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A Gentle Touch

Something Sweet,
A gentle touch.
A faraway dream,
here I am stuck.

Something sour,
a slight change in mood.
A regrettable decision,
to find the truth.

A little thought.
A mile away.
A gentle touch,
be brave today.

I learned a lesson;
To love and let go.
To never forget...
The highs or the lows.

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John Hamilton

Date: 10/26/2016 11:06:00 AM

Love the short strokes in each line, very strong poem, look forward to more of your work.I agree with Connie, the more you comment on others poems, the more views and comments you will receive.

Tatianna Leachet

Date: 10/24/2016 7:21:00 PM

This was very beautiful and sends out a well thought message.

Jean Murray

Date: 10/24/2016 10:24:00 AM

We all crave that "gentle touch" Hani. Be brave in trusting your own gift. Each of us write in our own unique way. I often feel inferior, as I have no formal training, but just like one cannot learn music by ear, so too I feel my poetry is instinctive. I don't want to shackle it in any way.

Dana Redricks

Date: 10/22/2016 3:54:00 PM

Very inspirational and poetic as well. Keep up the great writes.

Robert Lindley

Date: 10/20/2016 1:50:00 PM

STRONG MESSAGE AND WELL WRITTEN. Very few things soothe as well as a gentle touch my friend! Great poetry!!

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 10/15/2016 1:54:00 AM

We are all here to learn lessons. I feel that is probably what you're trying to express in this poem.Welcome to Poetry Soup! If you comment on member's poems, you won't need to soup mail them to ask them to comment on your poems. Most everyone tries to reciprocate when someone comments on their poem. Cheers, Connie : )

Jack Webster

Date: 10/15/2016 12:29:00 AM

Greetings Gholami, I received your message requesting comment, so I am happy to reply. I think your poem shows an attentive use of repetition, in a variety of ways, and the skill of altering that repetition to emphasize key thoughts and emotions. I've not attempted to write successfully in iambic dimeter before (though it seems perhaps you're simply limiting your stresses per line to 2-3, however there is enough use of iambic meter to strongly evoke the rhythm). I'll have to try it out.