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A Right Charlie

He made passes at the ladies Drank much vodka, not just a swig Lost control of all composure Which included his crooked wig. --------------------------------------- Contest: Chastushka Me Sponsor: Dr. Ram Mehta Placed: 4th

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Julia Ward

Date: 3/22/2015 8:28:00 AM

The name given to the poem form is quite a tongue-twister, isn't it? I liked "A Right Charlie". Hugs, Julia, xx

Paul Callus
Date: 3/22/2015 10:36:00 AM

Yes, when I think about it, it is a tongue twister!! Glad you enjoyed the poem:) Hugs // paul

Cherl Dunn

Date: 3/9/2015 12:17:00 PM

Dear Paul My friend you have a such a cool gift to enfuse a sense of humor with common Honesty projected what ever message that your trying to get across, and you achieve it so well,smoothly with a great flow, thank you for your comments on my Easter writes, my kids still enjoy this holiday also, cheri

Paul Callus
Date: 3/9/2015 5:29:00 PM

Dear Cherl, I enjoyed your Easter offerings; so I'm adding chocolate eggs to my list...apart from jelly beans:) Thank you for the lovely comments about this poem. Regards....paul

John Lawless

Date: 9/16/2014 9:45:00 PM

a somewhat hair raising chastushka. congrats on the win.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/17/2014 12:23:00 PM

Thanks for the visit and hair raising comment! // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/16/2014 3:40:00 PM

haha, GREAT chastushka!! Congrats.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/16/2014 6:00:00 PM

Glad you enjoyed Andrea:) I had to include a reference to a wig....it's something I hate seeing on a man! /x/ paul

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 9/16/2014 2:07:00 PM

Had to stop back with congrats to a wonderfully witty friend!

Paul Callus
Date: 9/16/2014 6:03:00 PM

...I appreciate the repeat visit:)

Paul Callus
Date: 9/16/2014 6:02:00 PM

Thank you Carolyn! Being witty is a blessing, as long as nobody gets hurt. hugs // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 9/16/2014 11:23:00 AM

Dropping back with my congrats Paul:-) Hugs jan xxx

Paul Callus
Date: 9/16/2014 6:05:00 PM

Thank you Jan for re-visiting and for the congrats:) hugs // paul

Roy Jerden

Date: 9/16/2014 11:19:00 AM

Had to research the title phrase as I had not heard it before... Good one! Congratulations! Cheers, Roy

Paul Callus
Date: 9/16/2014 6:08:00 PM

Thank you Roy...we are all learning new things along the way (I often have to look things up!). I really enjoyed your entry, too, my friend; cu // paul

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 9/16/2014 7:39:00 AM

Congratulations Paul. I love this hilarious Chastushka. Would liked to of seen it higher up.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/16/2014 6:12:00 PM

Ahhh! That's very nice and sweet of you Brenda! Am glad that it made you laugh:) ... at least the primary aim was achieved. Goodnight. // paul

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 9/16/2014 6:28:00 AM

Congrats on the win in my contest and thanks for the support, Paul

Paul Callus
Date: 9/16/2014 6:15:00 PM

Thank you DR for finding my Chastushka worthy of being on the winners' list. I do my best to support contests, whenever possible. // paul

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 9/8/2014 4:33:00 PM

This is hilarious! Truly an entertaining read. : ) Always, Laura

Paul Callus
Date: 9/8/2014 4:55:00 PM

Many thanks Laura! Enjoyed your lovely comments, and even more your most welcome visit:) Take care. // paul

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 9/7/2014 10:42:00 PM

Hahaha that's so funny. Love your Chastushka poem Paul. Good luck.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/8/2014 4:44:00 PM

So glad I brought a smile to your face, Brenda! Humour is important in our lives. Take care. // paul

Verlena S. Walker

Date: 8/31/2014 4:07:00 AM

Well done and great take on Dr. Ram contest Paul... GL but I really don't believe you need it. To me, you should win with high marks. Verlena

Paul Callus
Date: 8/31/2014 8:13:00 AM

Ahhh! you are so kind, Verlena:) Hope the learned DR will put you on the judging panel!!:) Have a nice day! // paul

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/29/2014 11:31:00 AM

LOL..Enjoyed reading your funny one today..Thanks for the visits to my page..Sara

Paul Callus
Date: 8/29/2014 4:42:00 PM

Glad you enjoyed my write, Sara; it was meant to elicit a smile! have a nice weekend. // paul

M. L. Kiser

Date: 8/28/2014 12:31:00 PM

That was great! I can see him drunk with his wig all crooked.

Paul Callus
Date: 8/29/2014 4:50:00 PM

Thank you ML. Glad you found this to your liking! // paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 8/28/2014 11:14:00 AM

That's a brilliant one Paul ! Great humour here,, good laughs for health u know,, many thanks! Best wishes always !

Paul Callus
Date: 8/28/2014 11:54:00 AM

Thank you Upma! Love your comments; as a doctor you speak from experience! A laugh a day keeps the blues away. Take care. // paul

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 8/28/2014 11:10:00 AM

Dear Paul, you gave me a great laugh with the loss of his "crooked wig." Dr. Ram is sure to love this and I wish you success in the contest. Love, Carolyn

Paul Callus
Date: 8/28/2014 11:48:00 AM

Hi Carolyn! Glad you got a laugh out of this little witty poem; after all Chastushki are supposed to be ironic, sarcastic or witty. / Oh...I did not realize that a "Redneck Dictionary" existed...came in handy!! Thanks for stopping by...hugs // paul

Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 8/28/2014 11:11:00 AM

PS - I found a "Redneck Dictionary" that helped with my ebonics poem. :D

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/28/2014 8:37:00 AM

- Ladies friend :)))) - Enjoy reading, Paul :)) - Good luck in the contest !!! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus
Date: 8/28/2014 9:13:00 AM

Glad you enjoyed it Anne Lise! Thank you for your support. Have a lovely day:) /x/ paul

Justin Bordner

Date: 8/28/2014 2:30:00 AM

This is smart and tutorial Paul. Its unwise to drink much and to love women just for lust. Makes me think how happy I am that I've never had a " one night stand " , but I am capable of " love at first sight."

Paul Callus
Date: 8/28/2014 8:34:00 AM

Thank you Justin. Too much drink can make laughing stocks out of us. I have never been able to understand why people become so dependable on drink or drugs to get what they want. Just being ourselves beats both. // paul

Tim Smith

Date: 8/27/2014 8:44:00 PM

Lol...awesome Paul....a great ending to my night...Tim

Paul Callus
Date: 8/31/2014 5:56:00 AM

Thank you Tim; I was sure I had answered to these comments a few days ago!! As I told Barbara, I'd better blame it on my memory!:) Have a nice day! // paul

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 8/27/2014 5:56:00 PM

Oh this is great..I cant seem to get anything done on this one. Your sure to do well with this..BG

Paul Callus
Date: 8/31/2014 5:54:00 AM

Hi Barbara....I am sure that I had replied to this one before, but maybe my memory is playing tricks on me! Thank you for the great comment; have a lovely Sunday! // paul

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 8/27/2014 5:56:00 PM

Oh this is great..I cant seem to get anything done on this one. Your sure to do well with this..BG

Paul Callus
Date: 8/27/2014 6:03:00 PM

Glad you like it Barbara; I inserted some vodka to give it a Russian touch. Don't try too hard...something will crop up in your dreams! hugs // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 8/27/2014 5:12:00 PM

LOL Paul great humour here:-) Good luck with the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 8/27/2014 5:43:00 PM

Thank you Jan; not finding much time for writing, rather busy; but managed this little write before going to bed. Hugs. // paul