Premiere Contest WinnerAngels Danced

The empyreal rise of sun reflected in crimson glows on tips of gold and green leaves, and the edges of your hair as you drew your first breath. So sweet the sound of air exhaled, like a zephyr in the late days of august when leaves are turning over then pirouetting down in the gossamer breeze, gracefully towards the ground. I am sure the angels moved in the same ethereal tone on the day you were birthed. Oh how the years seemed to fly as if on wings of tepid breezes. Sometimes I wish we could see time, years like lines on trees and count our days. If one could trace the paths of life, see the roots like trees, they would know if they were grounded on the paths like limbs and know how far they would extend. I see myself like autumn's trees, less grounded, naked in the wake of your passing. I feel the blush of my flesh fade in less hue then the near colorless trees as they peer back at me. I hear the faint chimes fall like church bells through their shallow branches as they quiver from winter-like chills in the passing of seasons and the change it brings. I feel the cries from skies, as they fall from the corners of my own eyes in the chagrin of storms and its resemblance to death yet I know I do not cry alone.
somber are the skies when you hear the angel's cries through zephyr of wind
August 22, 2019 Angels Danced Poetry Contest Sponsored by Lu Loo * today august 22, happens to be my brother's heavenly birthday, tomorrow will mark 9 years since his passing, he passed at the age of 49 and 1 day, sadly!
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De Beaulieu Avatar
May 21, 2020 at 6:23 PM
Hello Sandra Adams, such a beautiful poem that you created. Enjoy your evening my friend.
Hamilton Avatar
September 8, 2019 at 11:02 PM
Back for another read, no surprise this was a top winner, and rightly so!
Adams Avatar
September 9, 2019 at 5:01 AM
Thank you John this win actually made me teary eyed. :) hugs
Lamoureux Avatar
September 7, 2019 at 1:46 PM
Congrats, I must say the judge has excellent taste. Hugs Rick
Adams Avatar
September 9, 2019 at 5:02 AM
Aww thank you Rick your words humbled me :) hugs
Godwin Avatar
September 7, 2019 at 12:52 PM
You got the golden trophy! Yay, Brenda - I'm so glad/happy for you. Well deserved and BRAVO ... CayCay
Adams Avatar
September 9, 2019 at 5:04 AM
Thank you Cay Cay. It Welled my eyes up when I saw the trophy. This was a special poem :) hugs
Allison Avatar
September 6, 2019 at 1:00 AM
a beautiful tribute Sandra I had a huge lump in my throat reading your poem, many congrats on your trophy win:-) hugs Jan xx
Adams Avatar
September 6, 2019 at 5:13 PM
Thank you Jan...i think he fueled my pen that day :) hugs
Mcintosh Avatar
September 5, 2019 at 4:22 PM
This is such a beautifully written piece. I enjoyed reading it and felt so sad... I lost a uncle who was 12 years older than me who was just like a brother, so I definitely empathize with your thoughts here. God bless you and congratulations on the first place win!!!
Adams Avatar
September 5, 2019 at 4:51 PM
Thank you for your kind words and visit today, sorry about your loss as well but glad my piece touched you, this one was a special write for me :) hugs
Marcum Wong Avatar
September 5, 2019 at 2:19 PM
I am sorry for the loss of your brother Sandy. I am sure you have wonderful memories of your life together. Your Haibun was very beautifully written and touching. Congratulations on your deserving Trophy win! I didn't read the rules right either. Hugs, Connie xxoo
Adams Avatar
September 5, 2019 at 4:50 PM
Thank you my friend... he passed one day after turning 49, it was hard, my mom passed at 55 so it makes you question life constantly...hugs :)
Andresen Avatar
September 5, 2019 at 11:16 AM
- Yes, it is written in black and white "Write a new haibun on the theme: "Angels danced the day you were born, and they wept when they welcomed you home " - ... I didn't read the rules properly ... but, you did Sandra :) - Congratulations on your top win !!! - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Adams Avatar
September 5, 2019 at 4:49 PM
Thank you Anne-Lise... this one was special to me, so when it won and what Lu Loo wrote actually made me teary eyed :) hugs
Green Avatar
September 5, 2019 at 10:25 AM
Wow!!!!! Congratulations my friend, I am so excited to see this one at the top of the winners list. This was beautiful and in my opinion, definitely the winner going in. Big congratulations on this stunner, you deserved this Sandy.
