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"Love...ultimate truth in life, came tiptoeing, whispering...murmuring...tinkling" - by Poet walking aimlessly on the pristine beach,  find a little boy unwaveringly making sandcastles!               How much I feel I am him!         making sandcastles all day, till today!            I thought I had it all.. possessed        worldly things anyone would crave for,             I thought my life was fulfilled,  did I realize my prized castles were made of sand?  only to get washed away by the sapphire waves              of the fathomless  ocean!                  How oblivious was I?     I didn't know where my treasure was,  the rare gem which only a fortunate can unearth from the depth of the ocean, like an ecstatic  diver finding exquisite pearls in the arabian sea,          I didn't realize who was waiting for me,  as if in a gossamer veil from an unforgettable distant past.         The nebulous past which beckoned me.         and who I was waiting for all my life -        like an ancient mariner awaits to sight                 a grassy island where he can harbour his ship!               Finally.. my love, I found you!            I found you the way I dreamed           about you in my fondest dreams.       You used to appear in my crimson dreams,       like a captivating fairy from my misty past,             just to disappear in obscurity!              I loved you when I didn't realize                         what love is!               Love...ultimate truth in life,     came tiptoeing, whispering...murmuring...tinkling        as if a drizzle of rain showered on us, a melody emanated from rhapsody of euphoric cuckoos,           an unbreakable bond was created.       no longer I am a lonely lost wandering traveller,           My castles are not made of sand any more! February 26, 2022 G - Give me a new poem - any form - Poetry Contest Sponsor: Constance La France Theme: Love FIRST PLACE Free Verse - Old or New Poetry Contest Sponsor: Joseph May

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Date: 8/30/2022 5:14:00 AM
Finding a love you dream of, Congrats on your win Malabika, Very nicely done
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Date: 3/14/2022 3:40:00 AM
I have read your winning entry and was delighted to see it on the winners' list. Congratulations on your place of honor. Way to go. Sara
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Date: 3/4/2022 1:05:00 AM
Mala, congratulations on your win in my Give Me A New Poem Contest with your beautiful poem, and I love your quote and image too ~Constance
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 3/4/2022 10:36:00 AM
Thank you, Constance. It's an honour - you are a very special sponsor.
Date: 3/2/2022 12:04:00 AM
Congratulations on a fine win.
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 3/4/2022 10:37:00 AM
Thank you, Terry. I am going to read yours too. Thanks for dropping by.
Date: 2/27/2022 7:48:00 AM
Finding a lost love is more than finding a treasure. I love your last line, " my castles are not made of sands anymore". You are a queen dear Mala.
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 2/27/2022 9:28:00 AM
Thank you, Dear JCB. Truly appreciate your inspiring comment.
Date: 2/26/2022 9:10:00 PM
" Love...ultimate truth in life, came softly whispering...murmuring...tinkling as if a drizzle of rain showered on us'.... Fantastic lines... Mala. Love the whole poem. Once we find love, the castles we build are no more sand castles!
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 2/27/2022 9:27:00 AM
Thank you, Valsa. Really appreciate your inspiring comment.
Date: 2/26/2022 6:42:00 PM
Such a lovely piece of writing, Mala, and I think you owe that little boy a debt of gratitude, for his sandcastles reminded you of yours. And yours are not made of sand. How delightful! I thoroughly enjoyed your work.
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 2/27/2022 9:26:00 AM
Thank you, Milton. Appreciate your beautiful comment.

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