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A Wounded Star

A wounded star
                                 f e l l 
                                         to Earth on the night he left.
     It grew too heavy with wishes made by my heart being bereft.

     A twinkling star shattered into pieces of a million bits or more
           when my deluge of requests weakened its fiery core.

         Wishing upon heavenly bodies is what we dreamers do.
         I hope this one forgave me when it bid the night adieu.
         How painful it must have been to fade as a shining star,
            plunging to its death from the weight of my scars.

        Glistening light darkened when its points were b r o k e n,
              chiseled away by caustic words, bitterly spoken.
                                                                              
              Would if I could, gather all the little pieces in my hand
                and mold them into a new star upon love's command.
                 Until I find a way, in fragments the shards will remain,
                 a Heavenly body now fallen because of love's disdain.
               Once emblazoned as fire, it was a diamond drifting across the sky.
             I will be forever guilt-ridden with sorrow, knowing I caused it to die.


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                                     September 21, 2016
              All The Little Pieces Contest sponsored by Broken Wings

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Freddie Robinson Jr. October 21, 2016 at 3:07 PM Great poem, Lin! The tapestry of images is scintillating. Woven so well w/your pen. I love the line ... a Heavenly body now fallen because of love's disdain. True poetic artistry. Love your work! Keep the love and knowledge flowing, my dear friend. Much love to you. RW

Chris Green October 14, 2016 at 5:59 PM So sadly beautiful. This piece is enchanting as it is heartbreaking. I just loved this Lin.

White Sage October 10, 2016 at 5:17 PM it hurts Lin...I like this so so much, it's captivating. read it over and over, and will read it again and again. it's deep and touching. I hope you don't make them fall anymore though, else the moon might be the next sometime lol. again, I like this...so much! Lin Lane October 10, 2016 at 5:52 PM I'm very pleased that you like it, but I don't wish upon stars any longer, so there's no danger from me. lol Thanks for always being so kind with your comments, Sage.

Poet Destroyer A October 7, 2016 at 7:56 AM I'm taken by the way you handled the situation of needing some kind of relationship with the fallen star. I know the feeling when my heart looks up and needs that one special wish, .. However I never thought about the life of the star. .. I guess in my greedy mind, I want that star to fall for me, that way I take advantage. A deep write from your inner majestic pen. Nobody writes them like you.... glad I was curious enough to see if you had a new poem.... a favorite.... Linda Lin Lane October 7, 2016 at 8:08 AM Hi Linda. I haven't been around much and just happened to get an email about a comment on a poem and here you are! I've often wondered and felt sad over the death of stars. I wrote one long ago about where stars go when they die. You're not greedy and I thank you for reading this one. take care.

James Inman October 2, 2016 at 9:12 AM How lovely Lin. This beautifully written piece stirs some deep emotions. Lin Lane October 7, 2016 at 8:06 AM Thanks so much, James. It makes me smile to know that I've touched your emotions.

Joanna Daniel September 30, 2016 at 3:20 AM Wow, only you could make wishing on a falling star seem so sad!! Very unique in thought, Lin:) congratulations on your win in All the little pieces contest:) Lin Lane October 7, 2016 at 8:05 AM Thank you, Jo. My son is always telling me I see too many details and worry about too many things, but it's both a curse and a blessing. I hope you're well.

Andrea Dietrich September 29, 2016 at 12:14 AM hey, I just looked down and saw the note you left me.Now I remember that you were away with family!

Andrea Dietrich September 29, 2016 at 12:12 AM LIn. Hey, I miss our little chats!! Are you keeping busy in other club? Just thought I would come here tonight and ask. Lin Lane October 7, 2016 at 8:04 AM There's always email. I've been repairing a house for rent and it's been labor and time intensive.

Vladislav Raven September 28, 2016 at 6:29 PM Hi Lin, sorry i haven't been around for a while. The tiredness has been hitting me hard. Now, a new write. Another heart felt, excellent write Lin. Your words always touch the heart so gently and make the soul feel every line. Such sadness brings out such beauty in your lines. You speak from the heart and your words come to life on the canvas you paint. I always feel when i read your lines, the emotions always flow. It is an honour and pleasure to read your words. Hugs....Mike. XX, A 7, A Fave. Lin Lane October 7, 2016 at 8:03 AM I'm very sorry that you've not been feeling well, Mike. I haven't been reading PS lately and missing you on the other site. The honor is mine when you read my poetry and leave such beautiful comments. Get better real soon. Hugs back.

Scott Thirtyseven September 26, 2016 at 10:02 AM Beautiful words. Best of luck in the contest. Lin Lane September 26, 2016 at 10:30 AM Thank you, Scott. I believe it placed 5th.

Kim Merryman September 25, 2016 at 11:40 AM I really like this. Lin! I like the link between your many wishes and the death of the star. Very imaginative. Congrats on your win! Love, Kim Lin Lane September 26, 2016 at 7:52 AM Thank you so much, Kim. I've been away and haven't read anything here.

Constance La France September 24, 2016 at 10:24 AM Lin, I loved your write, very emotional and beautifully penned, congratulations on your win in my contest ~ Lin Lane September 26, 2016 at 7:52 AM Thanks for the placement and for hosting.

Andrea Dietrich September 22, 2016 at 3:15 PM wow, you put yourself as the cause of sorrow here. I love that sad ending, Lin. You did a fantastic job with Constance's challenge! Lin Lane September 26, 2016 at 7:51 AM Thanks Andrea. I've been out of town and haven't read anything here lately.

Andrea Dietrich September 22, 2016 at 3:13 PM Lin, I love what you said on my Shameless poem. I think some people are misinterpreting it a little bit, but you get me!! Let me read this poem now!

Charlie Smith September 22, 2016 at 6:52 AM So sadly well done, best wishes Lin... Lin Lane September 22, 2016 at 7:57 AM Thanks so much, Charlie.

Daniel Turner September 21, 2016 at 8:33 PM I wonder how many I've caused to crash and burn. Really nice write, Lin. Great concept too. You always were a deep thinker. Good luck in contest! Lin Lane September 22, 2016 at 7:56 AM God made the stars and in His mercy, everything is forgiven. Thanks for the compliments, Danny.