A Mordacious Wind

The wizened hunter had but one cartridge
remaining this was no trifle matter.
For he’d been attacked by a hungry horde
of rats when he took shelter in this cave.

And now a mordacious wind was morphing
into a severe storm and he was scared.
Yet he had to layover until dawn
for the blizzard’s wrath had imprisoned him.

The mere thought of his starving family
elicited nightmares and pangs of guilt.
For he felt shackled to this loathsome cave
unable to hunt and provide them food.

Setting the horizon afire Sol rose
as dawn's first light pierced the black of night.
And with one shot starvation was diverted
for a buck stood dead center in his sights.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017



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Date: 7/16/2021 4:03:00 AM
Returned to read this again after reading Harry Horsman's "Jesus Christ". Your piece, Emile, has such an appeal to me - depicting the nature of God to provide what things we most need at just the right time. Mordacious wind - I have it marked as a favorite. Thanks for writing it.
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Date: 7/16/2021 6:26:00 AM
Thanks, Reason, you honor me my friend, Emile.
Date: 5/23/2018 10:08:00 AM
Great hunter/survival tale. Well done, Emile.
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Date: 5/23/2018 12:16:00 PM
Thank you very much Line, I appreciate your comments and support. Emile.
Date: 4/23/2017 4:12:00 AM
Hello Emile, This is a wondrous and masterful Blank Verse write in every respect. Outstanding Work!! And very well-done!! Cheers and Best, Gary
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Emile Pinet
Date: 4/23/2017 9:53:00 AM
Thank you very much Gary, I appreciate your comments and support. Emile.
Date: 4/11/2017 10:16:00 AM
Wonderful read, congratulations on your placement, congratulations on your piece. I love reading the other entries in this contest to see how the authors interpreted the word bank. You dug deep and it shines like gold.
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Date: 4/11/2017 10:23:00 AM
Thank you very much Reason, I appreciate your comments and support. Emile.
Date: 4/9/2017 1:35:00 PM
Great poem Emile loved the story very engaging, great use of the 8 words. Congrats on a fine win!
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Emile Pinet
Date: 4/9/2017 5:02:00 PM
Thank you so much John, your comments are must appreciated my friend. Emile.
Date: 4/8/2017 7:38:00 PM
Congrats on your win Emile
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Date: 4/8/2017 8:16:00 PM
Thanks Joseph, I appreciate it, Emile.
Date: 3/27/2017 8:05:00 PM
You met the challenge head on with an awesome blank verse story Emile! G/L in the contest! ~Che :)
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Emile Pinet
Date: 3/28/2017 11:05:00 AM
Thank you so much Cheryl, your comments are must appreciated. Emile.
Date: 3/25/2017 12:07:00 AM
Wow...I tell you now, I'd never tackle such a challenge, but you did so with finesse. Great write.
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Emile Pinet
Date: 3/25/2017 9:04:00 AM
Thanks Eileen, I appreciate your visit, Emile.
Date: 3/24/2017 2:58:00 PM
Iove the way you .managed to weave the words to create such a story...Not easy words..Awesome.
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Date: 3/24/2017 6:47:00 PM
Thank you so much Charmaine, your comments are must appreciated. Emile.
Date: 3/24/2017 2:06:00 PM
- Skillfully, Emile ... really! - Difficult words to "puzzle" ... I could never manage it - Good luck in the contest - Best wishes for a lovely weekend - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 3/24/2017 6:44:00 PM
Thank you for this wonderful review, your thoughts and comments are welcomed and appreciated, Anne-Lise. Emile.
Date: 3/24/2017 1:49:00 PM
Rooting for your protagonist to make it back home!
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Date: 3/24/2017 1:54:00 PM
Thanks for your visit Kim, I appreciate it, Emile.
Date: 3/24/2017 1:29:00 PM
Brilliant imagery Emile and you wove the words in so well :-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 3/24/2017 1:32:00 PM
Thanks Jan, it was a bit of a challenge... I appreciate your comments and visits my friend, Emile.
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