Afternoon Brew

It brews

With the first arc of the sunlight
That lifts the sweltering night

It brews

Without a single cloud to offer comfort
The thick still air 
Only grows heavier
A weight you can see on the leaves of the trees
As they fold to the oppression
Hot like a wet tea bag
A solid mass you can feel on your skin
Pressing on lungs   scrounging for oxygen

It brews

Quietly
Patiently

Come afternoon
The mercury   peaks
Clouds out of nowhere 
Swiftly boil over
Liquid silver turns to slate
As a wall of wind slams into the city
With rain pounding in waves
Hailstones thrashing
And lightening bolts flashing
The trees are left praying on their knees

A moment of relief
And then it is gone

The clouds clearing out like a shift change

Sun back on duty
In a matter of minutes the streets are dry
And the air is again steeped

It is as if nothing happened
Save a few fallen trees





Composed for Brenda Chiri's
Describe a thunderstorm without the sense of sound.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

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Lawless Avatar
May 12, 2019 at 9:28 AM
WOW.....dammit Mo, I ran to close the windows when I read this.....captured the heat and fury of a PM thunderstorm. Glad you entered it in the contest.
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May 12, 2019 at 1:20 PM
Thank You for the opportunity to serve it up! Delighted you enjoyed it :) thank you for my placement, xomo!
Ibeh Avatar
May 11, 2019 at 4:50 PM
Such a marvelous poem, Maureen:-) Heartiest congratulations on a well-deserved win!
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May 12, 2019 at 7:01 AM
Thank you Edward :o) xomo
Canerdy Avatar
May 11, 2019 at 4:22 PM
CONGRATUATIONS on your well-deserved win, Maureen! Sounds like you've been in Mississippi in the summer! Janice
Pigeon Tart Avatar
May 12, 2019 at 7:00 AM
Thank you Janice! Nope, never been to Mississippi; sounds like Mississippi has been here though ;) xomo
Lamoureux Avatar
May 11, 2019 at 2:59 PM
I enjoyed reading your winning poem. Congrats on a fine win. Thanks for your visit.
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May 11, 2019 at 3:18 PM
Thank You :) have a lovely day! xomo
Gauthier Avatar
May 10, 2018 at 10:48 PM
Lovely poem, Maureen. Congrats on your win.
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May 11, 2018 at 10:43 AM
Thank you Line! :) xomo!
Wolf Avatar
February 23, 2018 at 1:43 PM
Great title! Great poem! So visual, visceral, emotional, and sensual: The storm captured. --A winner!
Pigeon Tart Avatar
February 23, 2018 at 5:11 PM
Thank you!! :) I hope she likes it, er, loves it. ;p xomo!
Hamilton Avatar
February 21, 2018 at 9:16 AM
Liquid silver turns to slate, that is simply genius, kudos to you Mo, I didn't even contemplate this contest my cerebrum hurts to much, but I can hear the synapses snapping on this one. Hope the judge understands how brilliant this is. I like Silent One, thought this might be about coffee, great title!
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February 22, 2018 at 8:45 AM
Thank you John! I don't know how this piece will do, I've read some fantastic entries, with much more flowery poetic language; it boils down to the judge and what she's looking for. Fingers crossed :) Am delighted you love it so!
Dietrich Avatar
February 18, 2018 at 6:50 PM
wow, you really know your WEATHER. I did this one but did not understand enough about how storms "brew" to ever do it this kind of justice. Excellent descriptive writing!
Pigeon Tart Avatar
February 18, 2018 at 7:46 PM
I relish weather! I've weathered extremes working outdoors and those thermal storms of summer I remember most fondly. Exhilarating biking weather! It's always nice when the storm breaks the humidity though. Thank you Andrea! :) xomo!
Evans Avatar
February 17, 2018 at 3:10 PM
So visual the line "trees are left praying on their knees".
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February 17, 2018 at 10:00 PM
Thank you Richard :)
Ashley Avatar
February 16, 2018 at 7:55 PM
