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(Probably more a short story than free verse In any case it’s true, seen through my eyes as a child) He was a heavy smoker sat by the fire Coughing and wheezing hacking up phlegm spitting it into the blazing hearth, that hissed back contemptuously upon contact On a rare occasion when he’d miss, the dog would lick up the gooey mass with a determined exuberance A filthy habit I heard some say behind his back, but he was always happy, didn’t care less what others thought of him, a real character, anyway my whole family and I liked him He was our uncle from rural Ireland, we visited him and his wife on their small farm a couple of times each year, probably more so, when my Dad had a car that worked, My sister and I used to make grossed out faces at each other when he expectorated into the open hearth of the fire, we thought it was pretty cool, and grotesquely funny One spit in particular is legendary, he spat out a stringy length of gunk but needed his fingers to help pull it away from his mouth and direct it towards the fire, some actually made the distance, amazingly the dog raised his head and caught the rest of it, happily wolfing it down, I mean come on! we were still in tears laughing, on the way home in the car On later visits it seemed bits of his face were disappearing or bandaged, still he never complained, his voice was almost gone anyway, and most unusually he wasn’t smoking I was only a kid and in those days you weren’t supposed to ask questions, but it didn’t stop me asking my dad, what was happening to uncle? He told me uncle had cancer of the mouth, and part of his tongue and lips had to be cut away, warning me never to smoke, even though he had one lighting in his hand Innocent me thought uncle’s face would grow back and he’d be ok, but unfortunately he died pretty soon afterwards, Damn I used to be spellbound watching him trying to catch his breath and hoofing viscous gunk upon the fire, even more so when he missed I tried to copy him on a visit to my aunt just after he passed away, of course I missed the fire on purpose, The dog never budged My sister shook her head I was truly ashamed! By David Kavanagh

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Date: 1/1/2024 12:38:00 PM
Many spitting images of avuncular manner out there, shaking my head. Smoke cancer, nothing to laugh at, neither are our treasured loved ones. Great memoir, lots of imagery, the greenest farm, a great place to grow up for youth. I think your stories can flourish as Netflix film or documentary! Wish I knew my uncle (a dizygotic twin), as well as you knew yours. Their stories thru child's eyes, one of a kind! Minds like yours make black phlegm interesting, powerful. Eloquently done. To 2024!
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David Kavanagh
Date: 1/1/2024 1:10:00 PM
Another super comment from someone who understands poetry Anaya, black phlegm or porcelain skin can both portray and evoke treasured memories equally, it’s all about context, in this case through my eyes as a child, yes they lived on a beautiful farm on the side of a lush valley, we were allowed go anywhere we wanted even onto neighbouring farms, I could imagine this used as perhaps flashback scenes in some docu/drama production, thanks so much for reading and commenting on the poem, cheers David
Date: 1/1/2024 1:23:00 AM
Well this has Greyfriars Bobby vibes despite the alternate lens. I love the acceptance of another that a view through a child's eyes can provide - if this was skimming stones or playing tiddly winks it could be considered easily as skill or art. The medium of phlegm presented as a captivating vignette both then and now. I'm jumping in with two feet (now I'm thinking of viscosity and the possibilities haha! There's no sink or swim, I think slide or bounce... Hang on, I'm lost in tangent...)
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David Kavanagh
Date: 1/1/2024 4:48:00 AM
Heya Dilly your comment also says a lot about the sort of poet you are, one who understands how humanity and poetry can be both ugly and beautiful all at once, cerulean skies may appear nice, but more can be seen through phlegmatic properties, especially when through a child’s eye, after all we are basically made up from 90% liquids of different textures and viscosity, thank you so much for such mouthwatering critique lol, cheers David
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Date: 1/1/2024 1:30:00 AM
I'll do this double length comment thing... (Ooh this feels in keeping with phlegmal properties). This piece is poetic expression of love and acceptance, it leaves judgement as something that was placed correctly on the periphery because what should always be at the centre is humanity. Well done with this one David, it's a tribute to you as much as is it to your uncle. Seeing through the eyes of the poet is insightful indeed and this serves you well in that regard.
Date: 12/31/2023 12:36:00 PM
David, despite your uncle’s habit, he endeared himself to you. Your memories of him honor the relationship you had. Thank you for a little insight into your family history. You have no cause for shame for emulating someone you loved.
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David Kavanagh
Date: 12/31/2023 1:15:00 PM
The word (bond) is pretty much the essence of this one Lin, in more ways than one!
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Lin Lane
Date: 12/31/2023 1:07:00 PM
I understood your feelings, David. I had lots of older uncles when growing up who did things that would be considered strange in a child’s eyes, but I loved them dearly. As for the dog…he knew his master.
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David Kavanagh
Date: 12/31/2023 12:54:00 PM
He really did endear himself to most people that seen past his let’s say idiosyncratic habits, I was only a kid and this is seen through a kids eyes, I honestly think part of my motive for copying him was to see if the dog would react the same to me, that for me was a huge lesson learned, thanks so much for reading and commenting on this one, you totally get it despite the viscosity, cheers David
Date: 12/31/2023 11:46:00 AM
My grandfather was a heavy drinker and smoker. Two things I remember: My sister asking him why he drinks as he vomited blood into the kitchen sink and later, him catching himself on fire while sleeping and holding his cigarette. He died soon after. His son, my uncle who I hung out with a lot, never went to his funeral. Can't say I blame him
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David Kavanagh
Date: 12/31/2023 1:35:00 PM
https://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/cause_and_defect_1527662 I was absolutely delighted to let PS print my 3 poems in the new anthology, not naivety it was a free will donation from me!
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Tom Woody
Date: 12/31/2023 1:20:00 PM
Many of us view the PS anthology for what it is David: a money grab on the part of the owner. Taking advantage of PS members' naivete. I don't think you'll find it on the NY Times bestseller list. However, of you'd like to steer me to it id be happy to check it out. I'm feeling generous of late
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David Kavanagh
Date: 12/31/2023 1:09:00 PM
Hey read my poem (cause and defect) it got great reviews in the latest poetry soup anthology !
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David Kavanagh
Date: 12/31/2023 1:00:00 PM
I remove nothing, nor do I ask others to remove comments, I will let other's judge your comment for themselves!
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Tom Woody
Date: 12/31/2023 12:51:00 PM
Actually the comments box is for whatever the reader might care to write: a comment on the poem itself, how it moved him/her, memories triggered or critique. Whatever. However, if you wish my comment removed I can oblige. Just let me know
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David Kavanagh
Date: 12/31/2023 11:58:00 AM
The comments box is for critique on the poem, good or bad I don’t mind, It’s not a scar comparing contest, my uncle was a salt of the earth guy, who let us run wild and do as we wished around his farm, gave us pocket money and never swore in front of us, ok he had some old school traits, but was a unique well loved character, I remember his funeral well mainly because of the huge crowds that attended!

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