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A Mute Ocean

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Before: He waves the sea farewell Is sure the shore will dwell He wheels, hardly touching earth, His arms provoke the sky As wings about to fly: Raising a newborn bird. A swan, yet not about to die a phoenix in disguise Refuting every lie Refusing less than high He writes his muted life away Remembers life on earth A life of lack and dearth A miss that always stays After: He keeps his words inside They too will always hide *** May 4, 2017 Copyright © Darren White

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John Herlihy

Date: 5/6/2017 2:07:00 AM

The title, A Mute Ocean, but the poem is far from mute, it sparkles with sound and light. John

Darren White
Date: 5/6/2017 6:31:00 AM

It hopefully does yes, I hope you liked the metaphor.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 5/5/2017 12:09:00 AM

Profoundly moving Darren....just beautiful! 7 ; )

Darren White
Date: 5/5/2017 12:20:00 AM

Thank you so much, Connie :)

Sara Ella

Date: 5/4/2017 9:44:00 PM

Apple pie! :D I hope that you continue to feed your muse! This is so sad and yet freeing - as always, this is so well written <3

Darren White
Date: 5/5/2017 12:19:00 AM

Apple pie! Yes, the muse is slowly feeling happy again ;) <3

Elissa Quigley

Date: 5/4/2017 2:13:00 PM

I love the last stanza, very relatable. Good write Darren!!!

Darren White
Date: 5/5/2017 12:17:00 AM

If it is relatable, I succeeded :) Thank you Elissa!

Emile Pinet

Date: 5/4/2017 1:44:00 PM

The conscious mind extends itself beyond our norms and we enter a world composed of reality defused with imagination, where happiness is often tentative and so precious as to awe us with its beauty and scare us with its fragility.Very imaginative and skillfully constructed. Emile. #7

Darren White
Date: 5/4/2017 1:53:00 PM

Your comments are always so beautiful and very much apprecited. Life is a fragile existence. Thank you Emile :)

Miraj Raha

Date: 5/4/2017 10:01:00 AM

Its like the falling of a leaf, the world does not notice his departure, only the stories of his life were written in the ocean.Just Brilliant.

Darren White
Date: 5/4/2017 10:23:00 AM

Yes Miraj, that exactly. Thank you :)

Maria Williams

Date: 5/4/2017 7:40:00 AM

What can I say that hasn't been said already , except that your words are beautiful, because you wrote them. A 7++ Dear Darren xxx

Darren White
Date: 5/4/2017 7:46:00 AM

That is such an incredible nice thing to say Maria! Thank you, also for the 7 :)

Chris Green

Date: 5/4/2017 7:15:00 AM

Amazing, can I say it again? Amazing. Your poem my friend is so expressive and touching. There is sadness but there is beauty. There is fear but there is joy. There is silence but there is song. This piece brings it all together perfectly.

Darren White
Date: 5/4/2017 7:26:00 AM

Thank you my friend! It seems that slowly my muse is getting back to work, and I am relieved. Thank you for always believing in me Chris :)

Jan Allison

Date: 5/4/2017 6:50:00 AM

Glad to see your muse is flying high again Darren - don't keep those words inside my friend:-) hugs Jan xx

Darren White
Date: 5/4/2017 7:04:00 AM

My muse is reluctant, Jan :) I had to persuade her with apple pie ;)

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib

Date: 5/4/2017 6:29:00 AM

Spellbinding write my friend. As deep and engulfing as the sea itself. A penguin is a sea bird that does indeed fly underwater, an inextinguishable Phoenix.

Darren White
Date: 5/4/2017 6:35:00 AM

Penguins fly under water indeed :) Thank you ma mo!

Lisa Ricci

Date: 5/4/2017 5:49:00 AM

PS. Sorry Darren. I forgot to say if the ocean is mute it is because she is the keeper of all. Of all that she sees and all that she hears. And yes, I trust her completely to hold and keep all that I have whispered to her. And yes again, she has whispered right back.

Darren White
Date: 5/4/2017 5:51:00 AM

Yes :) I understand you!

Lisa Ricci

Date: 5/4/2017 5:46:00 AM

Oh Darren. You so have me in tears with this ever beautiful expressive emotional and beyond entry. I can't tell you. Those wings have to take flight. They just have to. As far as those words. Far more than not that is where they live and safely remain for many reasons and for many understandings. You are an amazing composer. Yes you are. Thank you for sharing such excellence in my eyes.

Darren White
Date: 5/4/2017 5:51:00 AM

You make me smile and thank you for your wonderful words my friend <3