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Rite of Passage

He salutes the mountains Tehachapi to the west San Gabriel and San Bernardino to the south This is his rite of passage His coming of age How he’s yearned For his spiritual journey To become a man Thirsting to prove his bravery Alone he wanders the barren Mojave Facing the elements And challenges head on Datura in hand for nights of visions To forge his unique one-on-one bond With the universe and its mysteries Bam bam bam echoes of drumming Till the spirits of his ancestors The lingering chants of Navaho Guide him to the oasis of manhood AP: Honorable Mention 2020, Honorable Mention 2020 Submitted on October 22, 2018 for contest MID OCTOBER 2018 sponsored by BRIAN STRAND - RANKED 1ST and October 1, 2018 for contest I WANDER THE DESERT ALONE sponsored by EDWARD IBEH

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Date: 10/27/2018 9:30:00 PM
Congratulation on your win
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Date: 10/27/2018 10:36:00 PM
Thank much very much, Timothy. Most appreciated.
Date: 10/25/2018 8:07:00 AM
Congrats Line to win on your GREAT poem.
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Date: 10/25/2018 3:48:00 PM
Thank you so much, Anisha. Most appreciated.
Date: 10/1/2018 6:04:00 PM
Good Job! I like that you wrote from a man perspective
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Date: 10/1/2018 8:18:00 PM
Thank you, Timothy, for your most appreciated visit and comment.
Date: 10/1/2018 4:24:00 PM
Yes, I love the "echoes of drumming", the "spirits of his ancestors" and the "lingering chants of Navajo" guiding him on... splendid!
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Date: 10/1/2018 5:54:00 PM
Thanks for your lovely visit and comment, Rhona. Most appreciated.
Date: 10/1/2018 2:36:00 PM
I like that you wrote this from the point of view of a Navaho young man (it seems) makes it more layered, more intriguing!
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Date: 10/1/2018 3:06:00 PM
Thanks for your lovely visit and comment, Michelle. Most appreciated.

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