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A collaboration wtih The Seeker.  

That godless sound
His head explodes at 6:01am
Same as every day
He falls out of bed
Steps on the cat
Slides into his slippers
Shuffles to the kitchen
Puts the coffee on
Bumps his head on the cupboard door
Again
Sits down and looks out the window
A blackbird is flying near
Leaves it’s mark on his sill
He gets up
Pours his coffee-
Black with a shot of Irish whiskey
Sits back down
The sky is raining icicles now
Sharp daggers
He drifts off into a dream…

Head keeps spinning, spinning ‘round
From afar a pleasant sound
Laughing, laughing in the dark
Midnight walking in the park
Yellow dress and tiny feet
Ponytails and sugar sweet
Will you, will you marry me
Kiss me darling ‘neath our tree
All the good things life can bring
All the lovesick songs we'll sing
Catch me, catch me if you can
Love this tender, soulful man
Let me show you everything
Please accept this golden ring
Future’s here and future’s now
Come let's share a solemn vow
You’re the one I want for life
You’re the one to be my wife
Living, living wild and free
Me and her and her and me

Coffee spills
Cremates hair on his hand
Yet, he feels no pain
Running water cools
But a scar surfaces
He stares, wondering if it’s a tattoo
Illustrating his hidden pain
Walking past the mirror
He hardly recognises what
appears before him
Dark bags droop
Under blood shot eyes
Overgrown stubble
Has invaded his face
To destroy this image
He lashes out with eyes shut
Blood drips from his hands
Upon stained glass shards
Mirror is smashed-
But he still can’t hide the truth…

Uncontrollable desire
'Fore too long a blazing fire
Knew this thing was simply wrong
Tried his best to stay so strong
Started with a honey kiss
Ended in a twilight bliss
Missing all that's gone and lost
Sinful lust comes at a cost
Memr'ys of his little one
Make him smile but now she's gone
How he yearns for those brown eyes
That danced and flit like butterflies
Due to his illicit choice
He'll ne'er again hear that sweet voice
'I love you daddy' - nevermore
Like salt rubbed in an open sore
He broke her mummy's precious heart
Now they all live miles apart
In anguish all he does is cry-
No one's there to ask him why

Another day ends
Time for bed
The pistol sits on the nightstand
He grabs hold
Cold metal in a sweaty palm
He spins the barrel
Gun rises toward the right temple
Trigger pulled-
CLICK
Nothing
Tomorrow he'll rise again
Face another lonely day
His cat used to sleep at his feet
No More
Even dreams provide no relief
He doesn't remember her name
Still, she taunts him
Haunts his days and nights
He downs a double and a sleeping pill-
Reluctantly continuing an insignificant life.

