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Two-Voice Tanka, Thrice

bathed in such splendor
in front of us blue water -
verdancy behind
how very cold it is though
like ice, it cuts to the bone
 
this frigid beauty
I let my eyes feast on it
ignoring the cold
the scent of pine is wafting
I breathe in tranquility
 
breathing in fragrance
I let the iciness go
my love shall warm me
the fresh trees and ocean air
can’t compare to his sweet warmth

July 14, 2017 for the Contest of John Anderson

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Dean Wood Date: 7/30/2017 5:37:00 PM This is truly beautiful Andrea. I was hoping for someone to show me how it is done. This got the job done well. - Dean Login to Reply

Susan Ashley Date: 7/30/2017 7:50:00 AM Hi Andrea, beautiful introspection poetically said. Congratlations! :) Login to Reply

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 7/29/2017 3:44:00 PM Congratulations on your wonderful second placement in this contest Andrea. I love your entry. ; ) Login to Reply

Sara Kendrick Date: 7/29/2017 12:09:00 PM Good work..Way to go with this winner..Thanks for dropping by..Sara Login to Reply

Kim Rodrigues Date: 7/28/2017 8:04:00 PM Back for congrats! Login to Reply

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 7/25/2017 3:25:00 AM Sun or lover who warms you Andrea? I am not sure? I enjoyed the superb imagery throughout! : ) Login to Reply Connie Marcum Wong Date: 7/29/2017 3:43:00 PM Okay...that makes sense. I see it won big, so congrats on your second placement! Andrea Dietrich Date: 7/25/2017 5:47:00 PM connie, it's a lover. At first, I had the final two lines as a separate person conversing with the other, but then I reread the rules of this contest and realized he wanted all the lines to come from the SAME person, so this person is kind of talking back and forth to herself (about the man she is with)

Jennifer Walker Date: 7/23/2017 8:11:00 PM As always your imagery is superb. Login to Reply

Afzal Nusker Date: 7/21/2017 10:54:00 PM Spectacular!!! Login to Reply

Winged Warrior Date: 7/19/2017 10:52:00 PM Beautifully said, my friend...as only you can say it...best of nothing...you don't need luck lol...^WW^ Login to Reply

Tim Smith Date: 7/19/2017 5:06:00 PM this is so different but is so good...love it Andrea Login to Reply

Kudzai Mhangwa Date: 7/19/2017 8:00:00 AM Well done Andrea. So skilfully and beautifully crafted! Login to Reply

Supraja Kannan Date: 7/18/2017 11:07:00 PM Beautifully written Andrea.... Lovely scene... Good luck with the contest... Login to Reply

Ralph Sergi Date: 7/18/2017 5:15:00 PM I loved your tanka, especially the second stanza. Best of luck in the contest, Andrea. Login to Reply

Harry Horsman Date: 7/18/2017 3:43:00 PM Such fineness Andrea, love your tankas good luck in contest, been reading a poetry book called 'Cheshire Chuckles' written by a wonderful poet. Login to Reply

Joanna Daniel Date: 7/18/2017 6:07:00 AM Beautiful, Andrea:) Login to Reply

Matthew Anish Date: 7/17/2017 8:38:00 PM You certainly are a romantic. I find the last two lines to be very sweet. I am in the middle of a troublesome relationship. It is hard to figure out women sometimes - but I guess you think the same about men. Peace & Love Matthew Anish Login to Reply

Paul Callus Date: 7/17/2017 5:21:00 PM I admire the buildup of these three Tanka, Andrea. Frigidness has a beauty of its own, but nothing beats love's warmth! Regards // paul Login to Reply

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 7/17/2017 5:23:00 AM - A wonderful poem, Andrea - Luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply

Ravi Sathasivam Date: 7/17/2017 1:23:00 AM Excellent. Beautifully said. Best wishes for the contest. Login to Reply

Kim Rodrigues Date: 7/16/2017 3:01:00 PM You had me at "the scent of pine is wafting, I breathe in tranquility" So lovely, dear! Login to Reply

Jack Horne Date: 7/16/2017 9:05:00 AM lovely - sure to be a win, my friend x Login to Reply

Joseph May Date: 7/16/2017 6:26:00 AM Beautiful write Andrea...best wishes in the contest Login to Reply

Eileen Manassian Date: 7/16/2017 5:42:00 AM AWWWWWWW....as always, you write with such finesse, Andrea. You are just....amazing. I loved the feelings this evoked in me. Good luck in the contest...though luck has nothing to do with it! ;) Login to Reply