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A Winter Cemetery

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* * * * * * * * Snowflakes fall; I break down, at his grave I lay one rose on the ground- Winter seems to be here, frigid air with no cheer, I see a fawn lost deer, * she quietly looks at me with no sound. * * Is she lonely like me? * * Should I just let her pitiful self be? * I may go caress her, feel her comfy soft fur, but my eyes all a blur. She should be frolicking happy and free. Grieving all freezing night, somehow this anguished pain just doesn’t feel right- * I sense a connection, * * to the doe’s affection, * our strong bond, perfection. * I feel so close yet I'm too far for sight. * * * We’re kindred friends combined, * adoring spirits so toilsome to find- * Maybe I can let go, * with the help of my doe, * she’s the mercy I know… but this cold Winter has been so unkind. A Winter Cemetery Contest Syllable count: 6-10-6-6-6-10 X 4 howmanysyllables.com Sponsor, Broken Wings December 19, 2017

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Date: 2/6/2018 5:54:00 PM
Beautiful, Laura.
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Date: 1/14/2018 7:37:00 PM
Congratulations Luloo on your WIN with this amazing poem!! I love the story you've crafted here ... and especially that you've read it. Makes it all the more special! ~Judy
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Date: 1/12/2018 1:36:00 PM
No surprise to see this wonderful poem be honored with 1st Pl., Luloo! Congratulations!
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Date: 1/12/2018 8:24:00 AM
So well done LuLoo, congratulations...
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Date: 1/12/2018 8:12:00 AM
This layout and poem is so cool! Congrats on top placement.
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Date: 1/12/2018 7:43:00 AM
Laura, congratulations on your win in my contest. Your poem is so sadly beautiful and the layout is superb as is hearing your voice speak the poem to us, well done !
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Date: 1/12/2018 3:29:00 AM
Brought a lump to my throat, so sad, a well-deserved win, congratulations Laura, best wishes... Mick
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Lu Loo
Date: 1/12/2018 5:20:00 AM
thank you very much dear Mick :)-luloo
Date: 1/12/2018 1:13:00 AM
Congratulations, Laura on your first position win.
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Lu Loo
Date: 1/12/2018 5:20:00 AM
many thanks sweet Subimal :)-luloo
Date: 1/11/2018 10:39:00 PM
What an awesome poem. EXTREMELY COMPELLING. And the snowflakes add so much to the visuals and imagery of your piece of art. It's a beauty. Congrats on a very well deserved win, Laura.
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Lu Loo
Date: 1/12/2018 5:20:00 AM
thank you very much lovely Line ;)-luloo
Date: 1/11/2018 9:51:00 PM
Congratulations on your awesome win, Laura. so very sad , but beautiful.. Hugs Eve ~`*
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Lu Loo
Date: 1/12/2018 5:19:00 AM
thank you sweet Eve :)-luloo
Date: 1/11/2018 6:51:00 PM
Luloo, I knew this was a winner when I first read I, congrats my sweet poetic friend.
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Lu Loo
Date: 1/12/2018 5:19:00 AM
thanks once again dear John :)-luloo
Date: 12/21/2017 6:56:00 AM
This is excellent. I love how you brought the deer into it. Beautifully written and I can feel the emotion from it too. Good luck in the contest Laura :)
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Lu Loo
Date: 1/12/2018 5:19:00 AM
thank you so much Heidi ;)-luloo
Date: 12/20/2017 7:51:00 PM
A gorgeous write Laura. Beautiful, contemplative and sad sentiments captured perfectly with your melancholic and deeply introspective imagery. Lovely rhyme and format as well. Best wishes for a win.. ~Susan
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Lu Loo
Date: 12/21/2017 6:28:00 AM
many thanks sweet Susan! Be blessed today and always :) -luloo
Date: 12/19/2017 12:20:00 PM
Laura, this is so beautifully written, you have really set the bar high on this contest. Best wishes. John
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Lu Loo
Date: 12/20/2017 10:00:00 AM
thank you dear John and for all your kind comments! Be blessed :) -luloo

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