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Autumn

Autumn unreeled Forests shaken hollow Shipwrecked beauty Tree masts of moss Colourful mobs of decay Last strands of conceit Rag tag laurels Like history distorted Flaws of stark war Extreme agitation Unwinnable season Outcomes unavoidable Red leaf troops dying Loosened egos ragged contortion receding to cold.

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Date: 5/13/2020 9:41:00 PM
Brian, this is really good. Your choice of words impressed me ... hope I had those wombinations. Lines 2 and the last lines are especially good. (Sorry to point to typos, or spelling: DYING maybe, not "dieing"). Thanks, ANIL DEO
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 5/24/2020 10:48:00 PM
Hello Anil Thank you for noticing the typo. Correction made along with a new final line but I am not sure that it improves the poem. Still revisions are useful for added meaning. Best wishes always. Brian