Deb M Poet Rhyme

-A CLOSER LOOK - POTD

You look but do not see
The true worth and value of me 
You just see an old man
An empty battered can

Not the strength l possess
Nor the life l was blessed
Love l gave , love l received
The accomplishments l achieved

My body is aged and frail
Though my mind and spirit still prevail
Look closely as l am still here
I have not vanished nor disappeared

Don’t look through me as if l don’t exist 
Ageism and ignorance resist
Lets chat ,share life ,have a laugh
I may be old but l am certainly not daft!

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Sotto Poet September 21, 2026 at 6:41 AM Like a lyrical cascade, each phrase flows naturally into the one before. Wow, what a fantastic POTD, congratulations Deb!

Joe Maverick September 20, 2026 at 11:53 AM Geez Sheila..I can emphasise here ( i mean me old battered can..' that ute was Brand new when i bought it, ya know.. ya Must have wrote this for me i reckon.? Maybe ya don't want a drive up to the Lookout.? But ya might be a bit kinder.? I feel sirta gripe-cas t or whatever it is those fancy writers put.? And..And i just Got out me white two piece king-gee jacket and Strides too..O well i spose i might aa well head to Woolamaloo.)

Kim Rodrigues October 19, 2023 at 3:53 AM Oh, the ages have much to give…we need to lean in for as long as possible because once they are gone so are their stories except we hold onto them. I love my dad more than ever. How I cherish him. God bless and congratulations on POTD! Deb M October 19, 2023 at 8:08 AM Indeed we do Kim….thankyou so much! Debx

Lisa Ricci October 13, 2023 at 11:46 AM Hello Deb. This entry is very meaningful with much value and thus deserving of the POTD. Thank you for sharing your poetic talent. May this day find you well. Have a wonderful weekend. Blessings always (smile) Deb M October 16, 2023 at 4:00 AM Thankyou so much Lisa…. I always enjoy your thoughts my friend! Debx

Sam Kauffman October 12, 2023 at 4:10 PM What an amazing poem from the voice and soul of a person overlooked because of age!!! Indeed, "not daft!" Each line flows so effortlessly from the previous line - like a poetic waterfall! Congratulations on your POTD! Blessings to you. Gratitude for this perceptive poem that sees that every person has much to share. Deb M October 16, 2023 at 3:59 AM Wow Sam what a lovely gracious comment which l so appreciate! You are very kind…..thankyou Debx

Mike Gentile October 12, 2023 at 11:40 AM Words that I certainly relate too Deb! Beautifully stated and crafted in such poetic balance that it was destined for POTD!! I love it! Congratulations xxoo Deb M October 16, 2023 at 3:57 AM Such a sweet comment Mike….thankyou so much! Debx

Paula Goldsmith October 11, 2023 at 9:38 AM Back with Congratulations on your POTD win. I enjoyed reading it again. Have a blessed day writing away.................... Deb M October 12, 2023 at 8:16 AM Thankyou Paula…l appreciate that! Debx

Tom Cunningham October 11, 2023 at 2:14 AM Big congratulations to you Deb on the honour of POTD. Safe travels. Tom Deb M October 12, 2023 at 8:04 AM Cheers Sir Tom….Debx

Karen Jones October 11, 2023 at 12:27 AM Great message in your poem Deb! Congrats on potd! Deb M October 12, 2023 at 8:04 AM Cheers Karen….Debx

Daisy Meadows October 11, 2023 at 12:00 AM Brilliant poem. Well said!!! Congratulations on your POTD. Deb M October 12, 2023 at 8:04 AM Thanks Jeanette…Debx

Brandy Nicole October 10, 2023 at 9:11 PM Deb, there's so much truth within this tender and emotional poem you've created. It seems age defines who we are and how others look at us. Your last thought brought a smile. Trying to stay sane, for as long as I can. Congratulations my dear friend, on Poem of the Day. My best to you. :) Hugs, Brandy Deb M October 12, 2023 at 8:03 AM Thankyou lovely Brandy! Debx

