Brian Sambourne Poet Free verse

Autumn

Autumn unreeled
Forests shaken hollow
               settling
               like shipwrecked beauty
Tree masts of moss
Colourful mobs of decay
                 unspooling
Last strands of conceit
Rag tag laurels
        capsized
        casual drift of sacrifice

Diced leaves of October,
         change
         that drains potency
Resplendent wreckage
An unraveling season
                    faint
                    in slim, silvered light
Outcomes unavoidable
       with fertility plundered

Gold leaf patches 
                 fallen
        treasures washed overboard
        a trail of flotsam 
        in the lost ego of summer

 Ragged contortion
                in sea-water cold
                in a quiet that marks 
                                         transition











Poem composed: Spring 2020
(Revised September 29th, 2022)

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Susan Ashley October 8, 2022 at 10:30 AM Dear Brian, I so appreciate your creative genius! I am enchanted with this incredible treasure trove of metaphors and wonderful use of language. I especially enjoyed the use of the words "unreeled" and "unspooling" and "unraveling", which ironically, adds cohesion to each successive stanza's amazing imagery.. and I enjoyed the Fall season being related to and "settling like shipwrecked beauty"! Your artistry astounds and delights my heart's imagination -- A Fav! Congratulations for your excellent win in Mark's contest. Warmest wishes, my inspiring friend.. ~Susan Brian Sambourne October 8, 2022 at 11:34 AM Greetings Susan. Thank you for most thoughtful appraisal of my small posting. Perceptively, you catch the repetition of "un" words. Your comments are so detailed + heartfelt that they lift the pens of so many poets here on poetrysoup.com. Now that I am over my 3rd bout of Covid, I will attempt a few more submissions. As always, your comments (+ poems) gleam in an often dark world. Be well dear lady. Brian

Lin Lane October 3, 2022 at 4:07 AM Congratulations on your winning entry, Brian. Brian Sambourne October 3, 2022 at 7:33 AM My appreciation for your your drop by + congratulatory wishes. Be well. Cheers. Brian

Mark Toney September 27, 2022 at 4:11 PM Brian, your revised poem from 2020 is a gem. Excellent use of simile "like shipwrecked beauty" and metaphors. You describe my favorite season in ways I've never heard before, and yet your description is spot-on. A Fav poem for me. Congratulations on your win on Mile 14 of my 2022 Poetry Marathon Contest. We're over halfway to the finish line! Keep your running shoes on, because Mile 15 has already started. Brian Sambourne September 27, 2022 at 5:17 PM Hello Mark Thank you for the recognition + placement. I often tinker with my poems + make revisions. I agree with you - autumn has its own beauty + flourish. Be well. Brian

Anil Deo May 13, 2020 at 9:41 PM Brian, this is really good. Your choice of words impressed me ... hope I had those wombinations. Lines 2 and the last lines are especially good. (Sorry to point to typos, or spelling: DYING maybe, not "dieing"). Thanks, ANIL DEO Brian Sambourne May 24, 2020 at 10:48 PM Hello Anil Thank you for noticing the typo. Correction made along with a new final line but I am not sure that it improves the poem. Still revisions are useful for added meaning. Best wishes always. Brian