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A Flawed Child

A young child lives in an illusion,
that everything will turn out right.
As they get broken and torn from life,
their imperfect world is cracked wide open.
Are they really flawed,
or are these just their feelings coming through.
As they get older,
many wear a mask to hide their pain and hurt.
The life they had longed for,
now has become just a facade.
Date Written: 6/13/3021
Writing Prompt - Flawed - Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Constance La France

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Date: 6/25/2021 4:53:00 PM
Paula, congratulations on your win in my Writing Prompt - Flawed _ Challenge with your wonderful poem. Good use of the required words, love _ Constance
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Paula Goldsmith
Date: 6/26/2021 9:21:00 AM
Thank You, for writing, for your very kind words and for your congratulations. It is an honor to have a win in your contest. I enjoyed writing it. I am glad you like this write. Have a blessed day/weekend.................
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Paula Goldsmith
Date: 6/26/2021 9:20:00 AM
Thank You, for writing, for your very kind words and for your congratulations. It is an honor to have a win in your contest. I enjoyed writing it. I am glad you like this write. Have a blessed day/weekend.................
Date: 6/24/2021 8:40:00 PM
Wonderful work. Congratulations!
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Paula Goldsmith
Date: 6/26/2021 9:18:00 AM
Thank You, for writing and for your congratulations. It is an honor to have a win. I am glad you like this write. Have a blessed day/weekend.................
Date: 6/24/2021 7:17:00 PM
Congrats! Thanks for sharing this talent, and this piece, showing reality in your amazing poetic style is a proof. God bless you.
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Paula Goldsmith
Date: 6/26/2021 9:12:00 AM
Thank You, for writing, for your very kind words and for your congratulations. It is an honor to have a win. I am glad you like this one. Have a blessed day/weekend.................
Date: 6/16/2021 8:26:00 AM
WOW! Paula, you have penned an amazingly insightful poem using all the prompt words with beautiful flow. In few lines, you have said everything you felt. Very very impressive, My Dear Friend. I am getting inspired by your poem. Love and best wishes ~ Mala
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Paula Goldsmith
Date: 6/16/2021 1:36:00 PM
Thank You, for reading, for writing and for your very kind words. I am glad you like this one and that it has inspired you. You have made my day. Have a blessed day writing away.................
Date: 6/16/2021 5:53:00 AM
This is so true of abuse in any form. It changes a person from who they could become into someone else. Reads like a good contender to me in the contest. Sara
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Paula Goldsmith
Date: 6/16/2021 1:32:00 PM
Thank You, for reading and for writing. Glad you like this write. I wonder how many lives would have been very different. Have a blessed day.................
Date: 6/15/2021 11:15:00 PM
Hello Paula … as a child the world was carefree as I protected by my parents, but once I had responsibilities there were many highs and lows - a very good poem indeed Paula - Lindsay
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Paula Goldsmith
Date: 6/16/2021 1:30:00 PM
Thank You, for reading and for writing. Glad you like this one. Many children live a wonderful life and many have problems growing up. Both ways effect their lives. Have a blessed day.................
Date: 6/14/2021 10:01:00 PM
This flows beautifully Paula.
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Paula Goldsmith
Date: 6/16/2021 1:28:00 PM
Thank You, for reading and for writing. Glad you like this one. Have a blessed day.................
Date: 6/13/2021 11:17:00 PM
A big WoW! Superb!
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Paula Goldsmith
Date: 6/14/2021 1:12:00 PM
Thank You, for reading and for your kind words. Glad you like this write. Have a blessed day.................