Andrea Dietrich Poet Verse

Be Willows That Sway

my heart was a small glad sparrow
which soared on a sonnet’s dulcet breeze

there stood in a dark and dreadful forest -
not stooping for anything -
old oaks with leafless limbs

Old cold oaks, so rigid and stern,
a sparrow’s heart they would slay.
No lesson from them do I learn -
for they neither bend nor sway.

give me bright meadows
where the trees delight in song 
      poetry blossoms
where trees can weep with feeling
   and too. . . be willows that sway


April 21, 2018 for Broken Wing's "It's All About Four" Poetry Contest

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Reason A. Poteet May 4, 2018 at 3:49 PM I found your "oak" piece to which you referred earlier. I like it, oaks, ancient to young saplings vary greatly in their poetic inspiration. Great write. Congrats on your placement.

Eve Roper May 1, 2018 at 8:20 PM Andrea, beautiful imagery {:~) congratulations on your placement Hugs Eve ~`*

Phil Capitano April 30, 2018 at 7:28 AM A breezy wish that sets the trees dancing; lovely images. Congrats for this terrific write.

Jean Murray April 29, 2018 at 5:58 PM I have to repay the compliment and return to offer warm congratulations Andrea.

Kim Rodrigues April 29, 2018 at 4:37 PM Like the line: old oaks with leafless limbs. Congrats on this lovely poem!

Constance La France April 29, 2018 at 10:31 AM Andrea, CONGRATULATIONS on your win in my contest. Rigid and stern is no place for you, that fluttering sparrow to be, drift on to more flowing trees, well done !

James Inman April 29, 2018 at 8:10 AM Ahh, Andrea the delight filled meadow nymph. I can see you there laughing and dancing beneath the swaying trees.

Susan Gentry April 29, 2018 at 2:06 AM Congratulations on your win with this amazing poem, Andrea. It is beautiful, and flowing, profound. Well done. :)

Subimal Sinha-Roy April 29, 2018 at 1:07 AM Congratulations, Andrea on your win. Very inspirational indeed.

Line Gauthier April 28, 2018 at 11:09 PM Back with congrats, Andrea.

Elaine George April 28, 2018 at 9:15 AM Love the character you have given to these trees, Andrea. And the great meaning and life lessons learned from each. Thank you for sharing. Elaine

Richard Lamoureux April 26, 2018 at 8:01 AM Much wisdom in this one Andrea.

Rico Leffanta April 25, 2018 at 9:31 PM Reminds me of that Japanese adage, "The bamboo which bends is stronger than the oak which resists!" Aloha! Rico

Honesty Oimbo April 24, 2018 at 3:37 AM this is a great piece with sure lines

James Horn April 23, 2018 at 3:41 PM Which way will they start to sway today, As on the ground leaves do sit and stay; Stepped on bunch; They would crunch, And, out in the sun, children shall play.

Harry Horsman April 23, 2018 at 11:06 AM I think i'll have to withdraw my entry, so pale in comparison,,yet again, who would mind, being place behind this wonderful gem..

Line Gauthier April 22, 2018 at 2:28 PM Lovely, Andrea. There's nothing more magical that the sway of weeping willows. A beauty.

Heidi Sands April 22, 2018 at 10:28 AM Very nice Andrea. I love the last stanza :)

Jean Murray April 21, 2018 at 5:04 PM Your muse is in full flight in this beautiful poem Andrea.

Jan Allison April 21, 2018 at 4:58 PM Such deep imagery Andrea, keep away from the oaks in the dark forest and stay blooming with your poetry and I can assure you the willows won't weep with your wonderful words:-) hugs Jan xx

Vijay Pandit April 21, 2018 at 3:15 PM So enjoyable to read..So much to appreciate in so many lines like..No lesson from them do I learn - for they neither bend nor sway...and..where the trees delight in song poetry blossoms..where trees can weep with feeling. Excellent..winning poem, Andrea!

Susan Ashley April 21, 2018 at 12:23 PM Breathtakingly beautiful, Andrea. I so enjoyed the theme and emotion of your stunning write.. your last stanza is especially deep and meaningful.. Poetry blossoms, indeed! Your poem is a spectacular bouquet!! Best for a win.. warmest wishes ~Susan