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Autumnal

Smoky mornings drifting like woodsmoke on the breeze... mushrooms are white buttons in grass dew-damp. Snapping berries from barbs my fingers sunset-stained; the puce juice of drupelet fruit now bleeding. Swollen the pregnant pods sway on summer-scorched stems - seed-heavy wombs that will soon birth winter. Goodbye the winds soft-sigh... a crackling cremation of crimson as leaves die, skies cry goodbye...

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Paige Hind

Date: 11/10/2023 8:17:00 PM

Lovely work! A gifted soul! I loved the last rhyming parts. :)

Joanna Daniel

Date: 10/8/2023 3:15:00 AM

Such a special poem, Charlotte:) you pen magic with your words:) congratulations on winning:)

Christina Bowring

Date: 10/7/2023 3:44:00 AM

What a beautiful autumnal poem Charlotte. You are such a great poet with a unique, wonderful talent of vivid, visual imagery. I love this poem. Like Sotto says, you write in such a captivating way that it transfers the reader there. So many joyful poetic lines, ‘Mushrooms are white buttons’’ sway on summer scorched stems’. The last stanza, with an air of sadness, is very profound. Simply divine poetry at is best. Many congratulations. Smiles and hugs for a wonderful autumnal weekend. :):)

Ink Empress

Date: 10/6/2023 10:46:00 PM

Ive been reading a lot of autumnal poems lately especially haiku on insta as im hosting an event, but this! Is another level! Your choice of descriptive words are beyond artistic and unique! I really love especially” woodsmoke on the breeze...“ snapping berries one, and also the last cinquain! Beautiful soul warming and profound cinquain chain, so autumn ish and the imagery is impeccable! A fave for me this is definitely! You really have an original way of pairing words! I love that

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 10/6/2023 2:58:00 PM

You are a master of imagery! Congratulations, Charlotte!

John Hamilton

Date: 10/5/2023 2:54:00 PM

Congrats on another winning write, your phraseology is outstanding, knew it was a winner.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 10/5/2023 10:20:00 AM

- Back with a well-deserved congratulations ... I knew this would be a top winning poem, Charlotte :) - hugs

Sotto Poet

Date: 10/5/2023 8:15:00 AM

Congratulations, Charlotte, on your well-deserved victory! Your poem beautifully captures the essence of the changing season and the shift in mood that accompanies it. I love the way you have shaped your words to create cool and refreshing imagery, transporting the reader to a world where they can almost feel the crisp autumn air against their skin. Your skillful use of vivid details truly brings your poem to life, making it an absolute pleasure to read. Well done!

Curie Stark

Date: 10/5/2023 3:16:00 AM

Beautiful poem

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 10/4/2023 6:29:00 AM

Cool shape and poem. You captured the change of season and mood.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 10/3/2023 11:48:00 AM

- Wow...a wonderful poem, Charlotte -

Charlotte Puddifoot
Date: 10/3/2023 12:23:00 PM

thanks, glad you enjoyed it

I Am Anaya

Date: 10/3/2023 9:03:00 AM

Similes and lush earthy embellishments fertile and fecund. The 2,4,6,8,2 shaped up nicely as they resemble trees. Sweater weather is here!

I Am Anaya
Date: 10/5/2023 8:15:00 AM

Back with congratulations on your top win Charlotte!

Charlotte Puddifoot
Date: 10/3/2023 12:23:00 PM

appreciate the alliterative comment!

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 10/3/2023 8:48:00 AM

Amazing writing. I just love this. It's brilliant. Autumn is my favorite season so this sings and sighs and sends hope to my soul. Love it so. A Fave. God bless you, Love, Gina

Charlotte Puddifoot
Date: 10/3/2023 12:24:00 PM

very kind, thank you

Tom Woody

Date: 10/3/2023 8:23:00 AM

No goodbye. More like, see ya next year. I agree with Dilly (or is it Dally?) your poetry is always unique, not easily imitated. Always worth the wait

Charlotte Puddifoot
Date: 10/3/2023 12:25:00 PM

goodbyes are much on my mind at the moment..glad you liked it

Di11y Da11y

Date: 10/3/2023 7:12:00 AM

Having read 4000 Autumn poems I can offer my wisdom that yours is indeed both excellent and unique :)

Tom Woody
Date: 10/3/2023 4:23:00 PM

I've read 4,004. I win

Charlotte Puddifoot
Date: 10/3/2023 12:26:00 PM

thanks for your kind comment :)