Lin Lane Poet Rhyme

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As Midnight Bells Pealed

In the vortex of a maelstrom, I was rudely thrown
drowning in turbulent waters for an error I bemoan,
a blunder of loving someone who chose to whittle
away at my heart until it became fragile and brittle

Bereft beyond the point of caring if I lived or died
My eyes were scarlet, burning from tears I'd cried
But they became transfixed, immutable on a fire stoked
for my normally tenuous demeanor had been provoked

I was a genteel lady, who demurely acquiesed to love
but it was time for me to throw down the gauntlet glove
I was chafed by what had been just an interlude for him,
an escapade, a mere dalliance, a rascally romantic whim

I drew a rough sketch; in likeness of my vagabond swain
an abstract portrait, in Picasso's style, the face of my bane
Black eyes were hollow, blind orbs that would never see
that his triflling peccadillo tryst was a brutal betrayal to me

The painting was delivered as twelve bells pealed midnight
I watched as he unfolded it, but carefully kept out of sight
A formidable opponent I had become to his knavish ways
By moonlight I saw his face turn pale; his eyes were glazed


* November 3, 2017*
Eight Word Challenge-5
Hosted by John Hamilton

8 Words required were: Brittle    Immutable    Formidable  
Tenuous    Interlude      Sketch      Bereft         Demurely

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Donna Roberts November 4, 2017 at 12:58 PM incredible talent with the 8 words given was your sketch voo-doo driven? :) Lin Lane December 14, 2017 at 8:04 AM You didn't need to apologize, Donna, but thank you for doing so. Donna Roberts December 7, 2017 at 11:14 AM My apologies Lin Lin Lane November 4, 2017 at 5:22 PM Thank you for the compliment of liking the write, but nothing from me ever stems from paganistic voo doo.

Heidi Sands November 4, 2017 at 12:29 PM Congratulations for your top win Lin. Well done! :) Lin Lane November 4, 2017 at 5:21 PM Thanks a bundle, Heidi.

Joseph May November 4, 2017 at 10:28 AM Great write Lin, I love the story the eight words rang with the midnight bells...Congrats on your win Lin Lane November 4, 2017 at 5:21 PM Thanks ever so much for your remarks, Joseph.

Charlie Smith November 4, 2017 at 10:18 AM Terrific work Lin, as always. Congratulations... Lin Lane November 4, 2017 at 5:21 PM Thank you very much, dear Charlie

Emile Pinet November 4, 2017 at 10:16 AM I absolutely love it! You created a widow and let us peek in to your thoughts. Truly wonder work. I also love the picture, is this public domain or the work of a particular artist, I love to use it on one of my poems ? It really sums up your poem nicely. Emile. Lin Lane November 4, 2017 at 5:20 PM Thanks a bunch, Emile. It's public domain.. right off of google. Let me know when you use it. I'd love to read what you write for such a painting.

Vijay Pandit November 4, 2017 at 9:27 AM Lovely story Lin--you are an awesome poet--congrats on your first place! Lin Lane November 4, 2017 at 5:19 PM Thanks for the kind comments, Vijay.

Jan Allison November 4, 2017 at 7:57 AM way to go Lin I KNEW this would be a top place for you!!!:-) hugs jan xx Lin Lane November 4, 2017 at 8:23 AM Thanks ever so much for the encouragement, Jan. Hugs to you.

Dale Gregory Cozart November 4, 2017 at 7:57 AM Congrats, Lin! Lin Lane November 4, 2017 at 8:23 AM Thank you so very much, Dale.

Agnes Krampe November 4, 2017 at 7:23 AM Congrats on your top win, Lin. Great storytelling. Lin Lane November 4, 2017 at 8:22 AM Thank you most sincerely, Agnes.

Suzanne Delaney November 4, 2017 at 5:50 AM Congratulations on your top placement, Lin: You wove a great story around these challenging words. Hugs, SuZ Lin Lane November 4, 2017 at 8:22 AM Thank you so very much, Suz. I appreciate the kind comments.

Subimal Sinha-Roy November 4, 2017 at 3:05 AM Congratulations on your great win, Lin. Lin Lane November 4, 2017 at 8:22 AM Thanks very much, Subimal. I haven't read the winner's list yet, but I'll do it now.

John Hamilton November 3, 2017 at 8:37 PM I thought this must be you Lin, wow, saving the best till last, this was amazing could not have asked for more, congrats on solo number 1! Lin Lane November 4, 2017 at 8:21 AM You honor me with your comments, John, and each one is as greatly appreciated as this win. It's always a pleasure to write for you and I thank you very sincerely.

Tim Smith November 3, 2017 at 12:07 PM You know when you are being played...lovely prose Lin Lin Lane November 3, 2017 at 6:09 PM Sometimes not soon enough. Thanks a lot for the read and comment, Tim.

Jan Allison November 3, 2017 at 9:26 AM Wow Lin you wove the words in so wonderfully into tell this sad tale. I especially love the lines 'I was chafed by what had been just an interlude for him, an escapade, a mere dalliance, a rascally romantic whim' is very descriptive and he sounds like a real cad and unfortunately people do get taken in by this type of guy:-(:-( good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx Lin Lane November 3, 2017 at 9:41 AM Thanks very much, Jan. I appreciate you for pointing out what you especially liked. I think the artwork I chose for this one matches the words that came out of left field for this write. Ha...it was almost an out-of-body experience.