I love your title Maureen, it really sets the tone for your excellent poem and I love the repetition of 'it brews' as it builds the suspense of an impending and powerful summer storm. Your imagery is stunning that it describes a thunder storm without the sound of thunder.. Well done!! Best wishes for a win my friend. ~Susan
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February 17, 2018 at 7:39 AM
Thank you Susan! :) this contest a delight to write for, I imagine it'll be a tough one to judge, having read some other entries the field is steep! xomo <3
Smith Avatar
February 16, 2018 at 1:25 PM
As an old weatherman, that's about as good a description as could be made without sound, congratulations should be in order...
Pigeon Tart Avatar
February 17, 2018 at 7:34 AM
The highest compliment! I have to giggle, my celebrity crush a local weatherman, as a bike courier talking weather in elevators was an intrinsic part of the job, I relished the thought of advertising him on my courier bag ;) Thank you Charlie! xomo
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February 15, 2018 at 4:19 PM
Excellent poetic imagery expressed, Maureen. Loved this line ... Liquid silver turns to slate. Describing a thunderstorm w/o the sense of sound is very difficult. Crash and pound are sound adjectives, but this poem is so expertly written, I'm sure the judge will forgive. Aurora bright write ... loved how it ended too. Love and smiles always.
Pigeon Tart Avatar
February 16, 2018 at 9:54 AM
...though just in case I'll change "crash". Thank you dear poet! xomo
Pigeon Tart Avatar
February 15, 2018 at 4:38 PM
Ha! You actually made me look them up! ;p crash a verb, noun, and adjective, surprisingly, pound only noun and verb. Had me worried there! I'm particularly pleased with that line myself. Warm wishes and smiles to you my friend! xomo <3
Krutsinger Avatar
February 15, 2018 at 1:29 PM
Maureen, it is so descriptive, I found myself squirming, and looking around.
Pigeon Tart Avatar
February 15, 2018 at 4:39 PM
Awesome ;p Thank you so much Caren! xomo
Pandit Avatar
February 15, 2018 at 12:13 PM
I feel the energy of the day building with each verse..a unique depiction for the quiet storm contest..best for a win, Maureen.
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February 15, 2018 at 1:08 PM
Thank you Vijay :) xomo!
Smith Avatar
February 15, 2018 at 11:55 AM
Excellent poem Maureen, good luck in the comp :)
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February 15, 2018 at 1:07 PM
Thank you Gary :) xomo!
Cunningham Avatar
February 15, 2018 at 10:57 AM
I can see those big grey menacing clouds looming. Great work Maureen. Tom
Pigeon Tart Avatar
February 15, 2018 at 11:41 AM
Thank you Tom! :) xomo!
Godwin Avatar
February 15, 2018 at 10:48 AM
You done good, fantastic and gripping imagery that I could feel really got me. Loved the repetition of, 'it brews.' You sure delivered a storm, Maureen. (side note: Color me curious about your pic - what is it? All I think of is lobster, but that isn't it, is it?) Thrilled to your poem ... CayCay
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February 15, 2018 at 10:55 AM
Thank you CayCay! Success ;p giggles, not a lobster. The pic is of a painting of mine (bad pic gotta redo) it's a rose bud sewn up called "Pink Pharaonic", on FGM. <3 xomo!
Allison Avatar
February 15, 2018 at 8:23 AM
Wow Maureen you sure brewed up a storm with this one ... absolutely awesome I hope it places high for you :-) hugs Jan xx
Pigeon Tart Avatar
February 15, 2018 at 8:51 AM
Thank you Jan! I added the missing line, I never directly mentioned the heat. I miss those thermal storms. They were a frequent occasion in the sweltering summers of my early years couriering. Exhilarating! Alas with climate change they're less frequent now. xomo!
One Avatar
February 15, 2018 at 8:11 AM
Is this about you making a cup of coffee or a storm? Just kidding... a descriptive free verse..
Pigeon Tart Avatar
February 15, 2018 at 8:46 AM
Ah ambiguity. Tea time. I knew I was missing a "hot" line ;)
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