

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Patricia Cresswell November 16, 2017 at 2:56 PM I came back in time in my flying chair to read your very first poem here. I was met with a soft ever so lovely dream. Thank you!

Debbie Duncan July 9, 2017 at 9:30 PM Very good imagination in this free verse :) Darren White July 10, 2017 at 1:21 AM Debbie, thank you :)

Manu Ranjini April 23, 2017 at 2:17 PM This is so creative.. And deep too... Accidently read this..but worth reading...enjoying it.. Great job Darren. . Darren White April 23, 2017 at 2:33 PM Accidental reading is fine. I am glad you enjoyed it :)

Carole Duet April 14, 2017 at 1:52 AM Isn't the imagination a wonderful thing? So useful and comforting, sometimes rescuing us into a wonderful dreamland all our own; taking us away...like your poem does for me, Darren. Congratulations on placing in the contest. Darren White April 14, 2017 at 8:52 AM Thank you so very much Carole :) I love my secret beach resort.

Jan Allison April 13, 2017 at 6:45 AM Can't believe I've not read this gem before Darren and knowing you better now I love the lines about not being straight that sure made me smile:-) hugs Jan xx Darren White April 13, 2017 at 10:36 AM Haha, Jan, welcome to my not so straight poem, thanks for recognising that one!!! Hugs.

White Wolf April 12, 2017 at 10:35 PM Duir, well done on a great placement in my contest mate! Darren White April 12, 2017 at 11:33 PM Lol, cool, honoured to have made it to 4th place :)

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart April 6, 2017 at 12:06 PM And I come to read your first Soup offering; Darren you are a deep moving sea who sculpts poetry with the limitless possibilities of countless grains of sand. You move me. I am graced. Thank you xomo! 7 of course ;) Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart April 6, 2017 at 1:05 PM What? And English isn't your first language? Your poetic prowess has just blown through the roof. I'm getting rained on now. ;) Darren White April 6, 2017 at 12:28 PM Honored, mo, this was one of the first poems ever I wrote in English :)

Richard Lamoureux February 24, 2017 at 8:19 PM Wow, now this is a first poem to be proud of. A belated but well deserved 7 my friend. Darren White February 24, 2017 at 11:02 PM Richard, thank you, also for the 7!

Lynn Marie February 17, 2017 at 7:33 PM A powerful write Darren. The questions, your word choice, statements and terrific repetitive lines all make for a really incredible read. I appreciate the stripped down honesty, fake platitudes not needed or accepted, only the truth will do. Incredible depth of meaning, I do love 'thinking' pieces and you scored big with this one, I sense I am in for a thrill of a ride as a new reader of yours! An impressive piece. blessings, lynn Darren White February 18, 2017 at 12:00 AM Thank you, Lynn, for going back to the first poem I admitted to Soup. I am not always into thinking pieces, but sometimes I am. :)

White Wolf December 19, 2016 at 5:33 PM What an exceptional first offering to the soup! You are an amazing poet, Darren! Very talented indeed! Darren White December 19, 2016 at 11:41 PM Thanks Rick :) I have had people questioning me about the poem, because they said:"It's not realistic, wheelchairs can't just easily roll through sandy beaches". Yeah, duh! As if literally every word you write need to have happened in that exact way, helloooo analogy and metaphor?

Sunita U.D Palawon June 3, 2016 at 11:26 AM Beautiful. The imagery great. Darren White June 3, 2016 at 11:52 AM Thank you for your nice comment :)

Kathleen Kroll May 29, 2016 at 7:19 PM Hi Darren, thank you for sharing. I see the beach in your poem and i'm intrigued by the line--how to fight fake reality. I sense you are a very positive person. Welcome to poetry soup! Darren White May 31, 2016 at 7:36 AM The fake reality is the nightmare. It's frighteningly real, but still not true. Thank you for replying :)

Elisa Christensen May 29, 2016 at 10:03 AM Beautiful!! A man who recognizes and appreciates the value of a good woman is truly a smart man indeed! Darren White May 29, 2016 at 10:18 AM I do think your comment is meant for the poem above mine. No offence :)

Moon Flower May 29, 2016 at 12:24 AM That's the way to go! Congrats on your first entry and welcome to Poetry Soup, Darren. :)

Manmath Dalei May 28, 2016 at 3:27 AM Darren, Nice and wonderful first entry. Welcome to poetry soup. Hope you will enjoy our community. Wish you a fruitful journey ahead...........//:) hugs Darren White May 28, 2016 at 7:08 AM Thanks for the kind words *hugs*

Skat A May 28, 2016 at 2:04 AM Darren, Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :) Drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs **YNR - SKAT** Darren White May 28, 2016 at 7:07 AM Thank you, I left a message on your wall :)

Poet Destroyer A May 27, 2016 at 6:02 AM Lovely first post, Darren,, Welcome to Poetry soup, I hope you enjoy the community. Here, you will find friendly poets who enjoy supporting one another. I myself, enjoy reading and commenting those who want to be read. The only time I give constructive criticism is when a poet desires it. However, if for some reason the poem is not my field I will guide you to someone who is more qualified than I. Stop by and read one of my poems if you like. My poems are not perfect, but I have a feeling you might like one. I encourage you to check out the contest page and read to receive comments. Tell me a little about your poetic skills if you like. It will be my pleasure to follow and read every poem you post from here on :) We are Lucky To Have you. Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@" Darren White May 27, 2016 at 8:01 AM Thank you for the warm welcome. I'll stop by and read your poems indeed