R J. Elless October 10, 2023 at 5:48 PM Not Daft at all. Congratulations on Your POTD. Stay Creative Deb M October 12, 2023 at 2:22 AM Thankyou RJ….appreciate your kind words! Debx

Shirley Hawkins October 10, 2023 at 4:26 PM Congratulations, Deb, on POTD, a very deserved win. Your poetry gets better and better. Look after yourself, Old Duck XX Deb M October 12, 2023 at 2:20 AM Shirley you are and have been my biggest supporter and l am so appreciative of that my beautiful caring friend….but you know that! Debx

Jan Allison October 10, 2023 at 1:36 PM you certainly hit the nail on the head with this one Deb i especially loved the final stanza, many congrats on POTD:-) hugs jan xx Deb M October 10, 2023 at 1:48 PM Thankyou lovely Jan!! Debx

Mona Ebel October 10, 2023 at 10:45 AM That is a beautiful to ask for the validation you so deserve. There will be no wine before it's time, and the reserves are always saved for special occasions. Smile Deb M October 10, 2023 at 1:05 PM Hi Mona….thank you so much for your comment…appreciated! Debx

Warren Doll October 10, 2023 at 9:51 AM Deb, very wise and true, Congratulations on POTD~ Warren Deb M October 10, 2023 at 10:33 AM Hey Warren…nice to see you and thankyou! Debx

Tania Kitchin October 10, 2023 at 9:23 AM Deb, congratulations on POTD, enjoyed! Deb M October 10, 2023 at 9:30 AM Thankyou Tania….appreciate your comment! Debx

Beryl Edmonds October 10, 2023 at 9:10 AM There may be wrinkles on an elderly face, but beneath the skin there’s beauty and grace. Lovely poem Deb, congratulations on receiving the award for poem of the day… Belle Deb M October 10, 2023 at 9:19 AM Thankyou so much Belle! Debx

Lin Lane October 10, 2023 at 8:25 AM I knew I'd be back for this one. Happy Poem of the Day for you, Deb. Deb M October 10, 2023 at 8:36 AM Thankyou sweet Lin! Debx

Joseph May October 10, 2023 at 7:45 AM Seniors are cast aside in some countries but in others they are honored, as they should be, Congrats on POTD Deb Deb M October 10, 2023 at 7:57 AM Cheers Joseph! Debx

Gershon Wolf October 10, 2023 at 7:23 AM Gosh, when I look at you and see an old man, I think of myself as an old woman who really needs an updated prescription for new lenses BADLY! lol. Congrats on POTD, Deb! ~ BB King Deb M October 10, 2023 at 7:26 AM Hehe did l ever say l was a woman NEVER haha!! I will leave it at that BB!! Debx

Bill Baker October 10, 2023 at 6:56 AM Congratulations on your POTD, Deb! A message that needs to be heard just like the older people need to be seen. Thanks for sharing from your wonderful heart, my dear friend. Hugs, Bill Deb M October 10, 2023 at 6:57 AM You're welcome Bill hehe! Thanks….Debx

Linda Alice Fowler October 10, 2023 at 6:30 AM So many countries honor and respect their elders, and who remain a part of the family. Fun write Deb. Congratulations on POTD! :) Deb M October 10, 2023 at 6:57 AM Thanks L.O….appreciate your comment! Debx

Vijay Pandit October 10, 2023 at 5:35 AM BIG congrats on POTD, Deb. A potent message my friend. Enjoy your special day today. Deb M October 10, 2023 at 6:56 AM Thanks my friend….appreciate that! Debx

Charles Messina October 10, 2023 at 3:47 AM I always make it a point to converse with the elder- nobody likes to be left in the dark or ignored. Very touching, Deb. Congratulations on being rewarded with POTD! Charliex Deb M October 10, 2023 at 3:49 AM Cheers Charlie….Debx

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