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At the Shore

It's the summer of my fourth year. Dad is driving us to the seashore. The sun follows us, a happy fellow, beaming in the mid-morning’s azure sky. In the back seat with my two sisters, I’m looking out the window as I crunch on Mom’s homemade salty Chex Mix, anticipating the warmth of salt spray from the waves I’ll be jumping on this beautiful day - Life is a beach not yet even in my vocabulary. We are now at the shore, a large blanket laid out, Mom with her bright red hair tied back with a brighter red check scarf, and my dad, dark-haired and handsome, smiling. So rare is this happy countenance he wears today! For a while I sit as if entranced, watching the waves roll in. But eventually, and predictably, my joy ebbs like the tide. Dark clouds are gathering; gray begins to envelop the sky. I look over to my dad; the gray has recaptured his face. In the vanishing sunlight, familiar dark thoughts invade my mind - Dad, can I see you be happy just once for a whole day? Rain . . . always it rains when we go to the seashore. Was posted 2/4/16 and now being used for Second Chance Poetry Contest of Broken Wings on 3/7/2016

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Date: 4/22/2016 11:26:00 AM
You ruined my beach day! It started out so sunny and bright!
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Date: 3/21/2016 7:59:00 PM
Glad to see this poem get the attention it deserves Andrea. Big Congratulations on your top placement! #7 ;)
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Date: 3/21/2016 12:09:00 PM
Hi Andrea, an excellent write. Congratulations on your win in the contest. I was sure i had read this one before Andrea, i must have just forgot to comment. Sometimes one can go no further than to say excellent Andrea. This seems like one of those times. I was captivated from beginning to end. Definitely a seven and into my faves....MIKE
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Date: 3/21/2016 2:11:00 AM
Excellent Andrea. Congratulations on your first placement! #7 ;)
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Date: 3/21/2016 1:33:00 AM
Very well deserved victory Andrea, congratulations...
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Date: 3/20/2016 11:58:00 PM
This is talented writing that was my pleasure to read. I gather this interesting, well-written delight got a 2nd breathe and wonder how I missed it on 2/4! Truly, truly enjoyed reading this ... CayCay (I can't sleep yet)
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Date: 3/20/2016 2:48:00 PM
Dropping back with my congrats Andrea so good to see this poem given the chance to be showcased again:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 3/20/2016 12:34:00 PM
Lovely and very touching, Andrea. Congratulations on your well-deserved win. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 3/20/2016 11:34:00 AM
Very effective poem my friend. "Dad, can I see you be happy just once for a whole day?" This line delivers the kick and really sinks the poem into the reader. Congrats on you win.
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Date: 3/20/2016 9:50:00 AM
Andrea, "Dad, can I see you be happy just once for a whole day? Rain . . . always it rains when we go to the seashore." Perfect final lines..well done and congrats on your top placement :)-luloo
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Date: 2/11/2016 8:24:00 AM
I believe his mood affected you the most sis. You wrote this so well about his moods. Wish he had been more of that sunshine in your life.
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Date: 2/9/2016 8:23:00 PM
I absolutely love the last line. I have a thing for great endings such as this. It's what will bring me back to read again.
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Date: 2/8/2016 6:30:00 AM
Andrea, this is very touching. It's a burden on children when their parents have issues. So, at least you had that experience to help you understand how to be a better parent. It's amazing how these feelings stick to us forever. There are certain things that just never leave us.
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Date: 2/7/2016 8:49:00 PM
Hello Andrea ... vivid description on the moods of adults and kids. Good luck Andrea - Lindsay
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Date: 2/6/2016 11:15:00 AM
Thanks for faving one of my poems, Andrea. I'm not the most consistent Souper on this site, it seems ...
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Date: 2/5/2016 4:44:00 PM
i see you found time to muse one for this topic :) you set the scene up beautifully, it made me think back to my own childhood trips to the beach, memories i now hold dearest....enjoyed this one, hugs
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Date: 2/5/2016 8:10:00 AM
- Gives me a deep impression, with both positive and negative sides Andrea - GREAT !- Luck in contest - Happy weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 2/5/2016 4:13:00 AM
Andie, love that you italized that one.. =`) and I like how you wrote this, revelations and revelations.. =`)~ Olive ELoisa =`)
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Date: 2/5/2016 3:15:00 AM
A revealing poem about the challenges of growing up and trying to understand adults. A great entry Andrea, as usual. You always take a unique approach. I have been writing more lately. Hope have a great week end.
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Date: 2/5/2016 2:54:00 AM
A Vivid picture you paint here, Andrea.
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Date: 2/5/2016 12:29:00 AM
A very sad write, worth a tear or two...such a heartfelt write..I hesitate to say I enjoyed it, but I did. BG
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Date: 2/4/2016 8:00:00 PM
Speechless. Emotional memories leave deep scars.
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Date: 2/4/2016 7:06:00 PM
Deeper undertones than the seemingly atmospheric write. I love the easy start and sudden turn. All the best, Andie! hugs
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Date: 2/4/2016 6:49:00 PM
Agree with David here. It's so bright, cheery and vivid in the beginning and then ... darkness. Those two last lines are almost haunting.
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Date: 2/4/2016 6:20:00 PM
very poignant slide from joy to melancholy…terrific shift in mood
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