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Two-Voice Tanka, Thrice

bathed in such splendor in front of us blue water - verdancy behind how very cold it is though like ice, it cuts to the bone this frigid beauty I let my eyes feast on it ignoring the cold the scent of pine is wafting I breathe in tranquility breathing in fragrance I let the iciness go my love shall warm me the fresh trees and ocean air can’t compare to his sweet warmth July 14, 2017 for the Contest of John Anderson

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Dean Wood

Date: 7/30/2017 5:37:00 PM

This is truly beautiful Andrea. I was hoping for someone to show me how it is done. This got the job done well. - Dean

Susan Ashley

Date: 7/30/2017 7:50:00 AM

Hi Andrea, beautiful introspection poetically said. Congratlations! :)

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 7/29/2017 3:44:00 PM

Congratulations on your wonderful second placement in this contest Andrea. I love your entry. ; )

Sara Kendrick

Date: 7/29/2017 12:09:00 PM

Good work..Way to go with this winner..Thanks for dropping by..Sara

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 7/28/2017 8:04:00 PM

Back for congrats!

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 7/25/2017 3:25:00 AM

Sun or lover who warms you Andrea? I am not sure? I enjoyed the superb imagery throughout! : )

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 7/29/2017 3:43:00 PM

Okay...that makes sense. I see it won big, so congrats on your second placement!

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 7/25/2017 5:47:00 PM

connie, it's a lover. At first, I had the final two lines as a separate person conversing with the other, but then I reread the rules of this contest and realized he wanted all the lines to come from the SAME person, so this person is kind of talking back and forth to herself (about the man she is with)

Jennifer Walker

Date: 7/23/2017 8:11:00 PM

As always your imagery is superb.

Afzal Nusker

Date: 7/21/2017 10:54:00 PM

Spectacular!!!

Winged Warrior

Date: 7/19/2017 10:52:00 PM

Beautifully said, my friend...as only you can say it...best of nothing...you don't need luck lol...^WW^

Tim Smith

Date: 7/19/2017 5:06:00 PM

this is so different but is so good...love it Andrea

Kudzai Mhangwa

Date: 7/19/2017 8:00:00 AM

Well done Andrea. So skilfully and beautifully crafted!

Supraja Kannan

Date: 7/18/2017 11:07:00 PM

Beautifully written Andrea.... Lovely scene... Good luck with the contest...

Ralph Sergi

Date: 7/18/2017 5:15:00 PM

I loved your tanka, especially the second stanza. Best of luck in the contest, Andrea.

Harry Horsman

Date: 7/18/2017 3:43:00 PM

Such fineness Andrea, love your tankas good luck in contest, been reading a poetry book called 'Cheshire Chuckles' written by a wonderful poet.

Joanna Daniel

Date: 7/18/2017 6:07:00 AM

Beautiful, Andrea:)

Matthew Anish

Date: 7/17/2017 8:38:00 PM

You certainly are a romantic. I find the last two lines to be very sweet. I am in the middle of a troublesome relationship. It is hard to figure out women sometimes - but I guess you think the same about men. Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Paul Callus

Date: 7/17/2017 5:21:00 PM

I admire the buildup of these three Tanka, Andrea. Frigidness has a beauty of its own, but nothing beats love's warmth! Regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 7/17/2017 5:23:00 AM

- A wonderful poem, Andrea - Luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Ravi Sathasivam

Date: 7/17/2017 1:23:00 AM

Excellent. Beautifully said. Best wishes for the contest.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 7/16/2017 3:01:00 PM

You had me at "the scent of pine is wafting, I breathe in tranquility" So lovely, dear!

Jack Horne

Date: 7/16/2017 9:05:00 AM

lovely - sure to be a win, my friend x

Joseph May

Date: 7/16/2017 6:26:00 AM

Beautiful write Andrea...best wishes in the contest

Eileen Manassian

Date: 7/16/2017 5:42:00 AM

AWWWWWWW....as always, you write with such finesse, Andrea. You are just....amazing. I loved the feelings this evoked in me. Good luck in the contest...though luck has nothing to do with it! ;)