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Be Willows that Sway

my heart was a small glad sparrow
which soared on a sonnet’s dulcet breeze

there stood in a dark and dreadful forest -
not stooping for anything -
old oaks with leafless limbs

Old cold oaks, so rigid and stern,
a sparrow’s heart they would slay.
No lesson from them do I learn -
for they neither bend nor sway.

give me bright meadows
where the trees delight in song 
      poetry blossoms
where trees can weep with feeling
   and too. . . be willows that sway


April 21, 2018 for Broken Wing's "It's All About Four" Poetry Contest

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Date: 5/4/2018 3:49:00 PM
I found your "oak" piece to which you referred earlier. I like it, oaks, ancient to young saplings vary greatly in their poetic inspiration. Great write. Congrats on your placement.
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Date: 5/1/2018 8:20:00 PM
Andrea, beautiful imagery {:~) congratulations on your placement Hugs Eve ~`*
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Date: 4/30/2018 7:28:00 AM
A breezy wish that sets the trees dancing; lovely images. Congrats for this terrific write.
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Date: 4/29/2018 5:58:00 PM
I have to repay the compliment and return to offer warm congratulations Andrea.
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Date: 4/29/2018 4:37:00 PM
Like the line: old oaks with leafless limbs. Congrats on this lovely poem!
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Date: 4/29/2018 10:31:00 AM
Andrea, CONGRATULATIONS on your win in my contest. Rigid and stern is no place for you, that fluttering sparrow to be, drift on to more flowing trees, well done !
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Date: 4/29/2018 8:10:00 AM
Ahh, Andrea the delight filled meadow nymph. I can see you there laughing and dancing beneath the swaying trees.
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Date: 4/29/2018 2:06:00 AM
Congratulations on your win with this amazing poem, Andrea. It is beautiful, and flowing, profound. Well done. :)
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Date: 4/29/2018 1:07:00 AM
Congratulations, Andrea on your win. Very inspirational indeed.
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Date: 4/28/2018 11:09:00 PM
Back with congrats, Andrea.
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Date: 4/28/2018 9:15:00 AM
Love the character you have given to these trees, Andrea. And the great meaning and life lessons learned from each. Thank you for sharing. Elaine
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Date: 4/26/2018 8:01:00 AM
Much wisdom in this one Andrea.
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Date: 4/25/2018 9:31:00 PM
Reminds me of that Japanese adage, "The bamboo which bends is stronger than the oak which resists!" Aloha! Rico
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Date: 4/24/2018 3:37:00 AM
this is a great piece with sure lines
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Date: 4/23/2018 3:41:00 PM
Which way will they start to sway today, As on the ground leaves do sit and stay; Stepped on bunch; They would crunch, And, out in the sun, children shall play.
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Date: 4/23/2018 11:06:00 AM
I think i'll have to withdraw my entry, so pale in comparison,,yet again, who would mind, being place behind this wonderful gem..
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Date: 4/22/2018 4:20:00 PM
Ah - FABULOUS! May you avoid those all-too-prevalent old oaks, and rejoice (or weep) with the swaying willows Andrea! Luckily, I think there are still plenty of willows - and meadows - to be found :-)
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Date: 4/22/2018 2:28:00 PM
Lovely, Andrea. There's nothing more magical that the sway of weeping willows. A beauty.
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Date: 4/22/2018 10:28:00 AM
Very nice Andrea. I love the last stanza :)
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Date: 4/21/2018 5:04:00 PM
Your muse is in full flight in this beautiful poem Andrea.
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Date: 4/21/2018 4:58:00 PM
Such deep imagery Andrea, keep away from the oaks in the dark forest and stay blooming with your poetry and I can assure you the willows won't weep with your wonderful words:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 4/21/2018 3:15:00 PM
So enjoyable to read..So much to appreciate in so many lines like..No lesson from them do I learn - for they neither bend nor sway...and..where the trees delight in song poetry blossoms..where trees can weep with feeling. Excellent..winning poem, Andrea!
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Date: 4/21/2018 12:23:00 PM
Breathtakingly beautiful, Andrea. I so enjoyed the theme and emotion of your stunning write.. your last stanza is especially deep and meaningful.. Poetry blossoms, indeed! Your poem is a spectacular bouquet!! Best for a win.. warmest wishes ~Susan
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