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In the vortex of a maelstrom, I was rudely thrown drowning in turbulent waters for an error I bemoan, a blunder of loving someone who chose to whittle away at my heart until it became fragile and brittle Bereft beyond the point of caring if I lived or died My eyes were scarlet, burning from tears I'd cried But they became transfixed, immutable on a fire stoked for my normally tenuous demeanor had been provoked I was a genteel lady, who demurely acquiesed to love but it was time for me to throw down the gauntlet glove I was chafed by what had been just an interlude for him, an escapade, a mere dalliance, a rascally romantic whim I drew a rough sketch; in likeness of my vagabond swain an abstract portrait, in Picasso's style, the face of my bane Black eyes were hollow, blind orbs that would never see that his triflling peccadillo tryst was a brutal betrayal to me The painting was delivered as twelve bells pealed midnight I watched as he unfolded it, but carefully kept out of sight A formidable opponent I had become to his knavish ways By moonlight I saw his face turn pale; his eyes were glazed * November 3, 2017* Eight Word Challenge-5 Hosted by John Hamilton 8 Words required were: Brittle Immutable Formidable Tenuous Interlude Sketch Bereft Demurely

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Date: 11/4/2017 12:58:00 PM
incredible talent with the 8 words given was your sketch voo-doo driven? :)
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Date: 12/14/2017 8:04:00 AM
You didn't need to apologize, Donna, but thank you for doing so.
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Date: 12/7/2017 11:14:00 AM
My apologies Lin
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Date: 11/4/2017 5:22:00 PM
Thank you for the compliment of liking the write, but nothing from me ever stems from paganistic voo doo.
Date: 11/4/2017 12:29:00 PM
Congratulations for your top win Lin. Well done! :)
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Date: 11/4/2017 5:21:00 PM
Thanks a bundle, Heidi.
Date: 11/4/2017 10:28:00 AM
Great write Lin, I love the story the eight words rang with the midnight bells...Congrats on your win
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Date: 11/4/2017 5:21:00 PM
Thanks ever so much for your remarks, Joseph.
Date: 11/4/2017 10:18:00 AM
Terrific work Lin, as always. Congratulations...
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Date: 11/4/2017 5:21:00 PM
Thank you very much, dear Charlie
Date: 11/4/2017 10:16:00 AM
I absolutely love it! You created a widow and let us peek in to your thoughts. Truly wonder work. I also love the picture, is this public domain or the work of a particular artist, I love to use it on one of my poems ? It really sums up your poem nicely. Emile.
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Date: 11/4/2017 5:20:00 PM
Thanks a bunch, Emile. It's public domain.. right off of google. Let me know when you use it. I'd love to read what you write for such a painting.
Date: 11/4/2017 9:27:00 AM
Lovely story Lin--you are an awesome poet--congrats on your first place!
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Date: 11/4/2017 5:19:00 PM
Thanks for the kind comments, Vijay.
Date: 11/4/2017 7:57:00 AM
Congrats, Lin!
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Date: 11/4/2017 8:23:00 AM
Thank you so very much, Dale.
Date: 11/4/2017 7:57:00 AM
way to go Lin I KNEW this would be a top place for you!!!:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 11/4/2017 8:23:00 AM
Thanks ever so much for the encouragement, Jan. Hugs to you.
Date: 11/4/2017 7:23:00 AM
Congrats on your top win, Lin. Great storytelling.
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Date: 11/4/2017 8:22:00 AM
Thank you most sincerely, Agnes.
Date: 11/4/2017 5:50:00 AM
Congratulations on your top placement, Lin: You wove a great story around these challenging words. Hugs, SuZ
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Date: 11/4/2017 8:22:00 AM
Thank you so very much, Suz. I appreciate the kind comments.
Date: 11/4/2017 3:05:00 AM
Congratulations on your great win, Lin.
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Date: 11/4/2017 8:22:00 AM
Thanks very much, Subimal. I haven't read the winner's list yet, but I'll do it now.
Date: 11/3/2017 8:37:00 PM
I thought this must be you Lin, wow, saving the best till last, this was amazing could not have asked for more, congrats on solo number 1!
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Date: 11/4/2017 8:21:00 AM
You honor me with your comments, John, and each one is as greatly appreciated as this win. It's always a pleasure to write for you and I thank you very sincerely.
Date: 11/3/2017 12:07:00 PM
You know when you are being played...lovely prose Lin
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Date: 11/3/2017 6:09:00 PM
Sometimes not soon enough. Thanks a lot for the read and comment, Tim.
Date: 11/3/2017 9:26:00 AM
Wow Lin you wove the words in so wonderfully into tell this sad tale. I especially love the lines 'I was chafed by what had been just an interlude for him, an escapade, a mere dalliance, a rascally romantic whim' is very descriptive and he sounds like a real cad and unfortunately people do get taken in by this type of guy:-(:-( good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 11/3/2017 9:41:00 AM
Thanks very much, Jan. I appreciate you for pointing out what you especially liked. I think the artwork I chose for this one matches the words that came out of left field for this write. Ha...it was almost an out-of-body experience.

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