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Ashen Skies

beneath ashen skies i walk on though the shadows of darkened days where in life's game i am the pawn moving about within its haze i shift about as if strided beneath ashen skies i walk on in shallow steps my feet guided towards the depths of unlit dawn with clouded masks and tears now drawn i steadily trudge through this mist beneath ashen skies i walk on towards death somewhere in its midst yet as i start to fall off course my strength within tells death be gone then guides me with an unseen force beneath ashen skies i walk on january 25, 2020 distant refrains contest sponsored by Joseph May

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Date: 2/17/2020 10:29:00 AM
Your words are addictive, beauty normally is. Congrats on your finish in this contest Sandy
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/18/2020 9:17:00 AM
what a sweet thing to say, thank you Chris... hugs
Date: 2/16/2020 2:29:00 PM
Beautiful, Sandra, and I especially love the way your strength tells death to be gone. We have that power to choose and with some effort, we can change outcomes. Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 2/16/2020 4:52:00 PM
thank you so much Carolyn...I've had some brushes with death but I am a fighter...hugs
Date: 2/16/2020 6:46:00 AM
This flowed so effortlessly, Sandy, nicely penned. Congrats on your placement. Hugs, John
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Date: 2/16/2020 4:51:00 PM
thank you so much John... hugs
Date: 2/16/2020 5:56:00 AM
towards the depths of unlit dawn... Beautiful line Sandra.. Congrats on your great win in the contest...
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/16/2020 4:51:00 PM
Thank you so much Jenish :) hugs
Date: 2/15/2020 1:12:00 PM
Wow, awesome poem. Congrats on your well deserved win, Sandra.
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Date: 2/16/2020 4:50:00 PM
thank you so much Line... hugs
Date: 2/15/2020 12:30:00 PM
Beautiful write Sandra, Congrats on your win..
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/16/2020 4:49:00 PM
thank you so much Joseph and thanks for such another great contest that allowed me to try another form :) hugs
Date: 2/15/2020 10:54:00 AM
Congratulations on your placement in the contest, Sandra - this is full of angst, yet so inspiring at the end-
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/16/2020 4:48:00 PM
Thank you so much Michelle...my muse likes her darker moments in life... hugs
Date: 2/7/2020 7:58:00 PM
So smooth, so soothing, so strong....
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/7/2020 9:07:00 PM
Thank you so much Pax :)
Date: 1/27/2020 11:27:00 AM
Your imagery is uplifting.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 1/27/2020 12:11:00 PM
Thank you Caren :)
Date: 1/27/2020 6:56:00 AM
Loved the ending of this beauty. very dark and lonely feeling to start out but a light shines at the end to guide you to your smile again. Best wishes in the contest my friend.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 1/27/2020 10:19:00 AM
Thank you so much Chris for all your kind words..your comments are always so touching :) hugs
Date: 1/26/2020 11:37:00 AM
Well done Sandy, enjoyed this one very much. One would never imagine you struggle with rhyme, but you've penned a winner here!
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Sandra Adams
Date: 1/26/2020 2:04:00 PM
Thank you so much John...i definitely struggled with this one, glad you hear you think it turned out well :) hugs
Date: 1/26/2020 7:35:00 AM
Nice imagery you painted beneath the ashen skies--I like the human emotions blended in the images nature evokes--you executed this difficult form well, Sandy.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 1/26/2020 2:03:00 PM
Thank you so much Vijay... i like to at least attempt some of these difficult forms... sometimes my muse agrees, sometimes now... enjoy your sunday :) hugs
Date: 1/25/2020 10:13:00 PM
Tragedy with a 'rescue twist' works for me. The darkness was penetrating. Superb quatern! Best wishes, Gershon
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Sandra Adams
Date: 1/26/2020 6:10:00 AM
Thank you so much Gershon:) hugs
Date: 1/25/2020 7:09:00 PM
Though you said you struggled with this form, it turned at really well!
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Sandra Adams
Date: 1/25/2020 7:15:00 PM
Thank you so much Juliet...it was a struggle...i was determined though...and i struggled so hard with it my muse went silent for two days...today she decided to attempt again! hugs
Date: 1/25/2020 5:50:00 PM
Fine worded piece Sandy, good imagery and insightful thought with nice rhyme too. Hugs and blessings,Gordon
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Sandra Adams
Date: 1/25/2020 5:57:00 PM
Thank you so much Gordon... hugs and blessings to you my friend :)
Date: 1/25/2020 5:41:00 PM
I can see you walking through it all. The skies are beautiful both dark and light. Enjoy your weekend.............
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Sandra Adams
Date: 1/25/2020 5:55:00 PM
thank you so much Paula.... you enjoy your weekend as well... :) hugs
Date: 1/25/2020 5:00:00 PM
excellent poem. this is a nice poetry form
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Sandra Adams
Date: 1/25/2020 5:11:00 PM
Thank you so much Robert...i struggled with this one but wanted to try this contest form :) hugs

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