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Afternoon Brew

It brews With the first arc of the sunlight That lifts the sweltering night It brews Without a single cloud to offer comfort The thick still air Only grows heavier A weight you can see on the leaves of the trees As they fold to the oppression Hot like a wet tea bag A solid mass you can feel on your skin Pressing on lungs scrounging for oxygen It brews Quietly Patiently Come afternoon The mercury peaks Clouds out of nowhere Swiftly boil over Liquid silver turns to slate As a wall of wind slams into the city With rain pounding in waves Hailstones thrashing And lightening bolts flashing The trees are left praying on their knees A moment of relief And then it is gone The clouds clearing out like a shift change Sun back on duty In a matter of minutes the streets are dry And the air is again steeped It is as if nothing happened Save a few fallen trees Composed for Brenda Chiri's Describe a thunderstorm without the sense of sound.

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Date: 5/12/2019 9:28:00 AM
WOW.....dammit Mo, I ran to close the windows when I read this.....captured the heat and fury of a PM thunderstorm. Glad you entered it in the contest.
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 5/12/2019 1:20:00 PM
Thank You for the opportunity to serve it up! Delighted you enjoyed it :) thank you for my placement, xomo!
Date: 5/11/2019 4:50:00 PM
Such a marvelous poem, Maureen:-) Heartiest congratulations on a well-deserved win!
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 5/12/2019 7:01:00 AM
Thank you Edward :o) xomo
Date: 5/11/2019 4:22:00 PM
CONGRATUATIONS on your well-deserved win, Maureen! Sounds like you've been in Mississippi in the summer! Janice
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 5/12/2019 7:00:00 AM
Thank you Janice! Nope, never been to Mississippi; sounds like Mississippi has been here though ;) xomo
Date: 5/11/2019 2:59:00 PM
I enjoyed reading your winning poem. Congrats on a fine win. Thanks for your visit.
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 5/11/2019 3:18:00 PM
Thank You :) have a lovely day! xomo
Date: 5/10/2018 10:48:00 PM
Lovely poem, Maureen. Congrats on your win.
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 5/11/2018 10:43:00 AM
Thank you Line! :) xomo!
Date: 2/23/2018 1:43:00 PM
Great title! Great poem! So visual, visceral, emotional, and sensual: The storm captured. --A winner!
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/23/2018 5:11:00 PM
Thank you!! :) I hope she likes it, er, loves it. ;p xomo!
Date: 2/21/2018 9:16:00 AM
Liquid silver turns to slate, that is simply genius, kudos to you Mo, I didn't even contemplate this contest my cerebrum hurts to much, but I can hear the synapses snapping on this one. Hope the judge understands how brilliant this is. I like Silent One, thought this might be about coffee, great title!
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/22/2018 8:45:00 AM
Thank you John! I don't know how this piece will do, I've read some fantastic entries, with much more flowery poetic language; it boils down to the judge and what she's looking for. Fingers crossed :) Am delighted you love it so!
Date: 2/18/2018 6:50:00 PM
wow, you really know your WEATHER. I did this one but did not understand enough about how storms "brew" to ever do it this kind of justice. Excellent descriptive writing!
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/18/2018 7:46:00 PM
I relish weather! I've weathered extremes working outdoors and those thermal storms of summer I remember most fondly. Exhilarating biking weather! It's always nice when the storm breaks the humidity though. Thank you Andrea! :) xomo!
Date: 2/17/2018 3:10:00 PM
So visual the line "trees are left praying on their knees".
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/17/2018 10:00:00 PM
Thank you Richard :)
Date: 2/16/2018 7:55:00 PM
I love your title Maureen, it really sets the tone for your excellent poem and I love the repetition of 'it brews' as it builds the suspense of an impending and powerful summer storm. Your imagery is stunning that it describes a thunder storm without the sound of thunder.. Well done!! Best wishes for a win my friend. ~Susan
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/17/2018 7:39:00 AM
Thank you Susan! :) this contest a delight to write for, I imagine it'll be a tough one to judge, having read some other entries the field is steep! xomo <3
Date: 2/16/2018 1:25:00 PM
As an old weatherman, that's about as good a description as could be made without sound, congratulations should be in order...
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/17/2018 7:34:00 AM
The highest compliment! I have to giggle, my celebrity crush a local weatherman, as a bike courier talking weather in elevators was an intrinsic part of the job, I relished the thought of advertising him on my courier bag ;) Thank you Charlie! xomo
Date: 2/15/2018 4:19:00 PM
Excellent poetic imagery expressed, Maureen. Loved this line ... Liquid silver turns to slate. Describing a thunderstorm w/o the sense of sound is very difficult. Crash and pound are sound adjectives, but this poem is so expertly written, I'm sure the judge will forgive. Aurora bright write ... loved how it ended too. Love and smiles always.
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/16/2018 9:54:00 AM
...though just in case I'll change "crash". Thank you dear poet! xomo
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/15/2018 4:38:00 PM
Ha! You actually made me look them up! ;p crash a verb, noun, and adjective, surprisingly, pound only noun and verb. Had me worried there! I'm particularly pleased with that line myself. Warm wishes and smiles to you my friend! xomo <3
Date: 2/15/2018 1:29:00 PM
Maureen, it is so descriptive, I found myself squirming, and looking around.
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/15/2018 4:39:00 PM
Awesome ;p Thank you so much Caren! xomo
Date: 2/15/2018 12:13:00 PM
I feel the energy of the day building with each verse..a unique depiction for the quiet storm contest..best for a win, Maureen.
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/15/2018 1:08:00 PM
Thank you Vijay :) xomo!
Date: 2/15/2018 11:55:00 AM
Excellent poem Maureen, good luck in the comp :)
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/15/2018 1:07:00 PM
Thank you Gary :) xomo!
Date: 2/15/2018 10:57:00 AM
I can see those big grey menacing clouds looming. Great work Maureen. Tom
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/15/2018 11:41:00 AM
Thank you Tom! :) xomo!
Date: 2/15/2018 10:48:00 AM
You done good, fantastic and gripping imagery that I could feel really got me. Loved the repetition of, 'it brews.' You sure delivered a storm, Maureen. (side note: Color me curious about your pic - what is it? All I think of is lobster, but that isn't it, is it?) Thrilled to your poem ... CayCay
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/15/2018 10:55:00 AM
Thank you CayCay! Success ;p giggles, not a lobster. The pic is of a painting of mine (bad pic gotta redo) it's a rose bud sewn up called "Pink Pharaonic", on FGM. <3 xomo!
Date: 2/15/2018 8:23:00 AM
Wow Maureen you sure brewed up a storm with this one ... absolutely awesome I hope it places high for you :-) hugs Jan xx
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/15/2018 8:51:00 AM
Thank you Jan! I added the missing line, I never directly mentioned the heat. I miss those thermal storms. They were a frequent occasion in the sweltering summers of my early years couriering. Exhilarating! Alas with climate change they're less frequent now. xomo!
Date: 2/15/2018 8:11:00 AM
Is this about you making a cup of coffee or a storm? Just kidding... a descriptive free verse..
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/15/2018 8:46:00 AM
Ah ambiguity. Tea time. I knew I was missing a "hot" line ;)

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