Line Gauthier Poet Free verse

Rite of Passage

He salutes the mountains Tehachapi to the west
San Gabriel and San Bernardino to the south
This is his rite of passage
His coming of age

How he’s yearned
For his spiritual journey
To become a man

Thirsting to prove his bravery
Alone he wanders the barren Mojave
Facing the elements
And challenges head on

Datura in hand for nights of visions
He'll forge his unique one-on-one bond
With the universe and its mysteries

Bam bam bam echoes of drumming
Till the spirits of his ancestors
The lingering chants of Navaho
Guide him to the oasis of manhood



AP: Honorable Mention 2020, Honorable Mention 2020

Submitted on October 22, 2018 for contest MID OCTOBER 2018 sponsored by BRIAN STRAND  -  RANKED 1ST

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Timothy Mcguire October 27, 2018 at 9:30 PM Congratulation on your win Line Gauthier October 27, 2018 at 10:36 PM Thank much very much, Timothy. Most appreciated.

Anisha Dutta October 25, 2018 at 8:07 AM Congrats Line to win on your GREAT poem. Line Gauthier October 25, 2018 at 3:48 PM Thank you so much, Anisha. Most appreciated.

Timothy Mcguire October 1, 2018 at 6:04 PM Good Job! I like that you wrote from a man perspective Line Gauthier October 1, 2018 at 8:18 PM Thank you, Timothy, for your most appreciated visit and comment.

Rhona Mcferran October 1, 2018 at 4:24 PM Yes, I love the "echoes of drumming", the "spirits of his ancestors" and the "lingering chants of Navajo" guiding him on... splendid! Line Gauthier October 1, 2018 at 5:54 PM Thanks for your lovely visit and comment, Rhona. Most appreciated.

Michelle Faulkner October 1, 2018 at 2:36 PM I like that you wrote this from the point of view of a Navaho young man (it seems) makes it more layered, more intriguing! Line Gauthier October 1, 2018 at 3:06 PM Thanks for your lovely visit and comment, Michelle. Most appreciated.