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A Special Secret

“A bun’s in the oven,” Daddy had said. I heard him while spying under the stair. He said it so softly to Uncle Ted I barely could hear him as I hid there. “Yep, the rabbit died, but I’m kind of glad! A bun’s in the oven,” Daddy had said. I wondered why Daddy wouldn’t be sad to find out this rabbit he spoke of was dead! Ted said, “You have too much fun in your bed.” I was confused when my uncle said THAT. “A bun’s in the oven, “ Daddy had said, then added, “Annie’s afraid she’ll get fat.” Fat from a bun that was in our oven? Dad said, “keep this secret.” Ted bobbed his head, then laughed, “You sure get plenty of lovin’!” “A bun’s in the oven,” Daddy had said. Dec. 8, 2017 for Lewis Raynes' "A Special Secret" Poetry Contest

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Date: 4/10/2018 7:01:00 PM
What a lovely way you used this form to its advantage. Beautifully executed, Andrea. I love the whole scenario.
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Date: 12/25/2017 11:49:00 AM
Very clever and amusing
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Date: 12/18/2017 9:55:00 AM
OH! Andrea what a fun poem it had me laughing through the last two stanzas. Congrats on your placement.
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Date: 12/14/2017 4:09:00 PM
Nicely done Andrea...Congrats on your win
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Date: 12/13/2017 9:44:00 PM
SO cute--and well-written, Andrea. Congrats! Janice
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Date: 12/13/2017 8:53:00 PM
what a ride, loved this little write Andrea, congratulations on ur win.
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Date: 12/13/2017 11:59:00 AM
This is very clever. I love how you captured a child's innocent, literal-based confusion and thought response. I still remember the first time I heard, "skeletons in the closet", and deciding then and there that I didn't ever want that! This is truly cuter than cute. Love ... CayCay
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Date: 12/11/2017 12:28:00 AM
This is real cute and exemplifies how children perceive what we say. Hope you are having a great night. I finally finished my Christmas decorations. ; )
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Date: 12/10/2017 9:46:00 PM
Hello Andrea Left you a message on my Back Again You keep pumping them out Bravo
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Date: 12/10/2017 3:23:00 PM
And babies came from department stores. Very funny poem, Andrea!
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Date: 12/10/2017 9:56:00 AM
Bunny poem, fat bunny poem.
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Date: 12/10/2017 7:21:00 AM
Nice read, thanks for the smile.
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Date: 12/10/2017 7:02:00 AM
hahaha.... clever for the contest..
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Date: 12/10/2017 1:11:00 AM
Excellent. Cleverly done. Enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing it.
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Date: 12/9/2017 11:46:00 PM
Cute cute write...I am loving it,Andrea
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Date: 12/9/2017 8:21:00 PM
Incredible work of poetry with great imagination. Arrangement of words is nice, idea is superb. Great work! Words are few to show your talent. Be blessed and keep reviewing Pari Style poems. Let's be in touch even more through such poems and reviews
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Date: 12/9/2017 11:31:00 AM
Andrea, I thoroughly enjoyed this cleverly written quatern. Very nicely done. Best of luck. John
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Date: 12/9/2017 8:25:00 AM
Got to love those Lovin' Ovens lol...great verse Andrea...happy holidays...^WW^
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Date: 12/9/2017 8:02:00 AM
This is just so funny cute. I totally enjoyed this and made me giggled :) I'm pretty sure this will place well in the contest. But I'm gonna wish you the best in the contest anyways Miss Drea... hugs and smiles :)
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Date: 12/9/2017 7:52:00 AM
A wonderful bun is coming...All the best Andrea
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Date: 12/9/2017 7:50:00 AM
Many things we are naive about when we are young... awesome Andrea
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Date: 12/9/2017 7:26:00 AM
Very clever story telling--well done, as always--best for a win, Andrea!
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Date: 12/9/2017 5:24:00 AM
What a great poem Andrea!! I love the take on the contest. Very clever :)
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Date: 12/9/2017 5:14:00 AM
ha ha ha I see the baker got his dough to rise lol:-) great humour Andrea!:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 12/9/2017 12:43:00 AM
I love this. Through the eyes of a child. This is so sweet Andrea. Wonderful choice of form.
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