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Alone At the Top

How empty I feel as I gaze outside from a penthouse suite, so grand a prisoner chained, this lofty building weighs me down on the ground where I stand. I remember those yesterdays long, long ago where in freedom, I'd run, laugh and play I'd ride on my horse on the wild, open plains now I'm trapped at my desk every day. In those years as I grew, I came to consider a future beyond my quaint humble town to the city I went, with idealist intentions to prove greater dreams could be found. Yet here now I stand, with my dreams in my hands and I'm empty, as empty could be how desperate I feel, I'd give all to be real to again ride my horse and break free. Written on 3/12/2018

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Date: 3/22/2018 8:12:00 PM
I see you won. Congratulations, Laura. As for my poem in this contest, it was only partially true. I did meet my husband at my apartment building and it was love at first sight for me. He was so handsome and kind of cowboy looking. The rest of that poem I made up!!
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Date: 3/15/2018 7:30:00 PM
Such lovely imagery in your beautiful poem, that included good use of the required words, Laura. Congratulations on your fine placement in the contest. Hugs, Sandra
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Laura Leiser
Date: 3/19/2018 3:17:00 PM
Thanks, Sandra :)
Date: 3/15/2018 1:07:00 AM
Congratulations, Laura on your fine win with a nice poem on bane of modern times.
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Laura Leiser
Date: 3/19/2018 3:15:00 PM
Thank you, Subimal :)
Date: 3/14/2018 11:43:00 PM
Love this write and I adore horses, (especially Arabians - I know the owner of the largest stables in the world - Godolphin, he's the Emir of Dubai, who I sometimes work for). My gf in prep school had a horse and I fell in love ... with the horse, lol! Sincere congratulations on your well-deserved win, Laura - blessings, and keep up the great work, friend! :-) <3
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Laura Leiser
Date: 3/17/2018 1:02:00 PM
Horses are beautiful creatures, for sure! I haven't ridden one in years, but it was always a treat when I did! Glad you enjoyed this simple poem :)
Date: 3/14/2018 9:49:00 PM
love the imagery you created in this verse.. the longing to be out in nature feeling the wind on your face as you rode your horse. Laura, congratulations on the contest! I also wanted to thank you for the wonderful encouraging compliment on the contest. it really means a lot … hugs Eve ~`*
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Laura Leiser
Date: 3/19/2018 3:18:00 PM
Thanks so much, Eve! So glad you enjoyed this one :)
Date: 3/14/2018 9:03:00 PM
Well done, Laura! Viv x
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Laura Leiser
Date: 3/19/2018 3:17:00 PM
Thank you, Viv :)
Date: 3/14/2018 4:10:00 PM
Awesome poem, Laura. We can so relate. Beautifully expressed feelings of longing and nostalgia and what's-it-all-for. Superbly done. Congrats.
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Laura Leiser
Date: 3/19/2018 3:16:00 PM
Thank you, Line! So glad you enjoyed this one :)
Date: 3/14/2018 2:08:00 PM
Great theme, just enough rhyme, and strong emotions displayed throughout. You did well, and a hearty hurrah on your placement. You deserve a trip back home to the plains.
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Laura Leiser
Date: 3/17/2018 1:03:00 PM
Hi Reason! I made this story up, but I think many can relate to it. Glad you enjoyed my poem :)
Date: 3/14/2018 1:56:00 PM
I REALLY like this, Laura. CONGRATS on your win. Our poems convey basically the same theme! Janice
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Date: 3/14/2018 2:55:00 AM
Lovely write, Laura, and I can empathise completely. Viv x
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Date: 3/13/2018 2:40:00 PM
A great idea for the contest, it normally is lonely at the top, that is why I prefer to stay in the middle... This is a deep emotive poem with the first stanza creating the scene for the poem perfectly... God luck in the contest Laura..
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Laura Leiser
Date: 3/13/2018 10:04:00 PM
Thank you, Silent! I'm glad you liked this one...it came to me quite quickly. :)
Date: 3/13/2018 5:56:00 AM
An awesome creation...so well written, Laura! If this doesn't win, I would be surprised!!
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Laura Leiser
Date: 3/19/2018 3:17:00 PM
Thank you, Vijay! Glad you enjoyed this poem :)
Date: 3/12/2018 11:36:00 PM
This is a wonderful poem, Laura. It flows very well and left a huge grin on my face.
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Laura Leiser
Date: 3/13/2018 10:06:00 PM
Thanks, Daniel! Glad you liked this one :)
Date: 3/12/2018 9:38:00 PM
Such a beautifully wistful write Laura. Enthralling and enchanting, I was captivated by every poetic line and the required words melted seamlessly into the beauty of your poem. I loved the yearning emotions of your lovely poem. Best wishes for a win!
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Laura Leiser
Date: 3/13/2018 10:04:00 PM
Thank you, Susan! I'm glad you enjoyed my poem :)
Date: 3/12/2018 6:28:00 PM
YOu did splendidly with the given words. I too just finished mine recently. Fingers crossed for both of us!
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Laura Leiser
Date: 3/13/2018 10:06:00 PM
Thanks, Andrea! I read yours, as well...is it true to life ?! Good luck in the contest :)

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