Adams Avatar
September 5, 2019 at 10:37 AM
Thank you Chris, your words touch me... this piece was special to me and perhaps i had a guiding hand from above helping me pen this one... hugs :)
Scars Avatar
September 5, 2019 at 9:45 AM
wow! I couldn't wait to see whose poem this was! :) But...not surprised it was you sweet Sandra. Beautiful imagery, lovely softness in the rhythm (though a haibun)Be blessed :) Thank you for your participation and congratulations on your placement :) -luloo
Adams Avatar
September 5, 2019 at 9:52 AM
your sweet words brought tears to my eyes, mainly joy, this was a special poem for me, and the first place win is an honor, thank you for the win and hosting this wonderful contest...:) hugs
Godwin Avatar
August 26, 2019 at 2:03 AM
Add this to the last piece I read and it equals one very talented writer. Expressing your individual creativity as INTENDED is you shining at your best for all the world to radiate in the light you bring. Be confident as your pen does ink as spirit propelled words that in lines excel. Love it. Poetry hugs ... CayCay
Adams Avatar
August 26, 2019 at 7:26 AM
Thank you Cay Cay...your kind words and visits are appreciated... hugs :)
Foster Avatar
August 26, 2019 at 1:42 AM
Truly lovely piece. Ann
Adams Avatar
August 26, 2019 at 7:25 AM
Thank you so much Ann, for the visit and the comment :)
Krutsinger Avatar
August 25, 2019 at 6:53 AM
Darling tribute to nature and your darling brother; so sweetly penned, Sandra.
Adams Avatar
August 25, 2019 at 11:13 AM
Thank you my friend...sometimes it seems like yesterday he was laid to rest... hugs :)
Marcum Wong Avatar
August 25, 2019 at 2:22 AM
A beautiful haibun extoling the beauty as Nature heals. I am sorry about your loss Sandra. Love, Connie
Adams Avatar
August 25, 2019 at 11:13 AM
Thank you my sweet friend...this time of year always brings out the pain of loss in my writes...too many lost at such young ages, so many in summer, fall.... hugs :)
Flaherty Avatar
August 23, 2019 at 5:51 PM
Somber are the Skies Angel Cries Maybe these are Lightning & Thunderstorms
Adams Avatar
August 23, 2019 at 8:08 PM
or just simple summer rains that fall upon us... guess we will never know... thanks for the visit and comment~
Hamilton Avatar
August 23, 2019 at 11:07 AM
Wonderful writing Sandy, this comes from a sadness few understand, how death leaves it's mark like an unwanted tattoo on our hearts. At least you are able to reach out to others to help them understand that there is hope after loss! My deepest condolences for your brother!
Adams Avatar
August 23, 2019 at 11:20 AM
Thank you John... this time of year always draws in the pain when memories are brought forth...many tattoos are on my heart...all you can do is reach out to others...i seem to be the shoulder of many friend's cries because they are just experiencing loss for the first time in life... hugs
Andresen Avatar
August 23, 2019 at 7:52 AM
- Oh ... so heartbreaking beautiful ... he was too young to die, but I'm sure he dances with the angels ... and smile to you today :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Adams Avatar
August 23, 2019 at 11:17 AM
Thank you Anne-Lise.... his picture pops up all over facebook on his bday and the day after...always sad to see, but it makes for good poetry within the sorrow and pain of memories... hugs :)
Dietrich Avatar
August 22, 2019 at 7:23 PM
OMG, another outstanding poem from you, Sandy. you really need to write a book!! Your dad passed away much too young. A heavenly birthday to him. he died one day after his birthday? My dad just recently died a few days short of his birthday!
Adams Avatar
August 22, 2019 at 7:34 PM
Thank you Andrea, no my brother died the day after his birthday at the age of 49 and one day....my mother was 55 when she passed and my father left us one year after at the age of 75.... hugs :)
Pandit Avatar
August 22, 2019 at 3:25 PM
Your poem is a tribute to your brother's memory..a loss so painful at any age, but he was quite young..your love flows in your words. All the best Sandra.
Adams Avatar
August 22, 2019 at 3:33 PM
Thank you Vijay, my mother, father, brother and all aunts, uncles and grandparents are gone, many passed way before their time...only my sister and i remain in the family we knew through our childhood years, aside from a few cousins. Death is something that comes forth in many of my writes, especially this time of year, when soon autumn will color everything and then in its cooler breath strip life temporarily from trees and grass.... hugs :)
Green Avatar
August 22, 2019 at 3:14 PM
I am in awe of your wonderful and creative poetry. I do, now that I have read a few of your pieces, know where this comes from and it is sad and lonely but there is a beauty to your words as if those angels dance upon your pen. I am sorry for your loss as I can see this is a tough day but thank you for sharing this beautiful piece of writing with us. Once again, I am in awe.
Adams Avatar
August 22, 2019 at 3:30 PM
Thank you Chris...today his birthday, tomorrow the date of death, also my grandmother's birthday tomorrow, which is the date my mother thought she would pass of cancer....i believe she purposely held on until sept 1, she passed at the age of 55....so i have known death's wrath most my life, my grandmother was my rock and passed at 62 when i was 9....this time of year is tough for me.... hugs :)
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