Sandra Haight Poet Sonnet

Abandoned Flowers

Abandoned flowers placed against the wall,
stems bent and twisted, limp and on display.
In long, straight row they line the gloomy hall;
these wilted gems now spent, no role to play.

Some showing with their blossoms barely raised
and others hang on weakened stems so low.
In varied ways, their languishing is phased;
decaying flowers lined up in a row.

Abandoned flowers there against the wall,
their colors dull and dry like winter grass.
What once stood straight now lies in wilted sprawl;
they stab the heart of visitors who pass.

Abandoned with no sunshine in their skies...
in worn wheeled chairs, awaiting their demise.


Sandra M. Haight

~1st Place~
Premier Contest:  Poem Ending With A 'Chilling Twist'
Sponsor: Frank Herrera
Judged: 09/11/2016

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Tanis Troutman September 17, 2016 at 12:19 PM Wow! Congrats !

Sushma A. Singh September 13, 2016 at 9:50 AM This is a great poem! Huge Congrats! One of those which stay with you long after you are finished with reading it.

Sunita U.D Palawon September 12, 2016 at 7:47 AM Well done Sandra with your chill you brought at the end. :) Sunita

Supraja Kannan September 12, 2016 at 3:38 AM Congratulations on your well deserved placement.... Beautiful poem...

Kim Rodrigues September 11, 2016 at 9:11 PM Very well written. So heartfelt! Well done! Congratulations, Sandra!

Janis Medders Tobechi September 11, 2016 at 7:30 PM Congratulations Sandra. You are on a winning streak. This is a very lovely yet sad sonnet.

Tom Arnone September 11, 2016 at 7:27 PM Abandoned Flowers -- a truly chilling sonnet, Sandra. Congrats on your # 1 win! :-)

Joseph May September 11, 2016 at 6:47 PM A powerful write Sandra...Congrats on your top win.... Sandra Haight September 11, 2016 at 6:56 PM Thank you very much, Joseph, for your visit and uplifting comment and congrats. Sandra

Beautiful Scars September 11, 2016 at 5:49 PM Sweetest Sandra, congrats on your top placement with this very thought provoking poem. Well deserved FIRST place in my eyes :)-luloo Sandra Haight September 11, 2016 at 6:55 PM Thank you once again, Laura. I am so appreciative of your wonderful support. Hugs, Sandra

Laura Leiser September 11, 2016 at 5:45 PM Back to congratulate you on your top win, Sandra...and I am not surprised! :) Sandra Haight September 11, 2016 at 6:55 PM Thank you very much, Laura. I appreciate your visit and supportive comment and congrats! Hugs, Sandra

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser October 21, 2015 at 8:02 AM striking lines in very sad sullen state of flowers yet the way you deliver is excellent!!I like the different interpretation regarding dark and twisted!a7~Olive Eloisa =`) Sandra Haight October 21, 2015 at 8:22 AM Thank you for your visit to my poem, Olive. Yes, sad about the abandoned flowers...I hope you read the twist in the last line....Thank you so much for your supportive comments. Hugs, Sandra

Laura Leiser October 20, 2015 at 7:23 PM Wow, your poem was so poignant and deep, Sandra! Great imagery with wilted flowers that "stab the heart of visitors as they pass". Magnificent, a fave and a BIG 7 from me :) Sandra Haight October 22, 2015 at 7:48 AM Hi Laura, thank you so much for your visit and positive comments, and ratings. I appreciate your support so much. Hugs, Sandra

CayCay Godwin October 20, 2015 at 1:09 AM I always forget the rating box so I came back. For me, a 7 ... CayCay (maybe I can do it without you seeing me and should explore that.)

CayCay Godwin October 20, 2015 at 1:07 AM Ew - you got me, punched with reality while I was enjoying being lost in the hall. Your writing is beautiful and clever ... CayCay Sandra Haight October 22, 2015 at 7:45 AM Thank you so much for visiting my poem, CayCay. Yes, this was inspired by my visit to a nursing home recently to visit a friend who is there temporarily for rehabilitation. And yes, I did see these poor abandoned 'flowers' lined up in such a pathetic way. Hugs, Sandra

Kp Nunez October 19, 2015 at 4:41 PM How gently you led us to your final line, Sandra. One is lulled into thinking it is just about the flowers and yet I know something lurks behind this sad image. That final line is just so sad. Families of these abandoned flowers in their wheelchairs would be reminded of a more frequent visit. 7. hugs!

Lin Lane October 19, 2015 at 9:52 AM Hi. Sandra. The title of this one caught my eye. Your emotions are wonderfully expressed. We share the same distress over wilting flowers. You may want to read my "Weep Not For Wilted Petals." We enjoy cut blooms by having them in our homes, but I sometimes wonder at the wisdom of cutting them from their stems. Guilt.

Constance La France October 19, 2015 at 9:50 AM Sandra, oh my you described it so well, I see it everyday at work, just waiting to die, how sad, 10+ and thanks for visiting my poem, Poetry Heroes, I said what is true, you always have my back Sandra and I cherish you for that ~~ Sandra Haight October 19, 2015 at 7:32 PM Hi Broken, I visited a friend who is at a nursing home, not for long term, but for rehabilitation. However, I did see what I wrote in my poem, and it left me feeling so sad. Thank you for your support and kinds words. Hugs, Sandra

Miraj Raha October 19, 2015 at 9:43 AM "Abandoned Flowers"?This is indeed dark to contemplate upon,the haunting capture of these wilted flowers is indeed a stab at the heart of visitors who pass.Excellently portrayed Sandra Ma'am. Sandra Haight October 19, 2015 at 7:30 PM Yes, Miraj. I visited a nursing home two weeks ago, and I cannot get this sad vision out of my mind. I so much appreciate your visit and supportive comment. Thank you. Sandra

Gabriel Sundman October 19, 2015 at 9:41 AM Sad ending, when we are abandoned we die a slow lonely death Sandra. Really enjoyed your poem. Sandra Haight October 19, 2015 at 7:28 PM Thank you for stopping by, Gabriel, with your supportive comment. I really appreciate it. Sandra