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amid scurrying feet, in the whirling humanity, with divided aims, and sizzling brains, she paused with singularity of purpose. never in a hurry, more at peace, on a park bench, alone, bent and weird, she sat. when she moved, her bones creaked, on rusty hinges! ragged in dress, torn in body, face scourged by Time, its contours deep like ravines. her withered breasts, hanging like nests of tailor birds. hair lying disheveled, with eyes shrouded in mist, she looked out into the sinking sun, never dreading the darkness that falls. the park bench was her temporary halt. she sat there every evening determined to live on, with the coins habitually dropped, into her outstretched hands, by those sailing past her, unobtrusive self. like a monument of patience she sat. sat, so alone! ~ First Place Trophy Win~ Dec.16.2022 Brian Strand Premiere Choice Poetry Contest. No.55

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Date: 12/26/2022 2:27:00 AM
Congratulations on your Trophy win and this excellent write my dear friend Valsa. I love this poem a lot from start to end. Thanks for sharing this precious gem! God bless you always.Hugs
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Date: 12/23/2022 2:13:00 PM
Congratulations on your Trophy win, Dear Valsa. This is a great poem - absolutely touching! Your description reminds of a homeless, lonely but stoic personality. You have painted the picture with empathy, kindness - with your heart! Wonderful! Mala
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Date: 12/22/2022 10:55:00 PM
A touching poem, Valsa, congratulations on trophy win:)
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Date: 12/22/2022 1:00:00 PM
- A deeply moving poem, Valsa - Congratulations on a top first place in the contest :) - Marry Christmas - hugs
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Date: 12/22/2022 5:52:00 AM
Like a monument of patience…she sat…all alone. Almost a nonexistent existence. Imagery impeccable!
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Date: 12/21/2022 11:49:00 PM
Back with congratulations Valsa on your trophy win. Tom
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Date: 12/21/2022 8:00:00 PM
Congratulations on your great TROPHY WIN! This is such a sublime creation. A fav for me.
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Date: 12/21/2022 7:01:00 PM
So excited to see this trophy against my poem. Thanks a lot Brian....
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Date: 12/21/2022 2:39:00 PM
Reminds me of the homeless and beckons the empathetic senses... so real and with such a breathless hint of despair that echoes like the sound of silence. Brilliant writing. God bless you. Love, Gina
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Date: 12/21/2022 2:38:00 PM
Back with heartfelt congratulations on your contest podium win, Valsa. Best wishes to you and yours.
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Date: 12/19/2022 9:43:00 AM
Such sincere empathy from your heart...bravery, endurance even positivity in hers. Her vision of life outweighs all challenges present, and even those looming up ahead. A realistic, beautiful piece, Valsa!...ab
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Date: 12/18/2022 4:44:00 PM
you painted a scene of such human desolation. Very well described, poet.
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Date: 12/17/2022 8:55:00 PM
Very descriptive poem. Nice ending.
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Date: 12/16/2022 2:55:00 PM
Searing piece on society distortion. Wielding self righteousness while invisible are vast amount of humanities promises left in despair. Its vivid imagery make me gasp at the pain and shame that is ignore by the mass. A real telling write. Here on the island we have saying "a cruff dem want to turn people decent pikinny Ina" meaning earning is denied some in society by design.... .
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Date: 12/16/2022 11:31:00 AM
A plethora of vivid imagery that brings the poetic beauty in the reader's heart. Excellently done, my dearest friend, Valsa! Be blessed!
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Date: 12/16/2022 10:34:00 AM
You have written a 'Poetic Monument' to this woman, Valsa! Wonderful! ~ Gershon
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Date: 12/16/2022 8:15:00 AM
She had found peace on this bench and her time with God not worried of the darkness to fall, my friend sings a song about a homeless man , but it's mainly about how everyone looked at him in being homeless and they didn't see the home we was looking forward to,
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Date: 12/16/2022 7:58:00 AM
Pity when a person is not cared for.
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Date: 12/16/2022 6:19:00 AM
This touching poetry brought tears to my eyes. Blazingly clever individuals cannot sustain ragged clothing, shredded body, or time-worn visage. Great imagery crafted so skillfully.
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Date: 12/16/2022 6:11:00 AM
You captured her loneliness and gave her a voice--so sad a portrait--as life sometimes tends to be.
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Date: 12/16/2022 5:45:00 AM
Quite sad that many people live lonely Iives like that Valsa, those with family or a partner don't know how lucky they are. Tom
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