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It's a fishbowl world with a swimming wall between People come and go with a swish! into some hidden hole but As you hover in some mind-suspended state You think you're in control but? You AINT! Those without appear to glint comic fat to conical undulating intermittent From the gravel bottom does an alabaster castle rise white snow white cresting flotsam pouring light but Oh it's a dizzy downward spin you're in poor thing sated in the bowl world's most anguished misunderstood soul Then settling on the gravel floor harbinger of fright Behold! the castle door Within black as night! On the bottom in the sand there is a golden coin deposited by angel band Now! on your belly FLOP! Recover what's been covered up Oh dig thee most urgently with whiskey stained nails What depth of passion are you now capable of love hate begging strength from Him above Alas though lungs and body spent given up last drop of Soul has slowly bubbled up Those above beyond that surface wall of undulating glass continue oblivious in parade to pass

Copyright © | Year Posted 2008




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Date: 5/8/2010 7:40:00 AM
Another featured one I see. A powerful write from your experiences. I guess you sink very low and become oblivious in this condition. Your old stuff is good, daver. I often find a lot of my older stuff holds up just as well to my newer stuff (except for the VERY first year I started writing, oh, boy, was I ever writing long boring poems!!) LUv, andrea
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Date: 3/13/2010 1:21:00 PM
I like thi sone. Very nice. Caongratulations on your featured poem this week. Ernilando
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Date: 3/12/2010 7:12:00 AM
Congratulations on being featured this week.. Constance
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Date: 3/11/2010 11:53:00 PM
Brilliant and very original. Well done on this deserved piece being featured this week, keep penning, kindest thoughts, Anna-Marie.
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Date: 3/11/2010 9:37:00 PM
Congratulations on this one a fine read. I am glad I read your poem. I like the strong words used in your poem. I wrote one for my mom . She is forever gone, because of her drinking.. By the way most enjoyed....
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Date: 3/11/2010 6:22:00 PM
Congratulations Daver, on your poetry feature this week. Smiles, Dane Ann
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Date: 3/9/2010 5:21:00 PM
Daver~ A very strong write Congratulations on your featured poem of the week! Laura :)
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Date: 3/8/2010 10:06:00 AM
Congratulations on your excellent poetry being featured this week Daver. Love, Carol
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Date: 3/8/2010 6:31:00 AM
enjoyed, congrats on the featured poem!!
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Date: 3/8/2010 4:55:00 AM
Many congrats on your featured piece, Rgds Janette
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Date: 3/7/2010 7:55:00 PM
Congrats Daver on your featured poem on the Soup this week.. an excellent read and choice to feature..luv.. Linda-Marie..
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Date: 3/7/2010 6:09:00 PM
The vivid imagery makes for a powerful piece. I like the spacing--artistic and reflective of your personal style. Thought provoking too. Congratulations on having your poem featured. Keep on writing. I wish you continued success. Karen
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Date: 3/7/2010 12:27:00 PM
Congratulations on your feature this week. Smiles, Dane Ann
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Date: 3/19/2009 7:07:00 PM
this is poetry. pure and simple
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Date: 11/10/2008 2:56:00 PM
I loved it!! I think the reason why I love it is because it's just sooo true. . . You should read my poems they're a different style than yours but I think that you might like them. . . Bye ;)
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Date: 7/23/2008 6:36:00 PM
I see what you are doing with the poem shape now. I did this with one of mine, "HE IS." I'm not sure if it is on poetrysoup or not. This poem was sad. Internal struggles which are obvious to those who look; alas, most people pass by without a glance.
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Date: 7/23/2008 1:14:00 PM
Oh so sad. A place I would not want to be. We all have our own monsters, this is a tough one. I have known my share of those caught within those walls. What an intense write. Love, Shar
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Date: 7/23/2008 12:05:00 PM
Your poem was very deep - well written and very truthful - blessings
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Date: 7/23/2008 9:20:00 AM
I loved your Poem.... It was well said.. I am an Alcy... 11 years dry now... with a bad whisky problem... your poem was well put to the point... Your friend in poetry.... JackReed3
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