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A storm is brewing. Heavy water laden clouds rise thickly, the darkening sun plunges quickly behind deep purple mountains, hiding the gentle moonlight that normally lights my erratic way. I meander absentminded around a maze of mountain paths, suffering a terrible purgatory. For the storm is raging outside and inside of me. Outside electric serpents flash across the dark skies. Inside is an aching heart of old desires. No tears flow as I think of you. Foul fog screens my feelings, suffocates righteous repentance, murders my murky sinful soul. Deep inside me emotions mingle, then surge, and dissipate in thin air. By midnight the summer storm has already well and truly broken. Ophidian lightning blaze in the dark skies, Crashing thunder booms and echoes. Rain falls in heavy drops. I am well and truly soaked. Water, the sign of redemption enslaves me, but I am not baptized anew, instead I wallow in self pity. There is no hope for me, or is there? Let the storm decide!

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Date: 11/17/2021 4:50:00 AM
Victor Victor Victor - Always are you the storyteller. Always do you create moments in time where we are placed within the scene with you. This entry has illusion and vision. It is always an honor turning to your page and your excellent work and execution. Truly. Have a beautiful day. Remain safe. Blessings always.
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Date: 11/15/2021 4:50:00 PM
Victor, your imagery is awe-inspiring in this poem. Assume as if you are caught in a dilemma. By using appropriate metaphors, the inner suffering is forcefully replicated. We walk through life, and it's challenging to stay out of the storms that come our way.
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Date: 11/14/2021 6:18:00 PM
We should not allow the storms inside take over, but we are human and weak and allow it to brew.
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Date: 11/14/2021 6:30:00 AM
Nice poetic expression of grief and pain. I romanced. Regards sk.
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Date: 11/14/2021 6:34:00 AM
Date: 11/14/2021 5:55:00 AM
The turmoil and the unrest both inside and outside is well expressed in your verses that shine with great imagery as always Victor...God bless...~ Ani
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Date: 11/13/2021 10:14:00 AM
Very emotive and dark, Victor. But it's really well written and descriptive!!
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Date: 11/13/2021 3:59:00 AM
Sometimes Victor when we are pliable the wind shows mercy to us gives us breathing space for a little while, nicely penned with your regular sensitive touch :)
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Date: 11/12/2021 10:35:00 PM
A sad, pensive write, Victor, love the words you chose to embellish your poem:)
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Date: 11/12/2021 6:38:00 PM
Victor, this is “The Imperfect Storm” of the heart - raging outside as are the emotions inside and the turmoil is perfectly described through every line. A marvellous write… Belle
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Date: 11/12/2021 12:09:00 PM
The turmoil within is skillfully depicted here, in the storm without. The wonderful imagery captures the imagination. :)
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Date: 11/12/2021 11:27:00 AM
May you find calm in the eye of the storm ~ hugs
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Date: 11/12/2021 10:04:00 AM
The storms that rage within are powerful, Well written Victor
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Date: 11/12/2021 5:13:00 AM
A see and hear the storm within and outside. Bawl of emotions resonates throughout. Well evoked story, Victor. There is always a new dawn that shines.
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Date: 11/12/2021 5:13:00 AM
We go through life and its hard to avoid the storms that we encounter, but they pass bringing into our lives a calm. Tom
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Date: 11/12/2021 4:35:00 AM
Feel being caught in a quandary. The inner agony is powerfully mirrored through apt images. Within and without, a hazy mist shadows. Let the purging waters wash off your sense of remorse . Very poignant !
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Date: 11/12/2021 2:09:00 AM
This is so good Victor, from start to finish I was completely captivated...stay safe and well...Delice
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