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There, upon the altar of her essence, All remnants of her world, now torn apart, A prayer giv'n up to cancer and its lessons ... The flesh and passion torn from 'round her heart. All remnants of her world, now torn apart, Thus given to her illness, in extremes ... The flesh and passion torn from 'round her heart, So drowned the embers of her hopes and dreams. Thus given to her illness, in extremes ... Her sinews and vitality, (and mate) ... So drowned the embers of her hopes and dreams, Her love and prospects, now an empty plate. Her sinews and vitality, (and mate) ... Not nearly all she was, within those clashes - Her love and prospects, now an empty plate, Life and love would yet rise from the ashes. Not nearly all she was, within those clashes, A prayer giv'n up to cancer and its lessons ... Life and love would yet rise from the ashes, There, upon the altar ... of her essence. ~ 2nd Place ~ in the "Pantoum" Poetry Contest, Line Gauthier, Judge & Sponsor. * For my mom - my brave survivor ... you have shown me what true courage looks like. *

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Date: 2/29/2020 3:49:00 PM
Congratulations Gregory. And continued prayers for your mother.
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Date: 2/27/2020 6:19:00 PM
I'm not a fan of Pantoum poetry, but...this one is excellent, glad to see you got a win!
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Date: 2/27/2020 2:58:00 PM
This is wonderful verse , Greg, I am tickled that you used the Rhyme pattern. Congratulations on your awesome win. Hugs Eve
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Date: 2/27/2020 2:46:00 PM
Beautiful pantoum for your Mother. So touching. Glad I got to read this, made me think of my Mother, RIP. ~ John
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Date: 2/26/2020 10:09:00 PM
Great use of form Gregory, God bless your Mom...
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