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Admiring the Fall

We loved to traverse the dense forest,
Where birds continued as they chorused,
Admiring on one side the tall pines,
Breathing their best fragrance from their vines.

On the other side of the pathway,
A thousand of maples made my day.
Gold leaves fluttered slowly to the ground,
A whiff of breeze, the path would be drowned.

At the edge of the wood was our friend,
Where with his food we had to contend.
Sausages, bacon, eggs and coffee,
Heard his lovely repeated story.
He lent us his barn where we could sleep.
Outside a river so wide and deep,
Winded its weary way through vast plains,
It would fill more with October rains.

Clouds gathered above the horizon.
What pleased us was a rainbow rising.
We went inside the warm cosy shed
Where all was clean, and straw which we spread.
We slept like angels on that sweet bed.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2023

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Meadows Avatar
October 18, 2023 at 2:18 AM
A lovely Autumn poem and a favourite. Well written.
Ricci Avatar
October 13, 2023 at 11:59 AM
Victor Victor Victor. Hi. Allow me to simply say this is beautiful and poetry in true fashion. Truly. This is just beautiful. Have a wonderful night and weekend. Love Peace and Blessings now and always. (smile)
Edmonds  Avatar
October 4, 2023 at 10:19 AM
That’s beautiful Victor, a wonderful walk seeing the elegant fall, and the crowing glory was spending a night in a friend’s cosy shed. Lovely poetry… Belle
George Avatar
October 3, 2023 at 8:51 PM
What a splendid experience to be in a forest and then to get out leading to a path hemmed with pine and maple trees growing. Also to be fed with a sumptuous array of delectable cuisines provided by a friend and sleep in his barn. I am sure it must have been a beautiful outing. As ever, a lovely poem to read.
Nicole Avatar
October 3, 2023 at 7:50 PM
There's so many tender moments and memories within, my dear friend. The images you paint leave me in complete awe, and I'm admiring the elegant; yet simple beauty. Your thoughts bring a smile to my heart. My best to you. :) Hugs, Brandy
Anaya Avatar
October 3, 2023 at 6:11 PM
A perfect rhyme, filled with everything, from the forest at night to the rainbow in the morning, this is very Zen, Victor. I wish I were there! I want to fave it. ~Anaya
Baker Avatar
October 3, 2023 at 2:59 PM
Lovely choice of photo to accompany this poem, Victor. Your imagery was very comforting. You expanded the beauty of your day with the added kindness of a friend, who shared a meal with you and provided shelter for the night. Quite the dream day to enjoy. Blessings my friend. Bill
Buhagiar Avatar
October 3, 2023 at 11:04 PM
I hope you will enjoy my dark poems too. They are fiction of course, I have a few dark ones up my sleeve, mainly dark poems which I deleted in the past when I was depressed. But again all my poems are mainly fiction except on some rare occasion. Pity no one believes me.
Eslinger Avatar
October 3, 2023 at 8:34 AM
Victor, so dear to see your wonderful poetry again after my weeks away. I hope you are much improved! When i lived in Pennsylvania 50 yrs ago, i lived this poem, tho it was a farm w/barn not forest w/shed haha as for sleeping on straw OR hay…ouch! haha superb appeal to all senses in this poem! Hugs!
Jones Avatar
October 3, 2023 at 1:41 AM
Full of beautiful images and yes original thought. Love the unique rhymes.
Romios Avatar
October 2, 2023 at 6:46 PM
I want to be there…nothing like real beauty and genuine humanity, Pangie
Buehler Avatar
October 2, 2023 at 12:16 PM
Your talented pen has described another perfect day, my friend. This one is filled with autumn treasures. It's a fave for me. :)
Rodrigues Avatar
October 2, 2023 at 12:13 PM
A beautiful write, my friend! … food we had to contend. Sausages, bacon, eggs and coffee, Heard his lovely repeated story!
Kendrick Avatar
October 2, 2023 at 11:56 AM
Back with a note to say keep on keeping on. soupmail. Sara
Brotherton Avatar
October 2, 2023 at 10:39 AM
A lovely scene your words have painted. A walk along such a wonderful path has inspired a beautiful poem my friend.
Mcintosh Avatar
October 2, 2023 at 9:39 AM
Just love this one. You did good -better than good, GREAT. God bless you, Victor. Love, Gina
Roper Avatar
October 2, 2023 at 9:21 AM
Love the path of your story. The imagery of the woods was lush. Clouds gathered and o rainbow rising, love the mood . Blessings my friend
Dietrich Avatar
October 2, 2023 at 8:34 AM
What a cozy poem. It is so charming
Empress Avatar
October 2, 2023 at 6:35 AM
“ what pleased us was a rainbow rising” dont they always get us excited! I love the way you’ve written this poem and the imagery that you’ve painted in such an artistic manner really is captivating and profound! You have a way with words and rhymes! Those rhymes are impeccable! Pleasure reading this
Williams Avatar
October 2, 2023 at 6:34 AM
What beautiful imagery to you poem Victor. There's a touch of innocence to it. The wonder of the gold leaves, the simple food from your friend along the way, the cosy barn, and sweet hay bed. Romance at its very best my dearest friend. Love and Hugs
Kendrick Avatar
October 2, 2023 at 6:08 AM
Creative tale told in poetic style. Thanks for sharing your love of the terrain with us in this work. If for a contest, it reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. Thanks for sharing and for dropping by my page. Sara
Poet Avatar
October 2, 2023 at 5:47 AM
Your writing effortlessly captures the essence of the season, Victor. Your poem is exquisite, painted with an astute observation of the world's beauty.
Situation Avatar
October 2, 2023 at 5:40 AM
Lets walk, Pines and maples trees that talk.
Pandit Avatar
October 2, 2023 at 5:22 AM
Beautiful poem--just like your photo. The season dazzles through your gifted pen. Excellent as always, Victor.
Alhemaidy Avatar
October 2, 2023 at 3:57 AM
Hello Victor, very beautiful poem! so smooth read! Have a nice day ~AA
Andresen Avatar
October 2, 2023 at 2:44 AM
- I admire your beautiful poem, Victor ... described with eyes that see the beauty :) - hugs
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