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Not for contest.

Not sure this is even a poem....  Just playing around with imagination and a bit of different interpretation on Adam and Eve.

 

 

A forgotten Home

Eve, once a suppressed silent marionette, 
immersed herself within the borders of word spinners,
searching for a metaphor to entice her heart,
but hid behind monikers, to evade the sinners,
so Adam, whilst nurturing his garden, 
left it behind to compose
an abundance of odes,
to heal the suffering of her untamed soul

and for a while her spirit adored his verses.

But even in Eden,
not all blossoms are sincere,
as wildflowers spread delusions of grandeur,
ego grows among horned thorns,
where camouflaged green serpents,
seduce with their silver tongues.

Eve, in her innocence,
manipulated by the 'hisses' of poisoned whispers,
fell deeper into a pit of venom,
trapped within realms where crows 
perch upon tombstones 
and in her loneliness,
absorbed herself into a world of counterfeit applause,
falling prey to a viper's falsehoods.

The anthology of Adam was forgotten,
and his muse lost among the darkness of cosmos.
Without a riverbed to place his sorrows,
he roamed among the mute,
shielding his inkless quill,
craving to see her shadow,
believing when two souls connect,
they become immortal poetry,
so he searched for his muse,
yearning to ink romantic musings,
so poetic sighs could ascend,
but he found no alliterations,
only rhymes without substance,
under midnight horizons,
where temporary lanterns,
waved goodbye to the moon.

He did not need lessons on poetry,
for he has penned many a poem,
he only called for the return of his curator,
so his mind did not become a museum in her absence -
nor her final kiss only an artifact

but all he found was the silence of poets.

Upon his last poetic breath, he wrote

O beloved,
your hands will become tiresome,
so why do you keep bleeding in misery,
ignoring the embedded elegy,
beating after each melancholic reflection.

Now that your verses
no longer carry my name,
I still called for you
through the dreams of sleeping poets,
but even echoes
no longer recognise my worth.

So I remain homeless,
where the ink refuses to release,
and the scroll forgets
it was ever touched...

Today his garden still blooms,
even among the wildflowers -
but without his affection.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2026

