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This poem is about a dream, a dream used to conquer a nightmare.

I am in a wheelchair, although that is not really important, it is for this poem though, now you know it you may perhaps recognize.

BEACH These two lines behind me are not exactly straight Nor am I, exactly straight. Curving, circling near The land wash, softly humming, sun on my curls. Trailing a whole new meaning into tracks. This dream land gives me free hand designing To my liking. Shells, mother of pearls, shore Littered with creatures distracting positively into curiosity. Is that how to fight fake reality? With magic that defies? Created by me? These wheels do not sink into soft sand, strongly Carrying slight weight, turning, trying dancing, Not straight, exactly how it should be. Exactly how I kill the dream with a slight Wave of my hand, a curt nod of dismissal. Nothing to spoil this castle on this beach, And the comforting murmur of the sea. *** 4th place in Contest: Your First Entry on the Soup Sponsor: White Wolf

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Patricia Cresswell

Date: 11/16/2017 2:56:00 PM

I came back in time in my flying chair to read your very first poem here. I was met with a soft ever so lovely dream. Thank you!

Debbie Duncan

Date: 7/9/2017 9:30:00 PM

Very good imagination in this free verse :)

Darren White
Date: 7/10/2017 1:21:00 AM

Debbie, thank you :)

Manu Ranjini

Date: 4/23/2017 2:17:00 PM

This is so creative.. And deep too... Accidently read this..but worth reading...enjoying it.. Great job Darren. .

Darren White
Date: 4/23/2017 2:33:00 PM

Accidental reading is fine. I am glad you enjoyed it :)

Carole Duet

Date: 4/14/2017 1:52:00 AM

Isn't the imagination a wonderful thing? So useful and comforting, sometimes rescuing us into a wonderful dreamland all our own; taking us away...like your poem does for me, Darren. Congratulations on placing in the contest.

Darren White
Date: 4/14/2017 8:52:00 AM

Thank you so very much Carole :) I love my secret beach resort.

Jan Allison

Date: 4/13/2017 6:45:00 AM

Can't believe I've not read this gem before Darren and knowing you better now I love the lines about not being straight that sure made me smile:-) hugs Jan xx

Darren White
Date: 4/13/2017 10:36:00 AM

Haha, Jan, welcome to my not so straight poem, thanks for recognising that one!!! Hugs.

White Wolf

Date: 4/12/2017 10:35:00 PM

Duir, well done on a great placement in my contest mate!

Darren White
Date: 4/12/2017 11:33:00 PM

Lol, cool, honoured to have made it to 4th place :)

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib

Date: 4/6/2017 12:06:00 PM

And I come to read your first Soup offering; Darren you are a deep moving sea who sculpts poetry with the limitless possibilities of countless grains of sand. You move me. I am graced. Thank you xomo! 7 of course ;)

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 4/6/2017 1:05:00 PM

What? And English isn't your first language? Your poetic prowess has just blown through the roof. I'm getting rained on now. ;)

Darren White
Date: 4/6/2017 12:28:00 PM

Honored, mo, this was one of the first poems ever I wrote in English :)

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 2/24/2017 8:19:00 PM

Wow, now this is a first poem to be proud of. A belated but well deserved 7 my friend.

Darren White
Date: 2/24/2017 11:02:00 PM

Richard, thank you, also for the 7!

Lynn Marie

Date: 2/17/2017 7:33:00 PM

A powerful write Darren. The questions, your word choice, statements and terrific repetitive lines all make for a really incredible read. I appreciate the stripped down honesty, fake platitudes not needed or accepted, only the truth will do. Incredible depth of meaning, I do love 'thinking' pieces and you scored big with this one, I sense I am in for a thrill of a ride as a new reader of yours! An impressive piece. blessings, lynn

Darren White
Date: 2/18/2017 12:00:00 AM

Thank you, Lynn, for going back to the first poem I admitted to Soup. I am not always into thinking pieces, but sometimes I am. :)

White Wolf

Date: 12/19/2016 5:33:00 PM

What an exceptional first offering to the soup! You are an amazing poet, Darren! Very talented indeed!

Darren White
Date: 12/19/2016 11:41:00 PM

Thanks Rick :) I have had people questioning me about the poem, because they said:"It's not realistic, wheelchairs can't just easily roll through sandy beaches". Yeah, duh! As if literally every word you write need to have happened in that exact way, helloooo analogy and metaphor?

Sunita U.D Palawon

Date: 6/3/2016 11:26:00 AM

Beautiful. The imagery great.

Darren White
Date: 6/3/2016 11:52:00 AM

Thank you for your nice comment :)

Kathleen Kroll

Date: 5/29/2016 7:19:00 PM

Hi Darren, thank you for sharing. I see the beach in your poem and i'm intrigued by the line--how to fight fake reality. I sense you are a very positive person. Welcome to poetry soup!

Darren White
Date: 5/31/2016 7:36:00 AM

The fake reality is the nightmare. It's frighteningly real, but still not true. Thank you for replying :)

Elisa Christensen

Date: 5/29/2016 10:03:00 AM

Beautiful!! A man who recognizes and appreciates the value of a good woman is truly a smart man indeed!

Darren White
Date: 5/29/2016 10:18:00 AM

I do think your comment is meant for the poem above mine. No offence :)

Moon Flower

Date: 5/29/2016 12:24:00 AM

That's the way to go! Congrats on your first entry and welcome to Poetry Soup, Darren. :)

Manmath Dalei

Date: 5/28/2016 3:27:00 AM

Darren, Nice and wonderful first entry. Welcome to poetry soup. Hope you will enjoy our community. Wish you a fruitful journey ahead...........//:) hugs

Darren White
Date: 5/28/2016 7:08:00 AM

Thanks for the kind words *hugs*

Skat A

Date: 5/28/2016 2:04:00 AM

Darren, Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :) Drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs **YNR - SKAT**

Darren White
Date: 5/28/2016 7:07:00 AM

Thank you, I left a message on your wall :)

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/27/2016 6:02:00 AM

Lovely first post, Darren,, Welcome to Poetry soup, I hope you enjoy the community. Here, you will find friendly poets who enjoy supporting one another. I myself, enjoy reading and commenting those who want to be read. The only time I give constructive criticism is when a poet desires it. However, if for some reason the poem is not my field I will guide you to someone who is more qualified than I. Stop by and read one of my poems if you like. My poems are not perfect, but I have a feeling you might like one. I encourage you to check out the contest page and read to receive comments. Tell me a little about your poetic skills if you like. It will be my pleasure to follow and read every poem you post from here on :) We are Lucky To Have you. Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@"

Darren White
Date: 5/27/2016 8:01:00 AM

Thank you for the warm welcome. I'll stop by and read your poems indeed