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A Giving Tree

A course-correction knife was plunged too late. A smile was still, upon her lips, that date. Clueless, for most of life, the cherries, green. Her shoulder-bluffs and high-peak cheeks are seen. She stands five feet, barely a statue-bold. Appears quite warm with bundled arms of gold. A pointed thumb at chest level. A charm Bracelet does shake with silver-fake alarm. The lyrics play a lycra-schmooze with stretch. Uncanny walking cane, amidst homestretch. A slide puzzle, her wrinkles crash and burn. Only then, girl, a happenstance upturn. A giving tree, with scathing sack of seed. The dandiest scatters of yellow weed. A field not quite a rose, with weaker stems. A chosen path amidst headstones - few gems. But remembered, oh yes. Her name engraved and youthful picture set. ‘Tis what she craved.

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Date: 9/11/2024 12:03:00 PM
Kim, I really enjoy your melding of almost old English and modern language. You have a lovely way with words
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/11/2024 12:26:00 PM
Thank you, Kate! I appreciate you!
Date: 9/5/2024 5:14:00 PM
Dear Kim, your couplets are uniquely expressive and your imagery is creative and intriguing. So many amazing phrases like “course-correction knife”, “high-peak cheeks”, “lycra-schmooze”, along with dashes of alliteration and sprinkles of assonance, paint a compelling portrait of “a giving tree”. Beautiful poetry. Congratulations for your success in Charlotte’s contest. Warmest wishes my poet friend.. ~Susan
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/6/2024 10:13:00 AM
I thank you so much! I appreciate you letting me know what you liked! I worked very hard at the imagery. Hugs
Date: 9/5/2024 7:55:00 AM
Congratulations! A beautifully written couplet! Xo
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/5/2024 7:58:00 AM
Thank you, Crystol!
Date: 9/5/2024 3:57:00 AM
i loved this poem, kim, and it would've placed in the top three but for the use of 'tis', which i don't like to see in a poem lol beautiful and unusual use of language, striking imagery, and great end rhyme (i particularly like that seventh couplet) - congrats on your win in my contest! :)
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/5/2024 4:48:00 AM
Thank you for my placement. I am honored! My use of ‘Tis instead of it’s was for effect, a pounding sound for a lady who charmed and was prideful, though giving. She pointed at herself. In the end like everyone else, she ends up in the grave. Thank you, again!
Date: 9/3/2024 6:04:00 PM
That's a memorable memory. Cemeteries are a picture in time.
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Date: 9/3/2024 1:12:00 PM
A very giving tree indeed. This is so lovely, Kim.
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Date: 9/3/2024 7:25:00 AM
Dear Kim Your writings are great. This is one of them.
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Date: 9/3/2024 5:47:00 AM
Dear Kim, I loved reading your heroic couplet this morning. You have conveyed a true sense of fulfillment in being remembered and having one's name and image preserved. That is despite all the imperfections and challenges faced along the way. Faith, Hope, and Love! - Blessings, My Dear friend, Daniel
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Date: 9/2/2024 8:30:00 PM
A life fruitfully lived. Now her name is engraved not only on the headstone, but in many hearts because she was a 'giving tree'. Beautiful poem, dear Kim. Enjoyed reading it.
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Date: 9/2/2024 5:27:00 PM
Great poem! I like Heroic Couplet form, A favorite and nice read! Have a nice day sweet lovely Kim ~ AA
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/2/2024 5:45:00 PM
Thanks, AA!
Date: 9/2/2024 11:35:00 AM
I have read this seven times and will probably read it again, and again...I loved your poem, this was amazing and real writing, Kim...I cannot believe how gifted you are...a fav for sure of mine <3
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/2/2024 1:33:00 PM
XOXO, Paige
Date: 9/2/2024 11:30:00 AM
I enjoyed reading your wonderful "A Giving Tree" write. Have you read the book by this name??? It is a great read... Have a wonderful day writing away..................
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/2/2024 1:33:00 PM
My kids received that book as a gift from their Uncle, I think.
Date: 9/2/2024 8:17:00 AM
Truth! When we give to others, we are also giving back to ourselves -- when we love others, love multiplies within us -- blessing and grace are God's way. Let us together, reaffirm our commitment to each other, and all of nature. Let us pray, Heaven's way. Holy Holy. What we plant, how we plant is our posture and reap.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/2/2024 1:32:00 PM
Thank you for your uplifting comment! Let us pray heaven’s way…

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