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Edmonds  Avatar
June 18, 2026 at 2:02 PM
A wonderful take on the story of Adam and Eve, great imaginings. Enjoyed the read Silent One… Beryl
La France Avatar
May 26, 2026 at 10:49 AM
Silent, you pen always drips beauty, your muse always takes you to awesome places, love your poem, a FAV ~
Proxenos Avatar
May 12, 2026 at 9:48 AM
Even the garden of Eden had temptation weaved within it. God thought that Adam and Eve could be trusted but it only took a vile serpent slithering in the thorns close to them to tempt Eve, She was a Judus in some sort of way. There are venomous snakes who thrive on the conscious of weak people in this world, they need to be weeded out. Great poem, deep meaning. Hugs Jennifer.
George Avatar
April 21, 2026 at 4:36 AM
"ego grows among horned thorns, where camouflaged green serpents, seduce with their silver tongues." There are always such green serpents with silver tongues. Despite all that, let your garden keep blooming and your love blossoming. Dear Silent One, your quill never goes dry and your muse is always by your side. Great metaphoric poem.
Terry Avatar
April 20, 2026 at 4:01 PM
Silent One. You have penned lines which touch me deeply. Once I loved and my poetry reflected that love but all was lost including those poems. I still 'yearn to ink romantic musings' but they are no longer within me. I am doomed to write 'only rhymes without substance'. You have captured the theme of my poetic journey. Perhaps, this is why I enjoy reading your works so much. You see the truth in all things and can still express delicate feelings and rawness of love. You got me good with this one. Your friend in poetry, Jan.
Maverick Avatar
April 19, 2026 at 10:30 PM
Its all flowers and waving lanterns..? I Digress..lol))) mind you.? On the forgetful scroll, i think you got on a roll.' Yet ommited of the phantom.' And him Riding in an invisible phantom..' I got Almost carried away..By the wolf who Stole my thoughts away.' Enjoyed reading Si..God bless.)
Anaya Avatar
April 18, 2026 at 5:52 PM
I enjoyed the interpretation of Adam and Eve, Silent One. Vivid, and lineworks make its length full & worthy. Substance in poetry is food for the soul, much needed, weeded out are the vipers whispers and the Eve's behind them! Amazing dear poet, good reads me thinks~ April's blessings
One Avatar
April 19, 2026 at 9:56 AM
Awww thank you.. You are always too kind my friend... I wanted to make a slight change to the story of Adam and Eve.... and resemble it to poetry...
Nicole Avatar
April 18, 2026 at 4:23 PM
' ego grows among horned thorns, where camouflaged green serpents, seduce with their silver tongues. ' So true. Life and poetry, thoughts always seem to tangle around both. My best to you, Silent One. Hugs, Brandy
One Avatar
April 19, 2026 at 9:57 AM
Thank you Brandy... have to be careful of the ego, it can effect us in a bad way... thank you
Seeker Avatar
April 16, 2026 at 9:16 PM
Wow! An amazing, deep, introspective write. Enjoyed immensely.
One Avatar
April 19, 2026 at 10:20 AM
Thank you
Salehi Avatar
April 14, 2026 at 4:01 PM
After years, I came back, and I found the silent one, the alias of Rumi. There was a time I read all of your work. Your pen is beautiful, like always. But there are false teachers and fake prophets of doom. The bogus promises of bliss, or dark gloom. Love is always great, but when it comes to Adam and Eve, it is not for me. Pashang
Maverick Avatar
April 19, 2026 at 10:34 PM
I don't know.? Why complicate..Such unconformity.? Which comes from where it goes, maybe.? In poetry.) All blessings, to all.!
One Avatar
April 19, 2026 at 10:20 AM
I am not sure i am worthy of being compared to Rumi, but thank you... I agree with your sentiments... Adam and Eve and merely a metaphor in this poem... Thanks for your feedback..
DiMino Avatar
April 13, 2026 at 6:47 PM
"trapped within realms where crows perch upon tombstones and in her loneliness, absorbed herself into a world of counterfeit applause, falling prey to a viper's falsehoods." -- Wow! Great imagery. "Today his garden still blooms, even among the wildflowers - but without his affection." -- True love is forever. Pure Truth.
One Avatar
April 19, 2026 at 10:24 AM
Very true.. Thanks Joe.
Narain Avatar
April 13, 2026 at 9:52 AM
Nice poem with imagery and fantasy. Well penned.
Empress Avatar
April 13, 2026 at 6:20 AM
A very deeply moving poem, this is silent one, you write in ways that makes readers think and feel on so many levels. I really felt emotional reading the opening lines, I think this analogy would resonate in some way to many. But a grateful heart will never forget the deeds of someone who was there through their darkest of times. Perhaps it looks like ego as time and life paints individuals with colors that could cloud their ability to see beyond whats really real. I can go on and on. But will end with just saying, this is soul stirring and so very moving! Heartfelt poem worthy of accolades! Pleasure seeing you inspired and reading you. Sending you light always
Buhagiar Avatar
April 13, 2026 at 1:22 AM
Wow! Your imagery and fantasy are incredible. Adam losing his muse, Eve losing her identity - amazing thoughts. A bittersweet finale.
Goldsmith Avatar
April 12, 2026 at 9:22 PM
"A forgotten Home" is a creative/wonderful ~ write/story. I always enjoy reading your amazing work. The master at work/at play. Toooooo Many Great Lines, To Say The One I Love Best. Have a great day/week writing away..............
Onclaud Avatar
April 12, 2026 at 5:43 PM
you got me, S...to find beauty in ruins; hints of greek tragedy here...compelling write with that special brand of artword only you can master!
Buehler Avatar
April 12, 2026 at 3:57 PM
Your interesting tale is beautifully written an imaginative, Silent One. I greatly enjoyed reading it. :)
Dietrich Avatar
April 12, 2026 at 1:05 PM
I really like how you ended this, for though the garden bloomed, it never found the affection he searched for . Well at least that's the way I saw it.
Sands Avatar
April 12, 2026 at 12:53 PM
There are so many good lines in this powerful poem. I can feel it. Brilliantly written :)
Rodrigues Avatar
April 12, 2026 at 7:11 AM
Wow, the crows perched on tombstones and whispers of hisses…Adam searching for his muse… I still called for you through the dreams of sleeping poets…enjoyed your musing, Silent! Well done!
One Avatar
April 12, 2026 at 10:06 AM
Thank you Kim..
Rodgers Avatar
April 12, 2026 at 5:59 AM
Hi Silent One, like walking through the ruins of a once beautiful garden, now overshadowed by sorrow and silence. Oh, the sorrow of lost connection, anguish of forgotten love, of the... unspoken poetry. "Without a riverbed" just like a soul that has no outlet to grieve. Soul-stirring piece, SO. Blessings, Daniel
One Avatar
April 12, 2026 at 10:05 AM
Thank you Daniel...
Fleming Avatar
April 12, 2026 at 4:14 AM
Powerful stuff, Silent One. Enjoyed! Best regards. :) john
One Avatar
April 12, 2026 at 10:05 AM
Thank you John..
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