Silent One and The Seeker collaboration
31 July 2017

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Date: 10/18/2017 3:42:00 PM
I was finding this entertaining up until the shattered mirror. I usually steer clear of depressing poems, but the talent in the lines compensated for the content
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Date: 8/19/2017 7:35:00 PM
The pathos of the human spirit amidst one's most darkest, loneliest hours is deeply disturbing, yet I was riveted, wanting to reach out, to offer a hand in friendship. Consequences of choices is masterfully conveyed and packs an emotional punch with beautiful, simple language. An excellent collaboration, a remarkable write, a great pleasure to read. You have been at the top of my list to read, SO, I am so glad my first read of yours is a partnership with the indomitable Seeker. He is missed:)
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Date: 8/18/2017 9:48:00 AM
Such an emotional write between the both of you gripping and keeping you at the edge of your seat through it all. Excellent and very well done!
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Date: 8/13/2017 3:19:00 PM
The highs and lows in this poem stab the heart with its broken pieces! Shades of my first marriage come to mind. A dark but wonderfully composed collaboration from you both! : )
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Date: 8/13/2017 6:04:00 AM
I am obviously in a minority of one here--but I find all of this rather dark and disturbing! Shades of Sylvia Plath, methinks. Some great lines though...that I will concede. My regards. :) john P.s Lads, life is too short for combined caterwauling...why not combine your talents and produce something a little more hearty...just a passing thought. :)
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john fleming
Date: 8/14/2017 3:03:00 AM
Sounds all rather promising, Mr Dark-Horse...Errr--I mean, White Knight! :)
Date: 8/10/2017 12:24:00 AM
Seeker and SO--a nice combo! Sad that life's like that. Compelling imagery. Great. Ram
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Date: 8/9/2017 10:26:00 AM
Emotionally powerful poem, SO and Seeker. The pathos and the pain is felt deeply in this tragic tale. Very visceral write, not for the faint of heart. Great collab, you two. Love and peace always.
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Date: 8/8/2017 10:06:00 PM
Depressions imagery of ENDING the regretful times of a lonely life spent by rewinding his mind playing regretful times.
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Date: 8/7/2017 8:39:00 PM
I love both of your writes.... This is a great partnership.
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Date: 8/7/2017 5:59:00 AM
You have written in collaboration with many people dear, Silent One and each time the outcome is superb and this collaboration is among the most outstanding you have achieved. Congratulations to both!
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Date: 8/6/2017 3:32:00 PM
Silent One this was a sad poem you wrote. It does not matter I liked this poem anyway.. have a nice day my friend.
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Date: 8/5/2017 11:44:00 AM
So real, so overwhelmingly haunting!
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Date: 8/3/2017 9:13:00 AM
This is so beautifully done and grips on the heart until the end. Well done both. Good luck in life :) Regs Sunita
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Date: 8/1/2017 9:05:00 AM
Wow! A strong dark tale from both of you, excellent collaboration, Tom and Silent One :) glad that you're in touch with him, SO, hope he comes back soon!!
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Silent One
Date: 8/1/2017 4:28:00 PM
Thank you Jo, trying to encourage him to come back.. Watch this space!
Date: 7/31/2017 8:14:00 PM
Dear S.O. Firstly, give my salutation to my dear friend Tom! And equally important, this is one stunning imagery from both of you! Indeed, this is a favourite! Warm Regards, Ligella
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Ligella Mandraki
Date: 8/27/2017 10:36:00 AM
Dear W.K. I will in due time...I have ten more weeks to complete the semester and then I am free to write again. See you soon! Sincerely, Ligella
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Silent One
Date: 8/1/2017 4:38:00 PM
Thank you, will pass on your regards to him..
Date: 7/31/2017 4:53:00 PM
Hi Silent, This collaboration is off the chains. I see why it has been seen as one of the best collabs. You and Tom write well together. Tell him I said hello. This well written write would have been an easy seven:-) Alexis
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Silent One
Date: 8/1/2017 4:38:00 PM
Thank you, will pass on your regards to him..
Date: 7/31/2017 11:37:00 AM
Great collab guys, ditto to what the others said about mix of forms, works well here superb effort with a great result, give our regards to Tom, hope he comes back!
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Date: 7/31/2017 9:41:00 AM
Double WOWS!! I have to say, and agree with Becca that this is one of the BEST collaboration I've read. Of course I have to fave it. I love it! My best regards to The Seeker... hugs :)
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Date: 7/31/2017 9:26:00 AM
Love the transition from the dream to real life well done ,Silent One and The Seeker with this great collaboration ~*
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Date: 7/31/2017 8:42:00 AM
This is one of the best collaborations I've read, you guys. I love how it alternates between free-verse and rhyme, it highlights his confused emotional state. Powerfully compelling message of the after-effects of an affair. The feelings of a fling are fleeting, but the after-effects are permanent and painful. Well done, you two.
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Date: 7/31/2017 6:57:00 AM
Great write S1 and Tom. Free verse and Rhyme. I shouldn't laugh at the humor - stepping on the cat would certainly have been a shock for both of them. I empathize with the depressed picture you guys have portrayed with the character. I guess it's so true in many cases...Maria
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Date: 7/31/2017 6:12:00 AM
This is such a tremendous write! I do enjoy the Free Verse and the Rhyme mix, that was quite refreshing and effective. The way it was written is truly remarkable, I loved the way it flowed! What a lovely piece! I surely loved reading this awesome poem this morning, Great Work!!
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Date: 7/31/2017 6:10:00 AM
Superbly done my friends...is the Seeker coming back...I have some soup for him lol...god bless...*WW*
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Date: 7/31/2017 6:08:00 AM
Wow you two!! Wonderfully dark tale of disaster. I love it.
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