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A Broken Monoku

late night pancakes butter-berry lips move softly over mine

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Kim Rodrigues

Date: 1/27/2025 6:24:00 PM

ooh la la! Tasty poem!

Harry Horsman

Date: 2/8/2013 5:56:00 AM

you wrote this about the time i joined soup,,and you won the contest,,,i'm not suprised,, it is that good...

Kash Poet

Date: 2/2/2011 11:03:00 AM

Feeling hungry!!

Wilma Neels

Date: 1/13/2011 4:23:00 AM

Oh my goodness, this is a yummy write in so many ways :) oh yes OMW means Oh My Word, sorry for not typing out the words, I was in a hurry.. First day back at work yesterday.. love Wilma

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 5/18/2010 11:46:00 AM

Congratulations on your win in Brian's "Broken Monoku" contest Andrea. May you have many more contest wins. Love, Carol

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 5/12/2010 3:28:00 AM

Andrea, Excellent writing! (As usual.) Congratulations on placing in Brian’s Broken Monoku contest with this wonderful line. It's easy to see why you did so well. Your creativity shines. Smiles, DAS-J

Jimmy Anderson

Date: 5/11/2010 1:22:00 PM

Congrats on your Ist Place win, Andrea...Very nice.. Your amazing!...hugs, Jimmy

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 5/10/2010 8:10:00 PM

Congratulations Andrea. You deserve to win first place with this first class poem. Love, Connie

Zera Masters

Date: 5/10/2010 1:17:00 PM

well one thing usually leads to the other...

James Fraser

Date: 5/9/2010 10:27:00 AM

Yummy Monoku Andrea, now mine lips are licking >> have a wonderful Sunday >> James

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 5/8/2010 8:08:00 PM

Congrats on the win, Andrea

Andrew Crisci

Date: 5/7/2010 11:01:00 PM

It's my favorie breakfast! Congratulations, Andrea on your first win! Enjoy your victory... you have deserved it. Love and admiration, Andrew.

Lynette Chachere

Date: 5/7/2010 10:26:00 PM

butter? why not whip cream?! so much sweeter. -Always&Forever ~Lynn*Lynette*

Tim Ryerson

Date: 5/6/2010 4:42:00 PM

Well, Andrea...My stomach doth protest! (It's growling at me) and what?... No pancake mix in the cabinet? It's all your fault...Beautifully done and congratulations on your first place win! - Tim

Margaret Foster

Date: 5/6/2010 12:14:00 AM

Take a bow my dear, the butter berry lips did it for me....great write....Maggie

Joe Flach

Date: 5/5/2010 9:08:00 PM

I shouldn't have read this while I was hungry. Congrats on 1st place & thanks for your feedback on my poems. Joe

Iolanda Scripca

Date: 5/5/2010 6:12:00 PM

Congratulations on your 1st placed pancakes :) I KNEW it was going to be a winner. "Pajamaless Party!!!" Luv, Iolanda

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 5/5/2010 1:41:00 PM

ohhhhh so yummy #1 gal! do the I'm #1 dance! Huzzah!

Daniel Cwiak

Date: 5/5/2010 1:23:00 PM

I can close my eyes and taste them! Congratulations!

Buffy Fooksss Aka Lynette C.

Date: 5/5/2010 10:24:00 AM

THOSE PANCAKES AND BUTTER MUST BE SCRUMPTOUSSss. bUfFy

Joyce Johnson

Date: 5/5/2010 7:50:00 AM

Congratulatiomns Andrea. First place is fun. Love, Joyce

Carrie Richards

Date: 5/5/2010 7:34:00 AM

Excellent!! Hooray for you and this yummy butter berry poem!! 1st place....well done, Andrea!! Love, Carrie

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 5/5/2010 5:55:00 AM

Congrats on the win

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 5/5/2010 5:47:00 AM

Congrats on your big win with this excellent monoku, Andrea.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 5/5/2010 4:52:00 AM

HOORAY .. U won 1st place with this cute and sweet Monoku... way to go Queen of the Sonnet... now Queen of the Monoku.. big congrats my dear friend... u go girlfriend and enjoy that spot at the top... luv.. Linda-Marie..