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A TENDER NOTE-NW

a tender note at twilight. two sugar plums in love. wind chimes play a leitmotif, as the candle flame softly sways. hands touch, lips whisper of happily-ever-afters, whilst talking of adventure, of marriage and children. a tender note, a plot. the invite was good, but the flame died out. the wedding chimes carry the note and the bridal bouquet to the grave. 10/26/2022 A Note In The Wind Sponsor: Charles Messina

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Date: 11/2/2022 4:45:00 AM
A tender poem...beautifully written, Kim. Congratulations on your winning placement in my contest! Charlie
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Date: 10/27/2022 9:35:00 AM
Love it! Oh, don't be so fatalistic. Think of all the charming chances to try again. I've been there, heartbreaking. Your poetry is splendid!
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Joe DiMino
Date: 10/27/2022 11:55:00 PM
Ouch! No chance. Such a waste. Though I personally do believe in reincarnation. Sad if one should commit suicide for any reason...or be sad, for the rest of one's life (ended in a sense) before the grave. People need to reach out. God never leaves us hopeless, has been my experience anyway. Sorry for the wrong interpretation. I probably still have it wrong, and should just shut up.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/27/2022 2:42:00 PM
If it’s not obvious the bride is dead. Just a story, my friend!
Date: 10/27/2022 1:33:00 AM
Life ends on a sad note. Let us remember the joy of the past.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/27/2022 7:10:00 AM
Whether a short or long happiness, the end is sad. Thanks, my friend!
Date: 10/26/2022 9:05:00 PM
The sudden twist at the end is characteristic of life. We dream and plan of things. But fate acts differently ! Great poem, Kim
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/27/2022 7:09:00 AM
Sometimes things happen that way. Thanks, Valsa!
Date: 10/26/2022 8:15:00 PM
I guess this tiny flame couldn't compete with the wildfires out West... Pity...
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/27/2022 7:02:00 AM
A great take on this poem.
Date: 10/26/2022 5:59:00 PM
Kim, the poetry you wrote is quite interesting to read. The conclusion of this poem takes an unforeseen and totally surprising turn in the story. Best wishes with the contest.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/26/2022 6:10:00 PM
Thank you, Lasaad!
Date: 10/26/2022 4:18:00 PM
A unexpected twist to the story in this poem, Kim. Very engaging poetry, my friend. Thanks for sharing! Bill
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/26/2022 6:10:00 PM
Thank you, Bill!
Date: 10/26/2022 3:29:00 PM
Well, I guess they can’t all live happily ever after…
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/26/2022 6:09:00 PM
Some don’t sadly…