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He sits Head low Hands raise slowly to his eyes Aimed at unseen futures rawly lived pasts how to survive Music in his mind He rises stands allongé jumps and lands petite allegro, turns and pirouettes in search of that window or that door intensified Bounces off white soft walls wails, screams silent sentences to invisible people Drops to his knees The unnoticed tornado whirlwind raging without any spoken word curls him to a little ball until inner hope dies adagio *** May 24, 2017 Copyright © Darren White

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Patricia Cresswell

Date: 9/8/2017 10:56:00 AM

This is a delicately, powerful piece. The dance, in my mind, moves smoothly through sifting emotions and carry the reaser along.

Darren White
Date: 9/9/2017 1:02:00 AM

Patricia, thank you. I used to be a dancer, and I love to write about it.

Maria Williams

Date: 5/28/2017 5:36:00 AM

Brilliant in its sadness which is very apparent Dear Darren. the formation of the words and the music all go together to make it more so. Maria 7++

Darren White
Date: 5/28/2017 6:11:00 AM

Yes, it is the sadness of losing the most important part of my life, at that given time. Writing about it puts it in its place, and gives it its proper reward, a poem :)

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 5/25/2017 10:18:00 AM

Your brilliance shines, Darren! Such a creative poem, both visually and emotionally. It makes the heart think. Didn't hear the music, will come back to this poem w/headphones. Great poetry. 7! Love always, bruh.

Darren White
Date: 5/25/2017 10:28:00 AM

Thanks Freddie :) Also for the 7! Love to you too :)

Anne-Marie Coreggia

Date: 5/25/2017 7:37:00 AM

To be honest, this one with the music in the background immediately made me cry. This is a remarkable poem Darren so filled with despair, and the shapes on the page, the life now inaccessible, accentuate that despair. A fave for sure mon ami qui est un vrai génie! I don't write the 7s anymore but know that they keep 'raining':) Amitiés

Darren White
Date: 5/25/2017 7:45:00 AM

Wowow :) Je ne suis pas un génie, but thank you for the wonderful compliment, mon amie!

Sara Ella

Date: 5/25/2017 5:59:00 AM

All the despair in this one, Darren This is so powerful and sad. I can see the twists and turns in your words too! Love it <3

Darren White
Date: 5/25/2017 6:32:00 AM

Thanks Sara <3 Glad you saw the special placement of certain words.

Arthur Vaso

Date: 5/25/2017 12:05:00 AM

Very artistic and loved the music!!!

Darren White
Date: 5/25/2017 12:33:00 AM

Yes, Max Richter is one of the best composers/performers for film music. Thanks :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/24/2017 6:24:00 PM

very unique. I love how you played with the shapes, especially the way it resembled a tornado on that one part!! SEVEN

Darren White
Date: 5/24/2017 11:36:00 PM

Yes, it was a tornado, twice, the first one upside down, thank you :)

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 5/24/2017 6:09:00 PM

Wow, wow, wow! Shape, words, form all of it impressive. A Fav!

Darren White
Date: 5/24/2017 11:35:00 PM

Thank you so very much, a fav wow :)

Carole Duet

Date: 5/24/2017 2:52:00 PM

Sadness, despair, lonliness, and hopelessness personified. Almost more than I can stand....Wonderfully expressed, Darren. Tearsss....

Darren White
Date: 5/24/2017 2:57:00 PM

Thank you Carole, I am honoured that I managed to evoke emotions in you

Seren Roberts

Date: 5/24/2017 2:50:00 PM

Darren you used an artists pallette of words to convey this masterpiece. absolutely brilliant.....Seren

Darren White
Date: 5/24/2017 2:54:00 PM

Owww Seren, thank you! :) I always hope someome sees I try to paint with words, and you see it, and that makes me happy :)

Phillip Garcia

Date: 5/24/2017 2:36:00 PM

This is grade A bad ass. Look at the getting Sheriff down. Might have to promote you to the mayor or something. I love how it just seems to explode out of a low crouch at the beginning into something marvelous. Cool stuff

Darren White
Date: 5/24/2017 2:46:00 PM

Sheriff is honoured! Yeah, it was indeed meant to explode halfway, but what's in my mind is of course not always understandable for others :) Thanks PG :)

Tim Smith

Date: 5/24/2017 1:32:00 PM

amazing ... that is all... amazing

Darren White
Date: 5/24/2017 1:50:00 PM

Thanks Tim :)

Heidi Sands

Date: 5/24/2017 1:05:00 PM

Very cool poem Darren :)

Darren White
Date: 5/24/2017 1:12:00 PM

Thanks so much Heidi :D

Chris Green

Date: 5/24/2017 12:41:00 PM

I don't know which I enjoyed more, the poem or the shapes you have created with your words and lines. Such wonderful curves and flowing visions and the poem just flows along. Really cool talented friend

Darren White
Date: 5/24/2017 12:51:00 PM

It's my way of dancing :) Trying to give that feeling of motion, from start to finish. If I managed to give you that, I succeeded :)